Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Superb poem about technology taking over our lives. The poem illustrates in a concise manner the elaboration on the theme in the note. And, yes, the mechanical monotone added to the poem. I think you might have used this device once before, but I'm not sure.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful words of support for the piece. I think there's more examples of this kind of style in Patterns, In my port. estory

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I would say you met your goal with this poem. I refuse to allow my computer or anything in my life to take that much control over it. Yes, some things attempt too, but I stop them. Thank you for sharing and I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and the wonderful comments supporting the piece. estory

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Exceptional

Estory,
Your poem illustrates how we can be cajoled into being lazy, and being controlled by computers, not the other way around.
You lull the reader into thinking computers are great,
your last line says it all. People become complacent as far as computers are concerned:
Why visit someone physically when there are all kinds of ways to do so virtually?
Excellent poem. Good luck with this one, author.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks again for the six star review. estory

Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

Technology has taken over the things we use every day. It would be great if they could control the thoughts of criminals and murderers. Thanks to computers, our lives have become less complicated when it comes to planning. We need to find a solution to world peace and security now. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and all the postive comments supporting the piece. estory

reply by Carolyn Dooley on 29-Jul-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from Regina Elliott

Excellent

I can commiserate with you
on this subject. I recall rotary
phones. If one was out and
they needed a phone, there
were phone booths everywhere. Libraries, doctor
offices, lawyers offices, everything was written on paper such as patient charts.
The typewriters were clunky.
Now, everything is so techno-
logical. I must admit I find my
smartphone a good source
of information as I don't have
a computer. When I was a kid
encyclopedias were the big
source of information. My
grandkids love gaming on
their tablets but we've begun
limiting the time they spend
on them. I divide artwork,
writing, and singing so I'm
not on my phone all the time.
Your writing is eloquent and
well penned. I liked reading
it. Brought back memories
too. Have a great upcoming
weekend. ~

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks for the wonderful words of sympathy with my theme here. I thought you eloquently expressed what I was trying to get across here. estory

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words are engaging, thought provoking, interesting, strong, descriptive and creative. As I read these words I was able to understand
this author's point. Then I read the author's notes - which said it all!
The poem flows and connects well. The poem is Awesome!

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks for the positive comments supporting the piece and your over the top review estory

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

It's the trade off, isn't it? We accept the limiting and the funneling because things are easier. The most worrying thing for me is the auto filtering of news traffic, because we end up only reading things we already agree with, and start believing everyone thinks the same way. This is why everyone thinks they are ignored or victimised or part of the mythical silent majority.

I enjoyed your thoughtful piece.

Mike

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the piece. So glad it got so many people thinking about this. i like to make people think. estory