Down and Out
When jobs grow scarce, what do you do?15 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned that tells a story. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned that tells a story. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Teri, for your praise of my poem.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This poem says it all in the last stanza. I can feel the pain in the child, feeling the sadness in daddy. You set the scene up at the beginning very well too. This is a well written free-verse. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This poem says it all in the last stanza. I can feel the pain in the child, feeling the sadness in daddy. You set the scene up at the beginning very well too. This is a well written free-verse. Great job!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Jodi, I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from jessizero
This piece of free verse poetry was tragic and heartbreaking. Your last lines were well-written, even though they were gut-wrenching. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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This piece of free verse poetry was tragic and heartbreaking. Your last lines were well-written, even though they were gut-wrenching. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Yes, there are many sad stories like Daddy?s because of the shut-down of steel mills and factories. Many thanks for your kind praise, Jessizero.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
A nice poem. The poem was easy to follow along. The picture showed well the despair of the unemployed worker. Very good job on this
Hopefully we don't get into a situation like this
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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A nice poem. The poem was easy to follow along. The picture showed well the despair of the unemployed worker. Very good job on this
Hopefully we don't get into a situation like this
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Brenda, for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from Mark Jackson
Absolutely F**king beautiful. I bow bow to this. If this is the quality of the work you put up for these funny pretend competitions God help us all in the actual ones for really proper cash-type money. Schwinn reminds me of Stephen King. Your description reminds me of an LS Lowry painting. And your final words... exquisite! I read at an open mike afternoon every week with your permission I would love to read this.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Absolutely F**king beautiful. I bow bow to this. If this is the quality of the work you put up for these funny pretend competitions God help us all in the actual ones for really proper cash-type money. Schwinn reminds me of Stephen King. Your description reminds me of an LS Lowry painting. And your final words... exquisite! I read at an open mike afternoon every week with your permission I would love to read this.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Mark, I am thrilled to receive a six-star rating for this poem, and would be honored to have it read aloud at an open mike. Let me know what kind of reception it gets.
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Good luck in the competition by the way.
