Geese On Their Way
Free verse poem about Canada geese migrating26 total reviews
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Crystie,
I love to watch the geese at Creamer's Field, a bird sanctuary here in Fairbanks, Alaska where I live. They returned in April and I have made several trips to just sit and watch them and write. Thank you for sharing your free verse. Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Hi Crystie,
I love to watch the geese at Creamer's Field, a bird sanctuary here in Fairbanks, Alaska where I live. They returned in April and I have made several trips to just sit and watch them and write. Thank you for sharing your free verse. Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 03-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This free verse is packed full of informative and colourful detail which all helps to build up towards the climax of this magnificent display of unified flight formation. Some beautiful imagery here throughout but particularly in your third stanza. My only slightest niggle would be the syntax of the second sentence of the first stanza and why it starts with 'How' and then fails to ask a question? I know that you're trying to make this into an exclamation but it ends up simply sounding unfinished. Notwithstanding, this is excellent and, without doubt, a strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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This free verse is packed full of informative and colourful detail which all helps to build up towards the climax of this magnificent display of unified flight formation. Some beautiful imagery here throughout but particularly in your third stanza. My only slightest niggle would be the syntax of the second sentence of the first stanza and why it starts with 'How' and then fails to ask a question? I know that you're trying to make this into an exclamation but it ends up simply sounding unfinished. Notwithstanding, this is excellent and, without doubt, a strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 03-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Thank you so much for your great review. I will take a look at that suggestion when I am more alert.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Such a well-written poem. We have geese that fly south every fall, before the cold weather sets in; they fly in the shape of a "v"; meaning I'm sure that they feel victorious and they can fly to a warmer climate.
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Such a well-written poem. We have geese that fly south every fall, before the cold weather sets in; they fly in the shape of a "v"; meaning I'm sure that they feel victorious and they can fly to a warmer climate.
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Thank you for taking time to read and review. V for victorious sounds great, too!
Comment from Karen Cherry
I sense you are on a geese theme lately. I am quick like that! Your poetry is moving and lovely. The picture makes us want to fly away with them as well. Good work. Karen
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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I sense you are on a geese theme lately. I am quick like that! Your poetry is moving and lovely. The picture makes us want to fly away with them as well. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you for your kind review.
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Comment from nancyjam
I love your beautiful free verse. Thank you for introducing me to these
beautiful creatures and their flight south out of the cold winter's path.
Your imagery is wonderful and gives the reader a feeling of being there
watching them soar up into the sky.
best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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I love your beautiful free verse. Thank you for introducing me to these
beautiful creatures and their flight south out of the cold winter's path.
Your imagery is wonderful and gives the reader a feeling of being there
watching them soar up into the sky.
best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a timely poem as I saw geese arriving at our local pool yesterday, they made a lot of noise in the sky before skimming the surface of the pool with a splash landing. A fine animated post Crystie and the honking was loud and clear here, I'm glad the geese are back, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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This is a timely poem as I saw geese arriving at our local pool yesterday, they made a lot of noise in the sky before skimming the surface of the pool with a splash landing. A fine animated post Crystie and the honking was loud and clear here, I'm glad the geese are back, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you for your great review. I am looking for geese now around our valley, but I seem to be a little too far away from the best places still.
Comment from gansach
Your poem reminds me of those misty autumn mornings when I'd lead my students onto the playground to find Canada geese gathered on the soccer field. Wonderfully descriptive free verse entry for the contest. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Your poem reminds me of those misty autumn mornings when I'd lead my students onto the playground to find Canada geese gathered on the soccer field. Wonderfully descriptive free verse entry for the contest. Best wishes!
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
The migratory birds are always so amazing. Some can actually sleep with half their brain while flying. I especially liked your conclusion:
"chorus of more muddy honks, to announce their progress and power,
their ache to aim higher." It's fun to see how they determine who leads.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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The migratory birds are always so amazing. Some can actually sleep with half their brain while flying. I especially liked your conclusion:
"chorus of more muddy honks, to announce their progress and power,
their ache to aim higher." It's fun to see how they determine who leads.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your perceptive review.
Comment from GoWiSt
Very nice complementary picture art choice.
"the angry, frozen face of Winter," Good personification and imagery.
"Each night is spent drowsing on park lawns or golf courses" Oh, is that how they rest during their migration?
Very good imagery throughout the piece, as I was transported right into the various scenes, watching these wonderful birds migrate.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Very nice complementary picture art choice.
"the angry, frozen face of Winter," Good personification and imagery.
"Each night is spent drowsing on park lawns or golf courses" Oh, is that how they rest during their migration?
Very good imagery throughout the piece, as I was transported right into the various scenes, watching these wonderful birds migrate.
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your great review. I used to work next to a golf course, where the Canada geese took over a good portion in fall.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Crystie, I loved your free verse poem about the geese and how they take to the skies. They have always fascinated me. All the best of luck in the contest. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Oh, Crystie, I loved your free verse poem about the geese and how they take to the skies. They have always fascinated me. All the best of luck in the contest. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your super review.
