Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Seasons of the Body - II"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A fine entry for the NaPoWriMo challenge.
Being old is good, it means we are alive. I just want to stay as healthy as possible.
Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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A fine entry for the NaPoWriMo challenge.
Being old is good, it means we are alive. I just want to stay as healthy as possible.
Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you Gypsy, you are in the competition also, so good luck to you..
Comment from royowen
I remember saying just a few weeks ago, there's nothing better as a good example to the young, is once you've found a good road to travel, keep going, though there be potholes, snares and traps, persistence is the best example to others. But it must have love at its core, beautifully written again Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I remember saying just a few weeks ago, there's nothing better as a good example to the young, is once you've found a good road to travel, keep going, though there be potholes, snares and traps, persistence is the best example to others. But it must have love at its core, beautifully written again Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you Roy, back tomorrow...
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See you then
Comment from patcelaw
My friend my body. Has gotten much stronger in the past five years. Part of the reason is stronger is because I have lost 115 pounds. I also walked over 3 miles a day I eat and drink as I should. It has been good to get my body back in shape after so many years of feeling just totally worn out. Patricia, I enjoyed your poem very much. It speaks to me as an old person.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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My friend my body. Has gotten much stronger in the past five years. Part of the reason is stronger is because I have lost 115 pounds. I also walked over 3 miles a day I eat and drink as I should. It has been good to get my body back in shape after so many years of feeling just totally worn out. Patricia, I enjoyed your poem very much. It speaks to me as an old person.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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Patricia, what a tremendous and wonderful feeling of freedom you have worked so hard to attain. I have struggles with physical weight issues my whole life. Every one of my parents and siblings have already died far too young due to bad hearts resulting from obesity complications. I am a hard core intermittent faster 19-20 hours between meals each day and largely vegan. My sincere CONGRATULATIONS.... Jim
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure who your great friend is here Jim but you pay a fine tribute to him. He sounds strong and forthright, and supportive too, a fine post for the April challenge, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Not sure who your great friend is here Jim but you pay a fine tribute to him. He sounds strong and forthright, and supportive too, a fine post for the April challenge, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Dolly, I call my body my friend and yes It is strong and forthright. Big Smiles...
Comment from nomi338
The things we have subjected our bodies to. The things our mind and body have endured. The things our eyes have viewed. How many times has my body violently rejected the horrible poisons I have imbibed in search of God knows what. We owe our bodies so many apologies. If you are listening, I am sorry.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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The things we have subjected our bodies to. The things our mind and body have endured. The things our eyes have viewed. How many times has my body violently rejected the horrible poisons I have imbibed in search of God knows what. We owe our bodies so many apologies. If you are listening, I am sorry.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Nomi, yes, innumerable in number, the assaults all done most often for vain reasons.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a fun tribute to old age. I know of what you speak . . . well. I laughed at the one cup of coffee in the morning. Yep - know that, too. I understand tired and rusted, too. Good job!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This is a fun tribute to old age. I know of what you speak . . . well. I laughed at the one cup of coffee in the morning. Yep - know that, too. I understand tired and rusted, too. Good job!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Verna, thank you for putting up with my silliness. Jim
Comment from Evelyn Hopkins
I really like your imagery and use of poetic words. It fits this poem very well and the image also captures the poem. Good luck in the contest. Hope all is well. Have a good day!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I really like your imagery and use of poetic words. It fits this poem very well and the image also captures the poem. Good luck in the contest. Hope all is well. Have a good day!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Evelyn, thank you for putting up with my silliness. Jim
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Quite interesting poem in the sense that the depicted friend is oneself. I like the pace and the rhyming pattern. There are a few 'iambic' meters in there, and a syllable over the pentameter in one instance. But overall I really enjoyed it!!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Quite interesting poem in the sense that the depicted friend is oneself. I like the pace and the rhyming pattern. There are a few 'iambic' meters in there, and a syllable over the pentameter in one instance. But overall I really enjoyed it!!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Mario caught the one over, I will work on the iams... thanks
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You did a great poem
Comment from Ben Colder
Yes, it is for sure. The measure of time for the old, like me. Sounds like my daily actions. Tired, yes, at 85 but getting there. Nothing wrong with this write. Describes me very well. LOL.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Yes, it is for sure. The measure of time for the old, like me. Sounds like my daily actions. Tired, yes, at 85 but getting there. Nothing wrong with this write. Describes me very well. LOL.
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Ben, thank you for putting up with my silliness. Jim
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Though the entire piece is good my favorite is stanza two as I understand it by living it. Well done.
What a great friend. Nighttime, daytime; Trusted
Sometimes dented, broken, ailing, just tired.
Clearly treasured, like old cars, but rusted.
Wintry morns bring warnings; old bones retired.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Though the entire piece is good my favorite is stanza two as I understand it by living it. Well done.
What a great friend. Nighttime, daytime; Trusted
Sometimes dented, broken, ailing, just tired.
Clearly treasured, like old cars, but rusted.
Wintry morns bring warnings; old bones retired.
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Tom, thank you for putting up with my silliness. Jim