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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Beautiful poem for your son and daughter. They are a handsome couple. I like the picture.

Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 02-May-2023


reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Hi Gypsy, and as always, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem for Jason and Mel. I am very blessed with family and friends. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Comment from Julie Lau
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Congratulations on producing another lovely poem dedicated to a loved one's special day. It is interesting to discover the different forms a poem can take and that they all have names! All the best, you wonderful, hardworking girl! Julie L x

 Comment Written 02-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Lol, I hear ya Julie. I have just these last few years come to know some of the many forms of poetry. And I do love the monorhyme where your rhymes must all have the same ending, but the Merry~go~Rhyme is my baby, as it has the three rules of must rhyme, be fun and something in between the four stanza to make them go up and down like a carousel. Monorhymes are optional tho. I love that we have gotten to be such great friends and cannot wait to be able to read more of your work. Thanks for the awesome review my sweet friend. You are the greatest!!!!
reply by Julie Lau on 03-May-2023
    I have written at least one story poem that goes abcbdd. It's rather long, but I'll submit it sometime. I guess you are about to discover No Idea Chapt. 5. Warning: it's a bit racy!
Comment from jmdg1954
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Wow. What a beautiful couple those two make!

She looks like she could be your NOT MUCH younger sister, no less daughter-in-law!

A great gift you presented them with your poem, Debi.
I'm sure they were thrilled to receive it!

Cheers to May and it's babies...
John

 Comment Written 02-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Oh John, you do realize that flattery never gets you anywhere? It gets you everywhere! Hehe! You are so sweet! Thanks for the kind comments!
    (big smile!)
Comment from ESOSTINE
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A beautiful birthday tribute to the duo of Jason and Mel. I am pretty sure they will be glad to read this great piece packed with kind words and good wishes. I join to wish them more love and fulfilment. Well done, dear Debi. I enjoyed reading every bit of it, the easy flowing pace and unforced rhymes. My regards.

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Thank hiu you so much for your very kind words for my poem. They are so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Raul1
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You are right that the biggest reward is the prayer for which God wants all of us to be good children. We must obey our Lord. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Thank you so much for your very kind words for my poem. They are so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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What a great and lovely birthday card to your son and daughter-in-law. I am sure it is one that they will treasure forever.
Great picture and word style to show your love and pride for and in them.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Thank you so much for your very kind words for my poem. They are so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from Wendy G
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My daughter is May 8 and my son-in-law is May 16, and they married on May 4 so we too have a set of celebrations for May. Love your poem. How wonderful for them to be right next door! (Mine are eight hours drive away.)

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 01-May-2023
    You have a bunch too! I would hate to be 8 hours away. I can see why May 's so popular though cause it is the gateway to summer. How awesome is the month that brings love for mothers too! Do you have Mother's Day? Glen and I are married forty nine years on May 18. Where did the years go?
    Thanks my dear friend for your sweet review and kind words.

reply by Wendy G on 01-May-2023
    Lol. May is the gateway to winter for us in Australia - but we prefer not to be too heavily pregnant during the extremely hot summer months! Yes we do have Mothers Day as well, on the second Sunday of May (which this year is the birthday of a granddaughter, who'll turn five.) So yes, May is busy!
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    Oh my, but a precious five year old?s birthday on MD, I?d say you hit the jackpot!
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Debi,
you certainly hit the mark with the something extra and something fun. The extra, obviously the love added in at the end of each verse... something methinks you have an abundance of to share.

So___ enjoyed reading this poem for your son Jason and his wife Mel' birthday... something that just makes one feel good inside.

With our thoughts we create...
the gift of love.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 01-May-2023
    James, you are always so kind and yes i do have it bubbling up and ready to share. When God gave me those instructions, I didn't take them lightly and now l have a whole second family here to spread it to you! LOL thanks for such kind words my friend,

Comment from Janet Foor
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A lovely tribute to the lovely couple with May birthdays. Very nice Merry-go-rhyme poem, chocked full of love with your mono rhymes.
Beautifully written Debi.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Janet, as always, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem for Jason and Mel. I am very blessed with family and friends. Thanks again, my dear friend
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Mono rhymes are fun to write. When each line ends in rhyming, they also have to make sense. What a wonderful tribute to your family. Wonderful, elegant writing. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-May-2023


reply by the author on 03-May-2023
    Rosemary, as always, you are so sweet. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem for Jason and Mel. I am very blessed with family and friends, as I count you as one of those blessings.
    Thanks again, my dear friend