Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Good

Interesting entry for the Dialogue Only Prompt contest.

It was hard to read the dialog because you didn't separate each character and didn't add names of who is talking.

I wish you the best in the contest.

Gypsy

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 Comment Written 29-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

not supposed to name them, just dialogue. Others mentioned spacing. did it.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This dialogue-only story, Aww Damn!, is a funny exchange between Bill and Jim taht gives the reader a look at the class A manipulator who finally gets to borrow a tool. Good stuff.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

thanks, Bill

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

of what I have read you have a chance to run away with this contest. Good luck ..............................................................................................................................

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

thanks, Tom. I wish!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Very clever dialogue with a nice humorous twist at the end. It sounds like authentic speech and sounds natural and unforced. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

thanks, Wendy. I love writing dialogue. Much appreciated!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Ah, poor Jim fell for the "boat" trick. I don't remember any dialogue quite like that on Home Improvement. Usually the eyes-only neighbor gave him sound advice. I am glad that nothing got burned down. Fire doesn't get rid of weeds - it brings them back stronger! Great storytelling through dialogue!
Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

thanks, Helen. when I found that picture I didn't realize it was Home Improvement; just thought it was perfect for my characters, so wasn't trying to go for dialogue similar to that on the show. Hope it stood on its own. Anyway, thanks for your comments.

reply by lyenochka on 29-Jun-2022

It did stand on its own just fine.

reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022

thank you

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Great dialogue! Kept me entertained all the way through. I've heard conversations over the back fence not much different to this one, but not for a while. Neighbours don't seem to talk to one another anymore.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022

Thanks, Tony! I guess everybody's texting, instead. Too bad. a lost art.

Comment from JoannaN

Excellent

This is a past-paced dialogue between two neighbours. The language used is casual and appropriate for the described situation. Perhaps it would be a good idea to differentiate the characters visually, for instance by changing the font color for one of your voices.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2022

good idea. thanks

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a wonderfully humorous conversation, the lingo used is very well done adding to the image of the two characters, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

thank you!

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

An interesting bit of dialogue. It follows the theme of the t.v. show well. The dialogue is believable. The flow is good. The piece stays on point. The language is warm. The situation humorous.

Thanks for a good read.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

was just trying for a pix of two guys talking over a fence, but guess I got old Tim, didn't I? It didn't quite look like him to me.
Anyway, thanks for your neat comments.

reply by dellsworthpoet on 27-Jun-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

I thought this story was very funny and entertaining. The seemingly clueless neighbor turned out to be kind of clever after all. Thanks for sharing this here! Best wishes to you.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

thanks, Jessi. It was fun.