Comment from Wy Jung

Excellent

Oh! I love this!
The picture works very well with it too.
I am hooked and am bookmarking so I can read the story. I too have a great sense of curiosity. !
The below sentence I really liked and could picture, as my grandfather also had a shed like this (sunday morning going to church clean!) I wonder if that could be hyphenated, but even as is, it reads flawlessly.

His shed and all the tools in it look like Sunday morning going to church clean

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Thank you so much, Karen

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

So, I read your story out of order. Now it makes more sense. I didn't know know why grammar tolled his grandson what he had done.

Good job. You are a good story teller.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

He would have gone to the sheriff and raised a fuss if he didn't. Thank for the read. Karen

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

This posting offers a good cliff hanger ending. Readers cannot help but wonder what that talk with his grandfather reveals. An excellent mystery story, Karen!

Note 3rd paragraph:
my wife died five years ago from a drunk driver plowing --over? -- her in a crosswalk.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Plowing means to run over quickly without using your brakes at any time.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Okay, I read this out of order. I enjoyed reading and now I understand how this talk happened. Thank you for sharing.

She is also my sister Kate. (comma after 'sister')

When her wife Leslie died of an aneurysm a year ago (comma after 'wife')

When my Sarah died I thought I (comma after 'died')

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Good catch, I went and fixed them. :-) Karen

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I'm going to have to read the next part, Karen. Those two men could have buried a body, a human body!! Or it could have been an animal. Weird though, and I'd want to know what was buried. I hope he says something to his grandfather and they go and investigate. This was really good, and I really enjoyed it. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

I appreciate the kudos. It's like M&M's . Or, Lay's potato chips. :-) Karen

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

As always, you have a special way with creating characters, and mostly likable ones too, with your outstanding imagination and perception of life. I'm just waiting for when you start painting a picture about the old women sitting at the table, tooth falling out and into her soup, with details. You tell a mean story. Now show me the blood and guts that I know you can see better than most anyone. Thanks for sharing. Glad to see you back posting by the way. :-)

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Thank you, you are soooo sweet. Just like peach pie. I wrote the nub of this story three years ago, and have added to it fleshed it out, over time until it felt ready. And I released it into the wild. Karen

Comment from Sarita Méndez

Excellent

I began to read your story in disorder! This first part is very interesting too, and it very well keeps the mystery of what happened.
Thank you very much for sharing this text.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Thanks for the read, You are welcome. Karen

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent writing, but you sure leave us hanging at the end. I hope you intend to continue this story in the near future so I can find out what happens. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

In the author notes I wrote the next chapter is coming. Probably tonite. Karen

reply by prettybluebirds on 13-Dec-2023

Good, glad to hear it. This will teach me to read the author's notes. Lol.

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Yes, i am bad at that myself.'Karen

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Story begins with Morris being drunk.

"Got the needle" for DUI? Even with fatalities not sure how likely that is?

A live-in !esbian cook. A bit stereotypical perhaps?

The burial was odd in nature for anyone to witness.

Ending a bit unfinished in that it answered no questions, and left several loose ends.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

You might want to try reading it again. Morris was not drunk, he was tipsy, so he was chatty. What is "Got the Needle" about? I have nothing like that in my story. His sister, who lives with them free for cooking and housekeeping just happens to be a lesbian.And the story answers some questions, but the authors note tells you part two is coming.
Hope this clears it up. Karen

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

You tell a good story. I like the way you add all the personal detail and tell it like it is being related to the narrator. I'm glad to know there is a part two and I will look forward to reading is.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

I will post it later today. Karen