Boy Scout Troop #1068
Flash Fiction Club Entry26 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
When we went to Stonehenge in England I thought we were going to be able to go over and touch the stones but no we were roped away by about 80 ft. And in addition to that the whole ordeal was very commercialized I was disillusioned. That reminded me of the cave I went down in an elevator with my students and it was very different than the cave I was describing in my book Traffic. There were no elevators in that cave what should I learned about through watching youTube for an afternoon. Garbage seems to be one of the fallout of commercialized caves.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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When we went to Stonehenge in England I thought we were going to be able to go over and touch the stones but no we were roped away by about 80 ft. And in addition to that the whole ordeal was very commercialized I was disillusioned. That reminded me of the cave I went down in an elevator with my students and it was very different than the cave I was describing in my book Traffic. There were no elevators in that cave what should I learned about through watching youTube for an afternoon. Garbage seems to be one of the fallout of commercialized caves.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you for reading and your commentary. Both mean a lot to me.
John
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An interesting topic, it certainly struck me.
Comment from Daylily
Talk about bursting a bubble. I empathized with the troop at what was found littered upon the floor. Made me think of the comparison of human creativity and beauty vs. human carelessness and destruction.
A most excellent posting!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Talk about bursting a bubble. I empathized with the troop at what was found littered upon the floor. Made me think of the comparison of human creativity and beauty vs. human carelessness and destruction.
A most excellent posting!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Lily,
Thank you so much for this great review!
John
Comment from Jim Wile
Aah, too bad! Their hopes were dashed for being the first to discover this rare find. Some other less considerate folks had been there first and left their evidence all over the place. Typical of slobs with no respect for the beauty and surprise of antiquity who spoil the enjoyment for others.
An unfortunate surprise ending to this beautifully written flash story, John.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Aah, too bad! Their hopes were dashed for being the first to discover this rare find. Some other less considerate folks had been there first and left their evidence all over the place. Typical of slobs with no respect for the beauty and surprise of antiquity who spoil the enjoyment for others.
An unfortunate surprise ending to this beautifully written flash story, John.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Jim for taking the time to read my club entry.
It?s very much appreciated.
John
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, John! The twist at the end was worth the price of admission, had there actually been a charge. I had already thought this was one of the best stories of yours I had read before I got to the end. I truly felt I was entering the caving world with the troop. Outstanding. Terry.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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LOL, John! The twist at the end was worth the price of admission, had there actually been a charge. I had already thought this was one of the best stories of yours I had read before I got to the end. I truly felt I was entering the caving world with the troop. Outstanding. Terry.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Terry. An outstanding review coupled with six stars, I?ll have to pour you a bourbon and me a rum to celebrate!
Thanks again,
John
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Well, it seems it was seen by human eyes before and the wall art was probably done by some fast-food-eating graffiti artists. I like how you told the story giving the boy scouts the hope of first-viewing discovery.
"Yeah. Let's do it," shouted the boys. (Suggest an exclamation point than a comma to fit the "shouted".
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Lol. Well, it seems it was seen by human eyes before and the wall art was probably done by some fast-food-eating graffiti artists. I like how you told the story giving the boy scouts the hope of first-viewing discovery.
"Yeah. Let's do it," shouted the boys. (Suggest an exclamation point than a comma to fit the "shouted".
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Exclamation point it is. Thank you for that correction and for reading the post based on the club. It was fun doing some due diligence on caving.
Cheers,
John
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oooh, this was so interesting and suspenseful throughout the whole read. In fact, about two paragraphs in I was so into it that I started over to make sure I didn't miss anything.
Then you got to the part about the fast food wrappers and half eaten food on the ground and my heart sunk, as I knew for these boys and men it had to be such a let down.
But a cool ending, nonetheless, as it showed that you can always expect the unexpected, even if it isn't what you want to hear or see. Wish I had a six for this one. Awesome!
Thanks John, for this cool story that at first I thought it happened to you and your boys. Awesome way to use this club entry. I am guessing this is Helen's, right?
I read it and my mind went blank because I know so little about fossils.
But great job, little bro. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Oooh, this was so interesting and suspenseful throughout the whole read. In fact, about two paragraphs in I was so into it that I started over to make sure I didn't miss anything.
Then you got to the part about the fast food wrappers and half eaten food on the ground and my heart sunk, as I knew for these boys and men it had to be such a let down.
But a cool ending, nonetheless, as it showed that you can always expect the unexpected, even if it isn't what you want to hear or see. Wish I had a six for this one. Awesome!
Thanks John, for this cool story that at first I thought it happened to you and your boys. Awesome way to use this club entry. I am guessing this is Helen's, right?
I read it and my mind went blank because I know so little about fossils.
But great job, little bro. Love, Debi
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Well I'm soon to be a fossil so at least you'll know me. Yes, from Helen's Flash Fiction Club. It was fun to write because I had to do some due diligence on caving.
I do appreciate your review, sis!
Love ya back,
John
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your twist at the end had me laughing. LOL I enjoyed reading. All my boys did Boy Scouts and benefited greatly from it. I've heard a rumor it's been changed and not for the good.
Joel continued. "Respect the cave and pride yourselves (continued,)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Your twist at the end had me laughing. LOL I enjoyed reading. All my boys did Boy Scouts and benefited greatly from it. I've heard a rumor it's been changed and not for the good.
Joel continued. "Respect the cave and pride yourselves (continued,)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Many thanks for the correction and for your time spent with my post.
John
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I don't understand people who leave garbage behind, specially in the ocean and caves. Some places are virgine sanctuaries never explore before...sad.
Great entry for the Tampered Fossil club event.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I don't understand people who leave garbage behind, specially in the ocean and caves. Some places are virgine sanctuaries never explore before...sad.
Great entry for the Tampered Fossil club event.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy for reading and your input.
John
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, I'd have to guess they weren't the first to look at the wall. It makes me wonder, had your dad taken you down that elusive path, would you have been the first?
Great story, John. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Well, I'd have to guess they weren't the first to look at the wall. It makes me wonder, had your dad taken you down that elusive path, would you have been the first?
Great story, John. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, John.
Your time and commentary are appreciated.
John
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, a little bit of fake news inside this cave as this group was fooled here, I enjoyed your magical story and I loved the punch line John, a fine post for the flash fiction club, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Oh dear, a little bit of fake news inside this cave as this group was fooled here, I enjoyed your magical story and I loved the punch line John, a fine post for the flash fiction club, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Dolly.
Your comments are much appreciated.
John
