Pirate Ships
A father and daughter pretend cars are pirate ships36 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
So sad about the abuse of children. I never understood the rationality in these folks' minds. In the end she is freed from the abuse but the emotional scars she'll carry forever.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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So sad about the abuse of children. I never understood the rationality in these folks' minds. In the end she is freed from the abuse but the emotional scars she'll carry forever.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you Steve for a super review
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Always, my friend.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
No child should ever have to live that way. I can't say I enjoyed reading because of the subject matter, but that being said this a great poem and highlights a problem we have in the US. Thank you.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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No child should ever have to live that way. I can't say I enjoyed reading because of the subject matter, but that being said this a great poem and highlights a problem we have in the US. Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Barbara. Thank you for your nice comments and a super review
Comment from Shanbreen
Wow, the last part of the poem definitely took me by surprise. Yes, it is often hard to tell whether a child is abused. Sometimes it gets so ingrained in a child's psyche that what is wrong becomes right for her.
The best, of course is that you let the reader decide if the child was responsible for the crash. Perhaps, she was because you prelude her intentions by: "Tonight fulfills her deadly quest"
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Wow, the last part of the poem definitely took me by surprise. Yes, it is often hard to tell whether a child is abused. Sometimes it gets so ingrained in a child's psyche that what is wrong becomes right for her.
The best, of course is that you let the reader decide if the child was responsible for the crash. Perhaps, she was because you prelude her intentions by: "Tonight fulfills her deadly quest"
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi shanbreen. Thank you for your wonderful comments and a nice review
Comment from gansach
This is a very interesting poem. I was expecting something quite different from the picture and description and was quite surprised by the conclusion. Sadly, child abuse by a parent/step-parent often happens silently and secretly, the child confused and torn in his/her feelings, afraid to seek help. You did a nice job portraying this.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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This is a very interesting poem. I was expecting something quite different from the picture and description and was quite surprised by the conclusion. Sadly, child abuse by a parent/step-parent often happens silently and secretly, the child confused and torn in his/her feelings, afraid to seek help. You did a nice job portraying this.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you, gansach for your wonderful comments and nice review
Comment from Boogienights
This poem is well written and very powerful. You have addressed a very difficult subject and made it interesting and heartbreaking at the same time. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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This poem is well written and very powerful. You have addressed a very difficult subject and made it interesting and heartbreaking at the same time. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you, boogienights for your a nice review
Comment from juliaSjames
Hard-hitting rhymed quatrains about the evil that blooms within human beings. The contrast between the first and last stanzas reveals the horrifying truth of a man who was loyal to his country but betrayed his family.
Those pirate ship references ... I didn't get them. Since they loom so large in your write, I feel that I haven't plumbed the depths of this poem. Nevertheless, for your courage in writing it and for its poetic merit, the write is deserving of six stars.
Way back in the day while studying for a sociology degree, I was exposed to case studies, too dreadful to mention here, visited prisons etc. Hopefully more enlightened and trained social workers and police forces have brought about a diminishing of such intentional, and unintentional (result of ignorance) crimes. Yet, despite the tightening of rules and regulations in the current "me too" culture, sexual abuse of children continues. Because children are afraid to speak out, and even if they do, very often they are not believed. I recall my late mother counseling me in private before I married to remain constantly vigilant. She was aware that there is something about innocence that can awaken predatory instincts in some men.
It is mothers and grandmothers who must hold the high ground. Thank you for doing this in your poem.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hard-hitting rhymed quatrains about the evil that blooms within human beings. The contrast between the first and last stanzas reveals the horrifying truth of a man who was loyal to his country but betrayed his family.
Those pirate ship references ... I didn't get them. Since they loom so large in your write, I feel that I haven't plumbed the depths of this poem. Nevertheless, for your courage in writing it and for its poetic merit, the write is deserving of six stars.
Way back in the day while studying for a sociology degree, I was exposed to case studies, too dreadful to mention here, visited prisons etc. Hopefully more enlightened and trained social workers and police forces have brought about a diminishing of such intentional, and unintentional (result of ignorance) crimes. Yet, despite the tightening of rules and regulations in the current "me too" culture, sexual abuse of children continues. Because children are afraid to speak out, and even if they do, very often they are not believed. I recall my late mother counseling me in private before I married to remain constantly vigilant. She was aware that there is something about innocence that can awaken predatory instincts in some men.
It is mothers and grandmothers who must hold the high ground. Thank you for doing this in your poem.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi, Julia. Wow. This is a fantastic review. I want to thank you for both your wonderful comments and a super review
But I also wanted to deal with the question you have. Why is it titled pirate ships? If you look in the 4th stanza, it talks about the girl and her father, pretending cars were pirate ships in a more innocent era in her life She could just play with him and not worry about other stuff. Then, she got older. we know what happened next
Comment from Begin Again
What a sad and emotional story you've written in your poem. So many young children are abused and threatened if they expose what happened... the horror haunts them throughout their lives. Very well done!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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What a sad and emotional story you've written in your poem. So many young children are abused and threatened if they expose what happened... the horror haunts them throughout their lives. Very well done!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol for your wonderful comments and a super review
Comment from JanPerry
Hi Pam, I like your pirate ship. It's similar to the one at Disneyland, Fantasia section. I have a photo of it too.
The story is sad. Who is the girl, is it you? She loses her father family figurehead. If he could have been saved in time, things may have been different.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi Pam, I like your pirate ship. It's similar to the one at Disneyland, Fantasia section. I have a photo of it too.
The story is sad. Who is the girl, is it you? She loses her father family figurehead. If he could have been saved in time, things may have been different.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi Jan. No I?m not the little girl. I just wanted to write about this topic and so I put myself in her place. Thank you for a lovely review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness Pam, this is such a powerful write! This is one of the best poems I have read in a while, great metre and rhymes and the chilling sentiment has such a powerful message here. I am glad I have a six for you as this poem is worthy of so much more, a fine post, you hit the spot with this one, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Oh my goodness Pam, this is such a powerful write! This is one of the best poems I have read in a while, great metre and rhymes and the chilling sentiment has such a powerful message here. I am glad I have a six for you as this poem is worthy of so much more, a fine post, you hit the spot with this one, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi, Dolly. Thank you so much for that six star. Thank you also for your wonderful comments and super review.
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You are most welcome Pam, well deserved x
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hi Pam, this was super hard for me to read because I was molested by my godfather and I wished him dead all the time. However he didn't die, but he ruined my entire childhood because he threatened me if anyone heard about it, something bad would happen to my dad.
I am guessing you are the little girl here, and wow, like I said powerful. Those creeps have to take our life away and his own daughter committed suicide at 21 because of it. I was too little to be strong so I had to hide, but thankfully it wasn't my father who did it. Great job telling it in a poem. If you ever want to talk....
Debi
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Hi Pam, this was super hard for me to read because I was molested by my godfather and I wished him dead all the time. However he didn't die, but he ruined my entire childhood because he threatened me if anyone heard about it, something bad would happen to my dad.
I am guessing you are the little girl here, and wow, like I said powerful. Those creeps have to take our life away and his own daughter committed suicide at 21 because of it. I was too little to be strong so I had to hide, but thankfully it wasn't my father who did it. Great job telling it in a poem. If you ever want to talk....
Debi
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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I?m sorry for your loss. Noo I?m not the little girl. I?m just writing from her standpoint