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Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was another one that captured my imagination. To be able to sit in total union with those surroundings would be incredible. Good luck with this contest. I felt the calming with this. Gretchen

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, my friend.

    Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
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There's something soothing about being in nature. I like how you say that even the rock fits like a glove and the grass is a carpet and the sense of serenity envelops with the breeze. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, big sister.

    Love,
    marival
Comment from RJ Heritage
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Your depiction of your chosen theme is right on. It creates a stillness, but with a consciousness that is felt by connecting with the universe.As always, your imagery is splendid and well presented.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, RJ

    Gypsy
reply by RJ Heritage on 04-Jun-2024
    You are welcome
Comment from Esther Brown
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Good for you, 50 words and each precisely perfect. As well as the picture. She looks so serene, like she was created to fit your small story. Good luck with the contest. Esther

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, Esther

    Gypsy
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Gypsy

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!

Your poem is certainly serene and peaceful. Being one with the universe means one with God. I sincerely believe that.

So, you took us to a good place at the end of the poem and beautifully described what happened before hand

I enjoyed reading your poem. You can be proud of it.

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Yes, being one with the universe is being one with god

    Thank you very much, Pam

    Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading this entry. Yes, being in calmness of nature does give us a sense of peace. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, Barbara

    Gypsy
Comment from royowen
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If one loves God it should be like this all the time, in harmony with the universe and with everything in God's creation, at peace apprehended and fully joyful, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, Roy

    Gypsy
reply by royowen on 04-Jun-2024
    Pleasure
Comment from shelley kaye
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a great 50-word dribble with a poetic feel and smooth flow

one suggestion i have is maybe give the character a name instead of a pronoun? just a thought ;)

thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)


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 Comment Written 04-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley

    Gypsy