Alone
Where are you now??25 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a sad poem. I have been there so I can really relate to this. I wish you lots of luck in the free verse poem competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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This is such a sad poem. I have been there so I can really relate to this. I wish you lots of luck in the free verse poem competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank so much Jen!
Comment from jessizero
Parts of this bring to mind the Bright Eyes song "Haligh, Haligh, A Lie, Haligh," and that's a good thing. I liked your rhymes, and you expressed your emotions well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Parts of this bring to mind the Bright Eyes song "Haligh, Haligh, A Lie, Haligh," and that's a good thing. I liked your rhymes, and you expressed your emotions well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much for the compliment and the nice review!
Comment from NanaGaye
Heartrending story.. Love the picture you chose. I think the word layout could be improved showing the rhyming ie
At night I walk the floor thinking of you.
Where did we go wrong?
I thought we were so strong.
Just my thoughts All the best
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Heartrending story.. Love the picture you chose. I think the word layout could be improved showing the rhyming ie
At night I walk the floor thinking of you.
Where did we go wrong?
I thought we were so strong.
Just my thoughts All the best
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for the feedback and the nice review.
Comment from Janet Foor
A sad lament of lost love. I don't know if the hurt ever goes away. But we do learn to live with it and as we do, it becomes less and less and we find ourselves doing new things, having new adventures and hopefully new and lasting love.
I wish you the very best.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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A sad lament of lost love. I don't know if the hurt ever goes away. But we do learn to live with it and as we do, it becomes less and less and we find ourselves doing new things, having new adventures and hopefully new and lasting love.
I wish you the very best.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Thank you Janet!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is hard to lose a love you had after such a long time together, I know those feelings. In the end we have to move on and enjoy life and put the past behind us, my only suggestion for your post is to arrange your lines one under the other to make your pome easier to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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It is hard to lose a love you had after such a long time together, I know those feelings. In the end we have to move on and enjoy life and put the past behind us, my only suggestion for your post is to arrange your lines one under the other to make your pome easier to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Thank you Dolly and thank you for the suggestion!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very despairing write in which you mourn the loss of your lover despite the cruel manner in which he has made his departure. I like the force of "Your cruelty cuts through to the bone." As I do your style of free write with its internal rhyme adding a pleasing fluency to the verse. You express that troubling and haunting sense of loneliness in vivid and relatable detail. Well done and good luck, Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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This is a very despairing write in which you mourn the loss of your lover despite the cruel manner in which he has made his departure. I like the force of "Your cruelty cuts through to the bone." As I do your style of free write with its internal rhyme adding a pleasing fluency to the verse. You express that troubling and haunting sense of loneliness in vivid and relatable detail. Well done and good luck, Debbie
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for you thoughtful review and for your depth of insight into my poem Debbie.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your poem is filled with pain, disappointment, hopelessness, and dependency, as expressed in the line, "I need you to help me, to hold me up now." Your poem is also filled with heartfelt, raw emotion, allowing the reader to understand your loss. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Your poem is filled with pain, disappointment, hopelessness, and dependency, as expressed in the line, "I need you to help me, to hold me up now." Your poem is also filled with heartfelt, raw emotion, allowing the reader to understand your loss. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Dear LJ,
You've captured my feelings perfectly. Thank you for your review!
Comment from Barry Penfold
I think you have captured your hurt very well in this poem. It is not an easy thing to write it all down. You make it clear that you are still feeling the hurt quite badly. The title Alone says it all.
I hope you are able to move on soon.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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I think you have captured your hurt very well in this poem. It is not an easy thing to write it all down. You make it clear that you are still feeling the hurt quite badly. The title Alone says it all.
I hope you are able to move on soon.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Dear Barry,
Thank you for understanding my pain and for the nice review!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Oh my. You must be young, at least in heart. Seven years is a good stretch for a romance. Wedded or simply being together? Did he pass on to the nether world or to other pastures? This writ has sorrow written through it.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Oh my. You must be young, at least in heart. Seven years is a good stretch for a romance. Wedded or simply being together? Did he pass on to the nether world or to other pastures? This writ has sorrow written through it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Dear Tom,
Young at heart only, deeply hurt by an old love from the past. Thank you for your kind words and review.
Comment from Wendy G
A meaningful lament about betrayal and lost love, and a sense of regret and lack of understanding along with the grief and sense of loss. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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A meaningful lament about betrayal and lost love, and a sense of regret and lack of understanding along with the grief and sense of loss. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much Wendy!
