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A Pleiades Poetry Contest Entry20 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a good job with the form and topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You do a good job showing how many of us
are always in a hurry and staying busy,
but does that equal happiness?
-Very good concluding lines showing
how we can achieve that joy.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a good job with the form and topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You do a good job showing how many of us
are always in a hurry and staying busy,
but does that equal happiness?
-Very good concluding lines showing
how we can achieve that joy.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your insightful review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem gives me a warm feeling, especially the last line, "His arms a home, a resting place. Faith has gotten me through some rough spots, and has always been my go to place.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Your poem gives me a warm feeling, especially the last line, "His arms a home, a resting place. Faith has gotten me through some rough spots, and has always been my go to place.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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You are extremely fortunate and blessed to have been given the understanding and faith to know where to go when you need comfort and peace. You are truly blessed. Thank you.
Comment from Jane Jane King
This is a beautiful peaceful comforting poem. Happiness is a sense of inner peace and being in God's arms, safe from harm. The illustration is beautiful as well and fits the spirit of the poem perfectly.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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This is a beautiful peaceful comforting poem. Happiness is a sense of inner peace and being in God's arms, safe from harm. The illustration is beautiful as well and fits the spirit of the poem perfectly.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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You used the perfect word for this poem: "peace." Thank you for your lovely and loving review.
Comment from Jane Jane King
This is a beautiful peaceful comforting poem. Happiness is a sense of inner peace and being in God's arms, safe from harm. The illustration is beautiful as well and fits the spirit of the poem perfectly.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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This is a beautiful peaceful comforting poem. Happiness is a sense of inner peace and being in God's arms, safe from harm. The illustration is beautiful as well and fits the spirit of the poem perfectly.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you, again.
Comment from royowen
I love this piece because of the wonder of God's love contained in the cross, from which all comfort radiates. The penalty paid by Jesus reveals the absolute love of God, beautifully written Pleiades poem, great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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I love this piece because of the wonder of God's love contained in the cross, from which all comfort radiates. The penalty paid by Jesus reveals the absolute love of God, beautifully written Pleiades poem, great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you for tying God's peace and comfort to the Cross. Without it, there would be neither. Thanks for your review.
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Bless you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A soothing faithful write filled with comfort and solace and I enjoyed the sentiment, the rhymes and the devoted belief inside this poem, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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A soothing faithful write filled with comfort and solace and I enjoyed the sentiment, the rhymes and the devoted belief inside this poem, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you for climbing inside my poem and revealing its true meaning. I also appreciate your good luck wish.
Comment from Raul1
God does many wonderful things for us and it is all because He cares about us. I have enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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God does many wonderful things for us and it is all because He cares about us. I have enjoyed reading your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Raul. You touched on a very profound truth: "God cares about us." Hold tight to that truth and He will never be far from you. You are truly blessed. Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Claire Tennant
What a comfort this poem is to those who know that the words are true. I trust you do well in the contest, but more than this, that these words bring more people to know Jesus. Thank you for the blessing you have brought to me. I don't know how you could improve on this poem.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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What a comfort this poem is to those who know that the words are true. I trust you do well in the contest, but more than this, that these words bring more people to know Jesus. Thank you for the blessing you have brought to me. I don't know how you could improve on this poem.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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You touched on the very heart of this little poem. If it can bring one soul to Jesus, it's already a winner. The fact you realized that, and that it brought a blessing to you make it so. I'm humbly grateful...thank you.
Comment from Eleri
This is a well written Pleiades poem with good rhyming. The only thing that I would change is how you have reversed the word order in line three in order to produce a rhyme, ie 'busy are we' sounds really odd and you could have just left it as 'we are busy' as busy rhymes with 'be'.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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This is a well written Pleiades poem with good rhyming. The only thing that I would change is how you have reversed the word order in line three in order to produce a rhyme, ie 'busy are we' sounds really odd and you could have just left it as 'we are busy' as busy rhymes with 'be'.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your review and constructive comments. I appreciate your good luck wish.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Many will relate to this.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Many will relate to this.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind review.