Bad Boy Ric
Lunch at the HotHouse, part two.35 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello again Terry, I have nothing to say but thanks for another good story...oh and I never heard of any national association of Single women, that was funny, can't wait to read some more. Will Jennifer give in, cause she's a bad girl? I guess we shall see. have a good one.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Hello again Terry, I have nothing to say but thanks for another good story...oh and I never heard of any national association of Single women, that was funny, can't wait to read some more. Will Jennifer give in, cause she's a bad girl? I guess we shall see. have a good one.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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LOL, thank you I never heard of either. There are two more installments. The next one will Sunday and the final one early next week. Thanks, Terry.
Comment from Susan Newell
Terry,
This is becoming more interesting. Ric seems like a good guy, and of course if he has a card attesting to such, it must be true. I was a little confused. Was Ann admitting to being Lulu? A few notes follow.
Sue
Ric walked into the HotHouse Eating and Drinking Emporium and sat at the bar looked at the bartender, -- I'd put a comma after "bar"
"Thank you very much, mam." ==> ma'am (apostrophe replaces D)
"Don't mam me; -- as above
"I asked her name, She said, 'Lulu.' -- missing ending double quotes: ==> she
She thinks, Mid-afternoon of the first day of the rest of her life. Ric is cute, and he is only going to be here for three weeks. ==> Midafternoon . . . rest of my life (3 legit dictionaries show it as one word; other sources show as two words, or hyphenated.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Terry,
This is becoming more interesting. Ric seems like a good guy, and of course if he has a card attesting to such, it must be true. I was a little confused. Was Ann admitting to being Lulu? A few notes follow.
Sue
Ric walked into the HotHouse Eating and Drinking Emporium and sat at the bar looked at the bartender, -- I'd put a comma after "bar"
"Thank you very much, mam." ==> ma'am (apostrophe replaces D)
"Don't mam me; -- as above
"I asked her name, She said, 'Lulu.' -- missing ending double quotes: ==> she
She thinks, Mid-afternoon of the first day of the rest of her life. Ric is cute, and he is only going to be here for three weeks. ==> Midafternoon . . . rest of my life (3 legit dictionaries show it as one word; other sources show as two words, or hyphenated.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Sue, thank you for reading and your edit suggestion. Ann is not Lulu. I didn't end with double quotation marks after Lulu because Hollis continues to speak the following line; you taught me that. Terry.
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Hmm.Looks like I missed continuing speech. Herein lies the confusion; suggest punctuation and line changes as follow.
Hollis shrugs his shoulders, "I asked her name. She said, 'Lulu.' I said, 'Lulu?' She said, 'Yep for tonight anyway.'"
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Interesting that is the I originally wrote it and someone, Helen I think didn't like it. So here I am again.
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Sounds like two to one in oir favor. :-)
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LOL
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
My second HotHouse story and already I feel like I would like to go there and meet these people. They seem like people I would like a lot. Your story really lives. More, please!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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My second HotHouse story and already I feel like I would like to go there and meet these people. They seem like people I would like a lot. Your story really lives. More, please!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Malcolm, thank you, come on down, first drink is on the house! The next installment will be Sunday and the last one next week. Terry
Comment from Thomas Blanks
I enjoyed the story for two main reasons: I know what Hamm's beer tastes like (not bad). "From the land of sky-blue water!" And I know the words to "Gentle on my mind" by heart and sing along with Glen when I listen to it on my iPhone. The best line... "I dip my cup of soup back from a gurglin' cracklin' cauldron in some train yard..."
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed the story for two main reasons: I know what Hamm's beer tastes like (not bad). "From the land of sky-blue water!" And I know the words to "Gentle on my mind" by heart and sing along with Glen when I listen to it on my iPhone. The best line... "I dip my cup of soup back from a gurglin' cracklin' cauldron in some train yard..."
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Thomas, thank you for the six stars. I was wondering yesterday how you are. I haven't seen you lately. Thank you for the review, and you are right about Hamms, and Glen's song. I always thought their clocks were way cool. Terry.
Comment from Jay Squires
You do have a way with light, bantering-type fiction, Terry. And I mean that in the best sense. The reader isn't expecting any earth-shattering revelations. It's your typical Texas bar chatter from a bar where everyone knows your name. Good stuff!
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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You do have a way with light, bantering-type fiction, Terry. And I mean that in the best sense. The reader isn't expecting any earth-shattering revelations. It's your typical Texas bar chatter from a bar where everyone knows your name. Good stuff!
Jay
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Jay, thank you very much kind Sir! You come on over and sit a spell anytime you want, drinks on the house. Terry.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much. I wonder if Ric has met his match. You did a great job as always, and I didn't see one thing out of place. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much. I wonder if Ric has met his match. You did a great job as always, and I didn't see one thing out of place. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Shirley, thank you for your very kind comments. There are two more installments. I hope you like them as well. Terry.
Comment from LJbutterfly
You put the reader directly in the story. The sandwich sounded yummy and I wish I could hear The Cincinnati Red Rockers at the state fair. The story is interesting and the dialogue is realistic. An enjoyable read.
Note: Quotation marks are used to indicate a person is talking. When a person is thinking, their thoughts are italicized.
Mam is spelled ma'am.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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You put the reader directly in the story. The sandwich sounded yummy and I wish I could hear The Cincinnati Red Rockers at the state fair. The story is interesting and the dialogue is realistic. An enjoyable read.
Note: Quotation marks are used to indicate a person is talking. When a person is thinking, their thoughts are italicized.
Mam is spelled ma'am.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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First, I am delighted you are liking the story. Two more installments to come. The sandwich is a real one, and was sold at the State Fair this year and year-round in a small restaurant in East Dallas. It is the germ of the idea for the story.
Second, thank you for the italicized input. I have never heard it before but will use it now! Terry.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
As usual you punch the amusing time clock. I enjoy Evelyn's attitude about the neighbor lady. (Her proof that it's better if they don't come back.) Ric sounds like jennifer's cup of tea, for three weeks, but I suspect she is beginning to worry about running out of time.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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As usual you punch the amusing time clock. I enjoy Evelyn's attitude about the neighbor lady. (Her proof that it's better if they don't come back.) Ric sounds like jennifer's cup of tea, for three weeks, but I suspect she is beginning to worry about running out of time.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Carol, thank you very much for having some fun with my story. Two more parts left. Terry.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am really liking this HotHouse Eating and Drinking Emporium. Ric is an interesting character, as all the rest. For thought you should italics.
Jennifer smiles and says, (Can stop with a period after 'smiles' and omit 'and says')
"No, Burl you are a banker. (for natural dialogue, 'you're')
Burl says, "Oh Jennifer, I would never leave you." (I'd)
It will be fun with lots of dancing." (It'll)
"Ric, I would love to have a ticket to have my world rocked, uh, I mean I would love to see your band." (both 'I'd")
Ric stands up and says, (Can stop with a period after 'up' and omit 'and says')
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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I am really liking this HotHouse Eating and Drinking Emporium. Ric is an interesting character, as all the rest. For thought you should italics.
Jennifer smiles and says, (Can stop with a period after 'smiles' and omit 'and says')
"No, Burl you are a banker. (for natural dialogue, 'you're')
Burl says, "Oh Jennifer, I would never leave you." (I'd)
It will be fun with lots of dancing." (It'll)
"Ric, I would love to have a ticket to have my world rocked, uh, I mean I would love to see your band." (both 'I'd")
Ric stands up and says, (Can stop with a period after 'up' and omit 'and says')
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Barbara, thank you for the edits and for reading my story. There will be two more parts, I am thinking you will like part three.
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I know I will.
Comment from Ric Myworld
ROFLMAO! I'm sure glad you remembered to say "any resemblance to anyone living or dead or named Ric on Fanstory is purely coincidental." I did travel around playing music as a young man, and we played a variety of music. But I've often been called a black man in a white man's body for my musical tastes. But believe it or not, I usually slipped out the backdoor to avoid any adorning fans. I was never into the groupy type, worried where they might have been last night. So, I married my childhood sweetheart, the nice girl who wouldn't do anything wrong. Ten-years later, she still wouldn't. Thanks for sharing, Terry. I wish I had another six for this one.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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ROFLMAO! I'm sure glad you remembered to say "any resemblance to anyone living or dead or named Ric on Fanstory is purely coincidental." I did travel around playing music as a young man, and we played a variety of music. But I've often been called a black man in a white man's body for my musical tastes. But believe it or not, I usually slipped out the backdoor to avoid any adorning fans. I was never into the groupy type, worried where they might have been last night. So, I married my childhood sweetheart, the nice girl who wouldn't do anything wrong. Ten-years later, she still wouldn't. Thanks for sharing, Terry. I wish I had another six for this one.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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LOL, Ric, there are now four guys who also were in a band reading this story. Who would have thought it? I love your sense of humor about it. Clearly, I know nothing of your rock or blues days. Thanks for letting me use your name. There will be no embrassement.
There are two more parts. I hope you like them as much. Terry.
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I'm sure I'll enjoy them. People have told stories about me my whole life. Many were out and out lies or embellished, but there were plenty I wish were true. LOL
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In the last episode, set for next week, you get to do a soulful rendition of an Otis Redding song, it's not Dock of the Bay, and you will be playing your Martin D 28.
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LOL. Well, I can tell where the base of musical interests lie with a big box Martin. Looking forward to reading it. :-)
