Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Seasons of the Mind - III"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
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Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Seasons of the Mind III, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, creates a sight for the readers of a morning when the pull of God on the planet is felt with every dew drop raised back up to the sky.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
This poem, Seasons of the Mind III, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, creates a sight for the readers of a morning when the pull of God on the planet is felt with every dew drop raised back up to the sky.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks Bill! 🙏🙏
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This poem has beautiful imagery and thought. I really like it. I have one suggestion: a different adjective that "musty." I know that means wet, but it's more a mildewed kind of damp, and your flowers indicate "fragrant." (If you get tired of my suggestions, just tell me!)
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
This poem has beautiful imagery and thought. I really like it. I have one suggestion: a different adjective that "musty." I know that means wet, but it's more a mildewed kind of damp, and your flowers indicate "fragrant." (If you get tired of my suggestions, just tell me!)
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks Verna. Never👌👌👌👌
Comment from Tom Horonzy
My, you sure have won a lot of ribbons, the last six months. You must be doing something right or have a ,assive clan of fans following you day and night. All that said, with no ill intent intended, this piece seems, as I read it, to be a little choppy. Don't ask me why, I ain't no college professor. ;-))
In addition, we are neighbors. You, thar in Flat Rock, near Carl Sandburg and mi down the mountain in Green Creek, Polk County. Hi neighbor!
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
My, you sure have won a lot of ribbons, the last six months. You must be doing something right or have a ,assive clan of fans following you day and night. All that said, with no ill intent intended, this piece seems, as I read it, to be a little choppy. Don't ask me why, I ain't no college professor. ;-))
In addition, we are neighbors. You, thar in Flat Rock, near Carl Sandburg and mi down the mountain in Green Creek, Polk County. Hi neighbor!
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks Tom, I did rush this I realize and plan to do a heavy edit! Thanks neighbor!
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The meat is there. You need only to cleanse it from the bone.
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Reposted a revision.