Moonlight Dance
Night time dance between light and dark.11 total reviews
Comment from teafor2
Cosmic2011, a creative rendering of the acrostic form...One of my favorite
forms to read and write. I do have two very small Suggestions: In order for your title to "pop" or stand out, may be bold or try a different color for
the first letter of each line; and another suggestion only...The last line is
the only one that doesn't have a end rhyme...Perhaps, "Evening makes room for morning's (best)." Two very small suggestions, but may earn you
more reviews and it is your contest entry. Other than that, good luck. teafor2
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Cosmic2011, a creative rendering of the acrostic form...One of my favorite
forms to read and write. I do have two very small Suggestions: In order for your title to "pop" or stand out, may be bold or try a different color for
the first letter of each line; and another suggestion only...The last line is
the only one that doesn't have a end rhyme...Perhaps, "Evening makes room for morning's (best)." Two very small suggestions, but may earn you
more reviews and it is your contest entry. Other than that, good luck. teafor2
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your suggestions, they were helpful. This is the first poem I have written in years, so I'm a bit rusty.
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You are welcome.
