The Magic Speaks for Itself
All it takes is a magic show22 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
I can see why Billy became a star among his friends. He must have been scared to death to be part of the show. I never understood that slight of hand stuff, maybe that's why it's fun to watch.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I can see why Billy became a star among his friends. He must have been scared to death to be part of the show. I never understood that slight of hand stuff, maybe that's why it's fun to watch.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Mary for a magical review.
John
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You are welcome.
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent story that kids would love. There was a children's story contest. I'm wondering why you didn't enter it unless you missed the deadline. It is a good thing when a shy new kid gets a break and suddenly everyone thinks of him as a herol
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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This is an excellent story that kids would love. There was a children's story contest. I'm wondering why you didn't enter it unless you missed the deadline. It is a good thing when a shy new kid gets a break and suddenly everyone thinks of him as a herol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I must?ve missed the contest. Maybe next time.
Thanks for this great review.
John
Comment from w.j.debi
I thought Joey was a goner for certain when the saw was all red. Great job throwing in the surprise that he did survive and is now the coolest kid on the block. Welcome to the neighborhood, Joey!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I thought Joey was a goner for certain when the saw was all red. Great job throwing in the surprise that he did survive and is now the coolest kid on the block. Welcome to the neighborhood, Joey!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for a great review. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, you had me scared that something went wrong with the magician's trick of sawing up Joey! I guess the red fluid was part of the "magic" after all. What a great way for Joey to be launched from new kid to stardom! Enjoyed your story.
Comments:
trying to get his friends attention. (friend's or friends' )
more friend's when school started. (friends)
Let's go, [to the?] magic show at old man
on the magicians table. (magician's)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Oh, you had me scared that something went wrong with the magician's trick of sawing up Joey! I guess the red fluid was part of the "magic" after all. What a great way for Joey to be launched from new kid to stardom! Enjoyed your story.
Comments:
trying to get his friends attention. (friend's or friends' )
more friend's when school started. (friends)
Let's go, [to the?] magic show at old man
on the magicians table. (magician's)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Helen for those corrections. I have to be more diligent. I read these over and over and still miss them.
Thank you,
John
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Don't worry. I think Autocorrect doesn't know about when to use apostrophes and then sprinkles them in for no reason!
Comment from Ric Myworld
We never know what kids might say or do and for what reasons. We just have to be careful and not take any of it too seriously until we can separate the fiction from reality. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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We never know what kids might say or do and for what reasons. We just have to be careful and not take any of it too seriously until we can separate the fiction from reality. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Just a short kids story I had in mind. Thanks for reading.
John
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading. Being the new kid is hard. I'm glad Billy helped Joey become accepted.
Billy looked around. "Come on, follow me," (I've been told my editors not to use the word 'look' unless absolutely necessary because there are so many other words to describe the scene. Billy glanced around. Billy scanned the area. Billy searched the area. Just a few.)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading. Being the new kid is hard. I'm glad Billy helped Joey become accepted.
Billy looked around. "Come on, follow me," (I've been told my editors not to use the word 'look' unless absolutely necessary because there are so many other words to describe the scene. Billy glanced around. Billy scanned the area. Billy searched the area. Just a few.)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reading this post and for the incite on the word "look".
Always appreciate these tips.
John
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, what a lovely story, John! Now Joey has so many friends, and won't be shy again. You fooled me for a minute, I thought he'd died of a heart attack until his eyes 'popped open' LOL!!! This is a story that all kids would enjoy, and it had just the right amount of tension in it for the younger children. I could see them standing on the lawn holding their breath waiting to see if Joey was sawn in half. Perfect, my friend, don't change a thing!!!! I wish I had a six for you. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Aw, what a lovely story, John! Now Joey has so many friends, and won't be shy again. You fooled me for a minute, I thought he'd died of a heart attack until his eyes 'popped open' LOL!!! This is a story that all kids would enjoy, and it had just the right amount of tension in it for the younger children. I could see them standing on the lawn holding their breath waiting to see if Joey was sawn in half. Perfect, my friend, don't change a thing!!!! I wish I had a six for you. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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A virtual six from you, Sandra, well worth it in my level of confidence.
Thanks for reading.
John
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I read your reviews. I'd skip one of them, totally untrue. You were lucky. Lee, (humpwhistle) and I got a 4! 😊
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I?m confused? I don?t follow your comment. Was it meant for me?
John
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I?m confused? I don?t follow your comment. Was it meant for me?
John
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I just checked. I don't know about you being confused, John, it's more me! I had two laptops going and was chatting to someone else who had received a rude, quite nasty review. That reply was meant for her. :( I've shut down one laptop now. Sorry about that. 😭😭xxx
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Nasty reviews aren?t called for, not here. I?ve had a few. We?re trying to build a friendly atmosphere. There?s a right way of doing that. I guess that reviewer chose the wrong way.
Have a great day.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well, this surely is a pleasant story for smaller children, though shorter than usual and yet again, the golden books from my era were mostly filled with with sketches. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Well, this surely is a pleasant story for smaller children, though shorter than usual and yet again, the golden books from my era were mostly filled with with sketches. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Golden Books? I still have a few from when I was a kid plus do my any from my kids?
Thank you for a great review.
John
Comment from Mintybee
This was a roller coaster ride of a story. It was a cute story about a magic show, then teased at having a horror twist, then went back to fun again. It was certainly interesting! There are a few times you forgot the possessive apostrophe, friends instead of friend's, and Lazards instead of Lazard's. I like the ending - that Billy's risk paid off and Joey is now a star in the neighbourhood. I like the details you added, like giving children improper grammar, and various odd objects that were pulled from the hat, and that Billy knew a secret spot to cut through the hedges. It was an enjoyable read.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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This was a roller coaster ride of a story. It was a cute story about a magic show, then teased at having a horror twist, then went back to fun again. It was certainly interesting! There are a few times you forgot the possessive apostrophe, friends instead of friend's, and Lazards instead of Lazard's. I like the ending - that Billy's risk paid off and Joey is now a star in the neighbourhood. I like the details you added, like giving children improper grammar, and various odd objects that were pulled from the hat, and that Billy knew a secret spot to cut through the hedges. It was an enjoyable read.
Mintybee
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Minty. I went back and made a bunch of those corrections you pointed out. I appreciate it.
Thank you for reading.
John
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yes, there was some suspense but not very much as everyone has seen the man sawed in half trick before. This was fun and enjoyable to read but the surprise was lacking. There were no surprises worth the read I am sorry to say.
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Yes, there was some suspense but not very much as everyone has seen the man sawed in half trick before. This was fun and enjoyable to read but the surprise was lacking. There were no surprises worth the read I am sorry to say.
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you Jesse for reading and commenting. For adults sure, but with younger kids who may never have seen this trick I think there was a surprise.
Thank you for stopping by.
John
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I am an adult, so I gave you my honest reaction. I hope you don't mind my honesty.
Jesse
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I appreciate your honesty. I changed the category to children instead of general.
Hopefully that may avoid confusion.
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Good idea!
