Shattered Innocence
Childhood innocence shattered by life's cruelty.41 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
I'm sorry for all you've lost. This poem was heartfelt and it made me feel sad, thinking back on the people l love that l'll never see. I certainly relate to your words, as l'm sure many do. Beautifully written from the heart.
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I'm sorry for all you've lost. This poem was heartfelt and it made me feel sad, thinking back on the people l love that l'll never see. I certainly relate to your words, as l'm sure many do. Beautifully written from the heart.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from Sanku
This is an out pouring of grief -your tragic experiences thathave systematically destroyed your safe fortress..well written .free verse is most suitable for such expression...
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This is an out pouring of grief -your tragic experiences thathave systematically destroyed your safe fortress..well written .free verse is most suitable for such expression...
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from gramalot8
Your poem brought back memories of the losses in my life. Very well written with the transitions of your aging. I have lost many loved ones... some unexpected, some tragically expected. Thanks for sharing your feelings through poetry with us.
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Your poem brought back memories of the losses in my life. Very well written with the transitions of your aging. I have lost many loved ones... some unexpected, some tragically expected. Thanks for sharing your feelings through poetry with us.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from Mia Twysted
This piece is filled with a life long history of loss. To have so much only means having so much to lose. However, despite the loss, which is devastating, remain grateful that you had time and love. There are some who are not so lucky.
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This piece is filled with a life long history of loss. To have so much only means having so much to lose. However, despite the loss, which is devastating, remain grateful that you had time and love. There are some who are not so lucky.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Amber,
Sorry for all your losses. It seems Alzheimer's has attacked your family. That must be very hard. Sorry for your losses.
I can see how pictures of happy mother/daughter scenes can make you sad enough to write this cathartic free verse poem. I think you did well. I can't see any changes. I can empathize and sympathize with this because I lost all my grandparents to death before I was a sophomore in college. Three within 7 month of each other. Both of my parents died of cancer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great week.
Joan
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Hi Amber,
Sorry for all your losses. It seems Alzheimer's has attacked your family. That must be very hard. Sorry for your losses.
I can see how pictures of happy mother/daughter scenes can make you sad enough to write this cathartic free verse poem. I think you did well. I can't see any changes. I can empathize and sympathize with this because I lost all my grandparents to death before I was a sophomore in college. Three within 7 month of each other. Both of my parents died of cancer too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great week.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heart felt,
sad, upsetting, filled with emotions
and engage the reader. The poem
expresses feelings well and gives
detailed accounts of the events. I am so sorry for your losses. Thank
you for the author's notes - glad you wrote this poem. The color scheme and artwork go well with
these words. My thoughts and prayers are with you....Maria
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The author's words are heart felt,
sad, upsetting, filled with emotions
and engage the reader. The poem
expresses feelings well and gives
detailed accounts of the events. I am so sorry for your losses. Thank
you for the author's notes - glad you wrote this poem. The color scheme and artwork go well with
these words. My thoughts and prayers are with you....Maria
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from estory
I thought you had some strong descriptions of Alzheimer's in that you describe it as swallowing your grandparents, robbing them of their memories. It is so true. I watched my mother die of Alzheimer's and this is how it feels. It's a horrible disease in that it robs you of your relationship with them. And the hole it leaves behind in your life is never really filled. estory
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I thought you had some strong descriptions of Alzheimer's in that you describe it as swallowing your grandparents, robbing them of their memories. It is so true. I watched my mother die of Alzheimer's and this is how it feels. It's a horrible disease in that it robs you of your relationship with them. And the hole it leaves behind in your life is never really filled. estory
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from locust
It feels odd to say that you enjoyed a sad poem, but I did enjoy, and it evoked deep empathy. My heart goes out to you. I wonder though if this might not be better explored in prose? The poetry format almost seems to limit the expression. I'd love to see this revisited but in a different style. It feels less like a poem and more like a confession. That is not a critique. Just a curiosity... Well written <3
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It feels odd to say that you enjoyed a sad poem, but I did enjoy, and it evoked deep empathy. My heart goes out to you. I wonder though if this might not be better explored in prose? The poetry format almost seems to limit the expression. I'd love to see this revisited but in a different style. It feels less like a poem and more like a confession. That is not a critique. Just a curiosity... Well written <3
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
I can't bring anything that may bring comfort, having lost both parents, my wife the same, hope is the only thing we have, I would never want my grandchildren or children to be crushed by our demise, but give them a positive message, sorry for your loss, or your friend's, are they hers, or yours? Well done, blessings Roy
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I can't bring anything that may bring comfort, having lost both parents, my wife the same, hope is the only thing we have, I would never want my grandchildren or children to be crushed by our demise, but give them a positive message, sorry for your loss, or your friend's, are they hers, or yours? Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
Comment from Cedar
What a sad poem you have penned. Life can be a cruel and heart-breaking journey or it can be the most delightful experience we will ever have in this world.
I hope and pray that you have a strong outlook on life and can withstand all the pitfalls that it can bring.
Good luck and welcome to Fanstory...Bill
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What a sad poem you have penned. Life can be a cruel and heart-breaking journey or it can be the most delightful experience we will ever have in this world.
I hope and pray that you have a strong outlook on life and can withstand all the pitfalls that it can bring.
Good luck and welcome to Fanstory...Bill
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
