God Called
God came to recover his soul31 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I hope he was friendly too! What a well-written, well-rhymed poem about life and loss and "moving on" for this "old coot." I really enjoyed reading it, and I love the old-time picture and the cursive font that you used.
One little nit:
On the 6th line, you want to say, "Only the Lord knows how hard he cried."
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I hope he was friendly too! What a well-written, well-rhymed poem about life and loss and "moving on" for this "old coot." I really enjoyed reading it, and I love the old-time picture and the cursive font that you used.
One little nit:
On the 6th line, you want to say, "Only the Lord knows how hard he cried."
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Excellent artwork and nice presentation, Willie.
-You did a good job with the poem and tell a good story.
-Effective imagery and rhyme with a smooth flow of ideas.
-You make a good point with the line about needing company.
-It's too bad that didn't make a difference for him.
-Unfortunately, he probably represents more people that we don't hear about.
-I like the ending about being "friendly, when God came to call."
-Well done.
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-Excellent artwork and nice presentation, Willie.
-You did a good job with the poem and tell a good story.
-Effective imagery and rhyme with a smooth flow of ideas.
-You make a good point with the line about needing company.
-It's too bad that didn't make a difference for him.
-Unfortunately, he probably represents more people that we don't hear about.
-I like the ending about being "friendly, when God came to call."
-Well done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Willie,
Nice ode to an old neighbor by the speaker. It is well written. I like the font and the sketch
Well I guess his friends were right about suicide. It is sad that people feel so alone even with friends that seems to care and help. I hope he is friendly with God too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
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Hi Willie,
Nice ode to an old neighbor by the speaker. It is well written. I like the font and the sketch
Well I guess his friends were right about suicide. It is sad that people feel so alone even with friends that seems to care and help. I hope he is friendly with God too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from JLR
Willie, as I am getting to be seen as an old timer, who grew up with Gunsmoke and Bonanza I was hooked from the very beginning to the ending with your always precise rhyming cadence and the graphic with the old western"esk" font added to the pleasure on reading this lament.
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Willie, as I am getting to be seen as an old timer, who grew up with Gunsmoke and Bonanza I was hooked from the very beginning to the ending with your always precise rhyming cadence and the graphic with the old western"esk" font added to the pleasure on reading this lament.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from jmdg1954
This cannot be the story of many a man in all phases of life.
The loss of your dearest love, your friend, your other half can be devastating. Each person handles it in their own way.
I enjoyed your poem, written in words so I didn't need a dictionary by my side.
We'll done, John
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This cannot be the story of many a man in all phases of life.
The loss of your dearest love, your friend, your other half can be devastating. Each person handles it in their own way.
I enjoyed your poem, written in words so I didn't need a dictionary by my side.
We'll done, John
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Ricky1024
"God Called"
A Western poem from 1922 was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
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"God Called"
A Western poem from 1922 was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a melancholy write about a man who lost his life an then couldn't cope. Your story started off very positive, but the man's mood slowly took a tumble until he shot himself, how very sad.
Just one suggestion for you Willie, for this line:
(Only the Lord know(s) how hard he cried)
Love Dolly x
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This is a melancholy write about a man who lost his life an then couldn't cope. Your story started off very positive, but the man's mood slowly took a tumble until he shot himself, how very sad.
Just one suggestion for you Willie, for this line:
(Only the Lord know(s) how hard he cried)
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
Comment from Zue65
I enjoyed the rhythmical patterns in this piece. As you read the lines, gliding on your mouth you visualize the Western stories of old. The message is also inspiring for it celebrated the truth that our relationship with God is far more important than our temporal needs. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed the rhythmical patterns in this piece. As you read the lines, gliding on your mouth you visualize the Western stories of old. The message is also inspiring for it celebrated the truth that our relationship with God is far more important than our temporal needs. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from royowen
What a very cute post Willie, that's one thing we'll never know whether he behaved civilly toward God or not, whether he blamed God for taking away Alice. I couldn't help but admire this fine post my friend, well done, blessings Roy
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What a very cute post Willie, that's one thing we'll never know whether he behaved civilly toward God or not, whether he blamed God for taking away Alice. I couldn't help but admire this fine post my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from nomi338
Sometimes awkwardness around people is mistaken for unfriendliness. The good news is God knows the difference. Those who paid him kindness did God a favor for they acted in a way suggested by scriptures.
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Sometimes awkwardness around people is mistaken for unfriendliness. The good news is God knows the difference. Those who paid him kindness did God a favor for they acted in a way suggested by scriptures.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
