When You Said Goodbye
An Acrostic Poem19 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, kahpot.
-I'm sorry about your friend's loss.
-You wrote a very good poem about it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I'm sure your friend would appreciate this
and the sentiments you expressed so well.
-The last two lines are excellent and really
stand out for me.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, kahpot.
-I'm sorry about your friend's loss.
-You wrote a very good poem about it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I'm sure your friend would appreciate this
and the sentiments you expressed so well.
-The last two lines are excellent and really
stand out for me.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic poem, WHEN YOU SAID GOODBYE, has the proper vertical formatting and brings the readers through a painful time when the life becomes that two-edged sword of good and bad.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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This acrostic poem, WHEN YOU SAID GOODBYE, has the proper vertical formatting and brings the readers through a painful time when the life becomes that two-edged sword of good and bad.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The big C is a horrible disease, and even with the progress made the question is why with the billions donated a cure has yet to be found?
Sorry for your loss. Most would likely know someone affected.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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The big C is a horrible disease, and even with the progress made the question is why with the billions donated a cure has yet to be found?
Sorry for your loss. Most would likely know someone affected.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you Tom, yes it does affect many, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a sense of deep grief and faith within these words as we hope the pain of loss subsides but we never forget our loved ones, a deeply moving acrostic here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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There is a sense of deep grief and faith within these words as we hope the pain of loss subsides but we never forget our loved ones, a deeply moving acrostic here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Acrcostic poem- nice picture presentation- rhyming poem flows well - painting a picture of a seemingly sad story about the loss of a loved one to cancer - the painful journey and ultimate loss- followed by grief- sorry for your loss- Bless AP
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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I like your Acrcostic poem- nice picture presentation- rhyming poem flows well - painting a picture of a seemingly sad story about the loss of a loved one to cancer - the painful journey and ultimate loss- followed by grief- sorry for your loss- Bless AP
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you Ap. for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Kahpot, your touching poem reaches many whose lives have been ravaged by cancer. You use eloquent phrasing, ie "white clouds parted...", and "...I've longed to fly...".
I found only one error: in the fourth stanza :"go with thought, (you're) never alone), not 'you're.'
Good luck with your wonderful poem.
Cindy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Kahpot, your touching poem reaches many whose lives have been ravaged by cancer. You use eloquent phrasing, ie "white clouds parted...", and "...I've longed to fly...".
I found only one error: in the fourth stanza :"go with thought, (you're) never alone), not 'you're.'
Good luck with your wonderful poem.
Cindy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much Cindy, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your acrostic poem which even ends with the words for the beginning lines. You show how devastating it is when a loved one is taken away too soon.
your never alone (you're)
Oneday we'll meet for life ( One day)
lifes resume (life's)
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Great job with your acrostic poem which even ends with the words for the beginning lines. You show how devastating it is when a loved one is taken away too soon.
your never alone (you're)
Oneday we'll meet for life ( One day)
lifes resume (life's)
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for your encouraging comments and help, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jamison Brown
These are heart-wrenching words exceptionally expressed.
My favorite lines were "You stayed with me through pain denied" and "You see my love, I've longed to fly." One did not want to leave; afterwards the other did not want to stay. They just wanted to be together.
Very well done, kahpot.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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These are heart-wrenching words exceptionally expressed.
My favorite lines were "You stayed with me through pain denied" and "You see my love, I've longed to fly." One did not want to leave; afterwards the other did not want to stay. They just wanted to be together.
Very well done, kahpot.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you Jamison, for your wonderful, encouraging comments and the six stars, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from country ranch writer
They say things happen for a reason and when someone says good by it isn't always clear way the left. Yet we at leases we have our memories of the happy times we spent together.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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They say things happen for a reason and when someone says good by it isn't always clear way the left. Yet we at leases we have our memories of the happy times we spent together.
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
