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Comment from Jim Wile
This was a marvelous start to a longer work, Karen. Interesting and funny and mysterious. I loved your cogent descriptions of Milton, Karen, and Walter Neff, hitting the highnotes of their personalities with excellent examples.
I especially loved this statement about Milton: He didn't need a ribbon to tell him people liked his tomatoes. That's become my philosophy with ribbons and awards here on FanStory. Personally, a few good reviews by people who I respect, showing the person really appreciates the things I like about my post and "get it," is far preferable to lots of short reviews that say very little but are just enough to fill the 150-character minimum and that earn you those ribbons and awards.
This chapter was very well done, and I hope it's the beginning of a longer work. - Jim
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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This was a marvelous start to a longer work, Karen. Interesting and funny and mysterious. I loved your cogent descriptions of Milton, Karen, and Walter Neff, hitting the highnotes of their personalities with excellent examples.
I especially loved this statement about Milton: He didn't need a ribbon to tell him people liked his tomatoes. That's become my philosophy with ribbons and awards here on FanStory. Personally, a few good reviews by people who I respect, showing the person really appreciates the things I like about my post and "get it," is far preferable to lots of short reviews that say very little but are just enough to fill the 150-character minimum and that earn you those ribbons and awards.
This chapter was very well done, and I hope it's the beginning of a longer work. - Jim
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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OOOh! You just pointed out something I did not know I thought for myself out loud! It's a truism for sure! Kind words, even good corrections, mean more to me than here; I have a six. I like sixes they are pretty and shiny. But I value kinship far more. Thanks for your kind words. And the six.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This was so funny I wish i had a six:) "n fact, she had a lot to say about repeat burials. She said, "You can fry the sucker and put the ashes in the garbage for all I care. I already paid for and buried your certified "Walter Neff" five years ago. You will pay to plant this one. I will have nothing to do with it. I called his Uncle, who said he had a cousin, Winston, the same age; here is his number. Take it and go. My hands are washed of this whole affair." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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This was so funny I wish i had a six:) "n fact, she had a lot to say about repeat burials. She said, "You can fry the sucker and put the ashes in the garbage for all I care. I already paid for and buried your certified "Walter Neff" five years ago. You will pay to plant this one. I will have nothing to do with it. I called his Uncle, who said he had a cousin, Winston, the same age; here is his number. Take it and go. My hands are washed of this whole affair." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much. I enjoyed writing it. Those sixes go fast don't they? I laughed myself when I wrote that part. Thanks again.
Comment from Wy Jung
This was fun. Well written and engaging. I wondered what the "Let's Kill Karen" prompt was all about, and now I am starting to see.
The only thing I saw that I wondered about was the below paragraph. Having quote marks might be good for the words from the wife and the uncle. Otherwise, funny and easy to read. Well done.
In fact, she had a lot to say about repeat burials. She said you can fry the sucker and put the ashes in the garbage for all I care. I already paid for and buried your certified "Walter Neff" five years ago. You will pay to plant this one. I will have nothing to do with it. I called his Uncle, who said he had a cousin, Winston, the same age; here is his number. Take it and go. My hands are washed of this whole affair.
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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This was fun. Well written and engaging. I wondered what the "Let's Kill Karen" prompt was all about, and now I am starting to see.
The only thing I saw that I wondered about was the below paragraph. Having quote marks might be good for the words from the wife and the uncle. Otherwise, funny and easy to read. Well done.
In fact, she had a lot to say about repeat burials. She said you can fry the sucker and put the ashes in the garbage for all I care. I already paid for and buried your certified "Walter Neff" five years ago. You will pay to plant this one. I will have nothing to do with it. I called his Uncle, who said he had a cousin, Winston, the same age; here is his number. Take it and go. My hands are washed of this whole affair.
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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I will edit it. Thank you. Very much. How did I miss them?