War
A scene reenacted too many times.45 total reviews
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
This is a great 5 line poem. Succinct but says it all about the heart-breaking partings that war inflicts.
I like how you rhymed lines 1,2 and 4 & lines 3 & 5 fitting it all together naturally. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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This is a great 5 line poem. Succinct but says it all about the heart-breaking partings that war inflicts.
I like how you rhymed lines 1,2 and 4 & lines 3 & 5 fitting it all together naturally. Excellent work.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Shirley, The rhyme scheme was a little challenging.
Comment from Natureschild
Hi Paul, Well done on crafting a concise and emotional poem. Your chosen words made it easy for me to connected to the soldiers tender request. Good luck in the contest. - Terry
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Hi Paul, Well done on crafting a concise and emotional poem. Your chosen words made it easy for me to connected to the soldiers tender request. Good luck in the contest. - Terry
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Terry. That scenario is played out all too often.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Begin Again
So many times, our loved ones are asked to step up and fight for their country, leaving behind their families, their lives and everything they have to protect their country. I wonder how they justify not supporting the veterans more when they return home....sometimes disabled, mental broken, and with nothing remaining. So sad!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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So many times, our loved ones are asked to step up and fight for their country, leaving behind their families, their lives and everything they have to protect their country. I wonder how they justify not supporting the veterans more when they return home....sometimes disabled, mental broken, and with nothing remaining. So sad!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Carol. You are so right about the returning vets who have come back to us with physical and mental problems.
Comment from nomi338
The Holy Bible has promised that the day will come when weapons of war will be converted into implements for farming. Where chemicals will do no harm, but will aid in the growth of life sustaining food and clean drinkable water. I pray for that day to come.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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The Holy Bible has promised that the day will come when weapons of war will be converted into implements for farming. Where chemicals will do no harm, but will aid in the growth of life sustaining food and clean drinkable water. I pray for that day to come.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the review, Nolan. That day cannot come fast enough.
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Amen, my brother.
Comment from Rene Tyo
Wonderful sentiment expressed here, well done in so few lines. I'll make a point of reading more of your works. Great picture selection as well........
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Wonderful sentiment expressed here, well done in so few lines. I'll make a point of reading more of your works. Great picture selection as well........
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Rene. I am not a frequent poster, but I will try put up some stuff that you will like.
Comment from Sanku
True .This has been acted,reenacted and will be reenacted again umpteen times.I dont think this 'civilised' society will ever stop fighting.Well done Too much grief packed into 5 lines and very effectively too.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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True .This has been acted,reenacted and will be reenacted again umpteen times.I dont think this 'civilised' society will ever stop fighting.Well done Too much grief packed into 5 lines and very effectively too.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Santha. War is one of the things that we poets frequently write about. Just think about a world without war. That would eliminate many poems that we have written. That would be fine with me.
Comment from Brad Dancer
Hard sometimes to comment on these shorter poems - but this was great. Short, sweet and got me right to the point and action, if you will. Quite touching and sad!!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Hard sometimes to comment on these shorter poems - but this was great. Short, sweet and got me right to the point and action, if you will. Quite touching and sad!!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Brad. I have a hard time reviewing the shorties, too. I also have trouble writing them.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A well crafted, rhyming 5 line verse. It may be spoken in the style of a former age but it's as current today as it ever was. And beautifully presented. Well done, Paul, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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A well crafted, rhyming 5 line verse. It may be spoken in the style of a former age but it's as current today as it ever was. And beautifully presented. Well done, Paul, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. I hate to write about war, but it is all around us.
Comment from lyenochka
You successfully crafted your five-line poem to rhyme every line. It made me think of all the wars going on and how many couples are parted. And these days with civilians in the bombed areas, so many are dying!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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You successfully crafted your five-line poem to rhyme every line. It made me think of all the wars going on and how many couples are parted. And these days with civilians in the bombed areas, so many are dying!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Helen. You are so right about the civilians - especially in Ukraine and Gaza.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Paul,
You've written an exceptional 5 line poem. Every soldier, sailor, airman has gone through this throughout history. In our Army, women sometimes leave their husbands and children to fight. I.e. (the gulf wars).
I like that your poem is open to the latter interpretation too.
Good luck , Paul.
Cindy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Paul,
You've written an exceptional 5 line poem. Every soldier, sailor, airman has gone through this throughout history. In our Army, women sometimes leave their husbands and children to fight. I.e. (the gulf wars).
I like that your poem is open to the latter interpretation too.
Good luck , Paul.
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. I hope to never short change the women.
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You?re welcome, Paul.😊