Raindrops
A Lune Poem 5-3-517 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, that is their cycle, and it is also ours, as we move through life, at times plunging to the depths of despair, and then rising again with the help of the gift of love. A lovely thought, and well expressed in your Lune. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Yes, that is their cycle, and it is also ours, as we move through life, at times plunging to the depths of despair, and then rising again with the help of the gift of love. A lovely thought, and well expressed in your Lune. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Wendy, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Perhaps the last line should read
(from) the clouds above)
It's just a thought, I enjoyed your rainy lune for the contest and wish you luck, rain is something the British are very familiar with, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Perhaps the last line should read
(from) the clouds above)
It's just a thought, I enjoyed your rainy lune for the contest and wish you luck, rain is something the British are very familiar with, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your 5/3/5 lune contest entry- nice picture presentation and syllable count - showing the cycle of rain - drops fall - then ascend - into.clouds good job AP
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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I like your 5/3/5 lune contest entry- nice picture presentation and syllable count - showing the cycle of rain - drops fall - then ascend - into.clouds good job AP
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you, AP. for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from kiwisteveh
I suppose the apparent contradiction in your Lune poem could be explained by the water cycle of precipitation ==> evaporation ==> condensation...
There, I had to engage my brain to make sense of your poem - perhaps that is what poetry is all about!
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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I suppose the apparent contradiction in your Lune poem could be explained by the water cycle of precipitation ==> evaporation ==> condensation...
There, I had to engage my brain to make sense of your poem - perhaps that is what poetry is all about!
Steve
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Hello, Steve, thank you, I am having some issues with this form, though learning through wonderful comments like yours, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your lune. It also speaks to me about our ephemeral existence on Earth. Yet after our transitory lives, we too will ascend above to be with the Lord. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Great job with your lune. It also speaks to me about our ephemeral existence on Earth. Yet after our transitory lives, we too will ascend above to be with the Lord. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you so very much, I am having a bit of trouble with this form, I don't yet fully understand, though I am learning, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from royowen
That's a wonderful, but literal analogy, the evaporation and the cloud formations are the washing machine that Cleans the water and returns it to the earth, beautifully written dear friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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That's a wonderful, but literal analogy, the evaporation and the cloud formations are the washing machine that Cleans the water and returns it to the earth, beautifully written dear friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy, yes, I am still a bit unsure about the meaning and format of the lune, but with help I will learn, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Well done
Comment from Julie Helms
You have found a poetic way to describe the water cycle! I like the dichotomy of falling and ascending. You fit a lot into a very brief poetic format.
It probably doesn't really matter, but the point of a lune poem is that it looks like a crescent moon, so aligned either to the left or to the right, not centered.
Nicely done! Julie.
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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You have found a poetic way to describe the water cycle! I like the dichotomy of falling and ascending. You fit a lot into a very brief poetic format.
It probably doesn't really matter, but the point of a lune poem is that it looks like a crescent moon, so aligned either to the left or to the right, not centered.
Nicely done! Julie.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Julie, and yes, I think it matters, as I have learned something today, (actually on this site I learn everyday) I aligned to the left and it looks great, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
