Artificial Intelligence
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Beyond the Sky"A critique of technology
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Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have written an engaging commentary on our world today. We are so busy tracking everything, we truly don't see the forest for the trees. And we don't see each other. Thanks for this thought-provoking essay. Check for typo in the second line.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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You have written an engaging commentary on our world today. We are so busy tracking everything, we truly don't see the forest for the trees. And we don't see each other. Thanks for this thought-provoking essay. Check for typo in the second line.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and I like to make people think. So I guess I succeeded. It is controversial and the debate is there too over this issue. estory
Comment from Jesse James Doty
As always you make some very good points. But I need to say that I would like to see this prose poetry condensed just a little bit into one cohesive ball ready to be read by more readers who will get the gist of what you are saying and then review you with helpful hints and give suggestions on how to improve this prophetic piece.
Have a wonderful day and remember to look up into the sky to see things clearly and not all the terrible things you worry about maybe too much.
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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As always you make some very good points. But I need to say that I would like to see this prose poetry condensed just a little bit into one cohesive ball ready to be read by more readers who will get the gist of what you are saying and then review you with helpful hints and give suggestions on how to improve this prophetic piece.
Have a wonderful day and remember to look up into the sky to see things clearly and not all the terrible things you worry about maybe too much.
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your perspective on the piece. Not everyone is agreeing with me, but at least I got people thinking and thats what I like to do. estory
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This is a noble gesture.
Jesse
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The energy has to come from somewhere as life means we are awake and make a difference. I think you mean (look) in the second line. We have enormous resources on earth and nothing goes unnoticed these days, I enjoyed the sentiment here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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The energy has to come from somewhere as life means we are awake and make a difference. I think you mean (look) in the second line. We have enormous resources on earth and nothing goes unnoticed these days, I enjoyed the sentiment here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your wonderful words of support for my poem. estory
Comment from Gloria ....
I actually really like prose poetry and you have done a fine job of it here. Posing the question through a series of observations that not only has our planet become overpopulated with people, but also the vistas with surveillance objects we have sent into space to obscure the vision of our joy. We cannot see the stars anymore is particularly prevalent in big cities.
Humankind and planet Earth is undergoing a great transition because of the unbridled and often negative effects of big tech IMO.
Excellent social commentary here estory.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I actually really like prose poetry and you have done a fine job of it here. Posing the question through a series of observations that not only has our planet become overpopulated with people, but also the vistas with surveillance objects we have sent into space to obscure the vision of our joy. We cannot see the stars anymore is particularly prevalent in big cities.
Humankind and planet Earth is undergoing a great transition because of the unbridled and often negative effects of big tech IMO.
Excellent social commentary here estory.
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your words of support for my theme as well as the poetry. I am glad it got so many people thinking. And worked up in some cases...estory
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Estory,
Your poem is right on the mark. We depend on machines now, instead of each other.
Do we have to worry about falling space debris when those satellites conk out.
You've taken an excellent philosophical view of the downside of progress.
Excellently written.
Good luck,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Estory,
Your poem is right on the mark. We depend on machines now, instead of each other.
Do we have to worry about falling space debris when those satellites conk out.
You've taken an excellent philosophical view of the downside of progress.
Excellently written.
Good luck,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your support of my poem. I appreciate it. estory
Comment from Sally Law
I can't see the stars anymore with my deteriorating eyesight but I can lock onto the moon with my high range telescope. So much space trash. Ultimately it will fall.
Blessings for sharing!
Sal :))
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I can't see the stars anymore with my deteriorating eyesight but I can lock onto the moon with my high range telescope. So much space trash. Ultimately it will fall.
Blessings for sharing!
Sal :))
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful words of support for my poem. I appreciate all the support over all the years. estory
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is well-written and definitely a thinking piece. To be honest, I had never really thought about this before.
Technology drives the train that is the Earth. They have talked of shooting all of the belt generated battery acid into space. Makes one wonder how long before we start polluting the moon. Where men go, garbage follows.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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This is well-written and definitely a thinking piece. To be honest, I had never really thought about this before.
Technology drives the train that is the Earth. They have talked of shooting all of the belt generated battery acid into space. Makes one wonder how long before we start polluting the moon. Where men go, garbage follows.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and my sentiments exactly. But not everyone agrees. I think the tech world, the artificial world, is in many ways a soulless world estory
Comment from Ricky1024
"Beyond the Sky"
Nicely written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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"Beyond the Sky"
Nicely written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your encouraging comments about the construction of this piece. estory
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am in complete agreement with you and very well written poem. It's sad what man has done to our planet. I believe there are other planets out there. I wonder if their humans or whatever have destroyed theirs like we did ours. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I am in complete agreement with you and very well written poem. It's sad what man has done to our planet. I believe there are other planets out there. I wonder if their humans or whatever have destroyed theirs like we did ours. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your comments supporting my theme here. A couple of people are not in agreement, but the debate is healthy and i like to make people think. So a success to me. estory
Comment from royowen
I think there's still enough of a sky to see and gaze into that ocean of nothingness interspersed by the wonder of blinking lights, not of satellites but the timeless stars, I can understand living in the city, but not in the country, although the cities are encroaching, where we live now, is where I romped as a child, beautifully written, reflections, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : We (kook) up to the sky. Look?
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I think there's still enough of a sky to see and gaze into that ocean of nothingness interspersed by the wonder of blinking lights, not of satellites but the timeless stars, I can understand living in the city, but not in the country, although the cities are encroaching, where we live now, is where I romped as a child, beautifully written, reflections, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : We (kook) up to the sky. Look?
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on my provocative piece. estory
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Well done
