Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We humans have a habit of behaving like sheep and join the flock when we believe in someone spiritual and pure. A fine write with faithful sentiments, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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We humans have a habit of behaving like sheep and join the flock when we believe in someone spiritual and pure. A fine write with faithful sentiments, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thanks Dolly
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi,
Lovely poem. I like the rhyme, the simple yet deeply moving story.
And most of all I like the last verse because it's full of hope. Something that we need in this crazy world of ours.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Hi,
Lovely poem. I like the rhyme, the simple yet deeply moving story.
And most of all I like the last verse because it's full of hope. Something that we need in this crazy world of ours.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Heather I am humbled by your gracious validation,
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I loved your poem. Well deserved stars.
Comment from lyenochka
Now that would be a stunning church service if Jesus walked in the door and addressed the congregation! I liked your story and the rhymes are good. I think there is a refrain and the quatrains are supposed to be in octets where the final lines are the same in all the stanzas. I haven't done mine yet but that's how I understand the form.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Now that would be a stunning church service if Jesus walked in the door and addressed the congregation! I liked your story and the rhymes are good. I think there is a refrain and the quatrains are supposed to be in octets where the final lines are the same in all the stanzas. I haven't done mine yet but that's how I understand the form.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thanks I will review the rules
Comment from mermaids
Your poem tells a spiritual story that is vivid and is positive that a new beginning will take place. I can see the congregation following Jesus out the door. There is a sense of peace in your words. This poetic form is new to me and it flows smoothly.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Your poem tells a spiritual story that is vivid and is positive that a new beginning will take place. I can see the congregation following Jesus out the door. There is a sense of peace in your words. This poetic form is new to me and it flows smoothly.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from livelylinda
JLR: interesting . . .the back story to this poem could be that one of those armed idiots walked into this church and shot everyone to death and this person was God to lead them all to Heaven. Reading it made me feel stronger. Linda
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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JLR: interesting . . .the back story to this poem could be that one of those armed idiots walked into this church and shot everyone to death and this person was God to lead them all to Heaven. Reading it made me feel stronger. Linda
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Linda, thank you I am smiling!
Comment from royowen
I was wondering if the last stanza 2nd eight wasn't quite the same as in the first eight, but none the less a beautifully but mystically written post Jim, but I love the "flock" bit, which puts a definite slant on it, I don't think people think they are, but we are really, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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I was wondering if the last stanza 2nd eight wasn't quite the same as in the first eight, but none the less a beautifully but mystically written post Jim, but I love the "flock" bit, which puts a definite slant on it, I don't think people think they are, but we are really, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you Roy. With all the crazies in our country with guns and churches I felt compelled to write about not giving up the hope that God, Jesus or even John the Baptist could come through the doors any Sunday -- would we follow? I like to believe my faith allow me to...
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Yep I?m sure
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club response is in good form, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
The image is a super pairing with your well thought out words.
Your story in a poem made much sense as to whom the visitor
was. I like the rhymes used, the smooth flow, and the ending.
Your poem is faith based and uplifting.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Your club response is in good form, JLR. I enjoyed reading it.
The image is a super pairing with your well thought out words.
Your story in a poem made much sense as to whom the visitor
was. I like the rhymes used, the smooth flow, and the ending.
Your poem is faith based and uplifting.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Jan, thank you. This was a very unique prompt, and I am not so certain I nailed it. Never-the-less I enjoyed the challenge so I again, thank you!
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem tells us s that we must be ready for a visit from Jesus by following his words and actions. This as a good entry for the Potlatch club.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This poem tells us s that we must be ready for a visit from Jesus by following his words and actions. This as a good entry for the Potlatch club.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thanks Joan.
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No problem ,JLR.
Joan
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a great story. I enjoyed reading your poem. If felt as if it were God or Jesus, however, the man with the limp had to be someone else. I do not think God or Jesus would walk around with a limp. Thank you for sharing your wonderful heartfelt story. Whoever he was, he had others to follow him.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This is a great story. I enjoyed reading your poem. If felt as if it were God or Jesus, however, the man with the limp had to be someone else. I do not think God or Jesus would walk around with a limp. Thank you for sharing your wonderful heartfelt story. Whoever he was, he had others to follow him.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Carolyn, I could not help but think about John as I wrote this as he may have just come out of the wilderness, weary and perhaps a bit footworn, causing the limp. 😊😊🙏🙏
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Have a great day.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
What an interesting poem! It's very creative and fits your required form well. This looks like a poem that would fit well in one of the contests about supernatural events. It seems to call for a follow-up one.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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What an interesting poem! It's very creative and fits your required form well. This looks like a poem that would fit well in one of the contests about supernatural events. It seems to call for a follow-up one.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Verna, thank you! I might give that a run in the future.