Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Which came first, the artwork or the poem? They pair perfectly to give the reader a vivid picture. For the sense of sight, you describe the colorful footpath. For the sense of sound, you provide the crunch. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

Comment from Eleri

Excellent

I must say that I like this poem as your use of the word 'crunch' really adds an extra element to poems about autumn. Your middle line is also very beautiful so I wish you all the best in the contest.
Eleri

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much, Eleri! Xo

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

I really like this one, and I feel it has all the elements of good haiku. I especially like the satori line "crunch" I have one suggestion - haiku is usually titled (in your case) haiku (leaves). But in the end it's always the writers choice. Should do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

There is a lovely soft sound to
Leaves
Color the footpath
Then the - crunch-
A definite change of sound really brings to mind a walk among autumn leaves. A lovely haiku.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think you've written a perfectly.great haiku, whatever the length, this is a stand alone good haiku, bu the strength of the satori line alone, but also to back it up, is it's very short, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

reply by royowen on 28-Aug-2023

Most welcome

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image and good presentation.
-You followed the rules of the prompt well.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery with the leaves,
and how they are turning colors in the fall.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much, Pam! Xo

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Aug-2023

You are welcome, Jessica.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

A beautiful haiku...

Excellent photo and not another word is necessary...

You've captured it all!

(I'm looking forward to Autumn!)

I bet this does great in the contest...

Karenina

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

reply by karenina on 28-Aug-2023

Welcome!

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Indeed, the colours of fall are not the season's only beauty, and your haiku makes that very clear -- "crunch". The crisp air always feels refreshing too. Thank you for sharing this sweet reminder.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello, Mystery Writer!
I enjoyed your 1/5/1 Haiku poetic offering!
And living here in northern Michigan, those leaves will soon be coloring my footpath; in fact, they already are!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!

diane

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023

Thank you so much!

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

I know that title-If I tried to walk, I'd fall! The artwork reminded me of a park I used to stroll through with individuals from my caseload, when I worked. I love the sight of crispy leaves on the ground!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023

Thank you so much! Xo

reply by jim vecchio on 28-Aug-2023

Of course, if you're the invisible Man, you should avoid the leaves!