Where Do I Go?
For days when I feel like I'm in a room with no doors.39 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I read this as I am having a difficult day with my husband who suffers from Huntington's and I am feeling a bit overwhelmed.
Your moving words touched me deeply. Your author's note make the tragedy of the sorrow and pain this young man
so suffered much more heartbreaking.
Poignant and powerful words.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I read this as I am having a difficult day with my husband who suffers from Huntington's and I am feeling a bit overwhelmed.
Your moving words touched me deeply. Your author's note make the tragedy of the sorrow and pain this young man
so suffered much more heartbreaking.
Poignant and powerful words.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Your journey with your husband is one I hope you will tell and write about. Trust me, it will help when you are alone with it and you don't know what to do withh yourself because you have done nothing else for so long.
Thank you for this wonderful review and especially for your six. If ever you need to talk to someone who will listen, let me know. Bill
Comment from nomi338
The worst thing you can do as a family member or close associate of someone dying of a deadly disease is to send them away with the memory of your fighting in front of the one dying in pain. You do a disservice to the one already suffering. Shame on you.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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The worst thing you can do as a family member or close associate of someone dying of a deadly disease is to send them away with the memory of your fighting in front of the one dying in pain. You do a disservice to the one already suffering. Shame on you.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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You got it all wrong, you poor thing. Perhaps you failed to read my "author's notes." I didn't send anyone away and I wasn't involved in any fighting. -BillTha
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Where Do I Go?, speaks with a frail and seeking voice for the things in life and beyond that could raise a lonely spirit up before receding forever. Powerful.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This free verse, Where Do I Go?, speaks with a frail and seeking voice for the things in life and beyond that could raise a lonely spirit up before receding forever. Powerful.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Bill. I took your review very seriously because you really read it with a critical eye. Your review was one of the best. -Bill
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have succeed in conveying the deep sadness, the loss of hope, the loneliness of this young man. No one should feel this way - ever. I hope he found comfort. A very moving free verse.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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You have succeed in conveying the deep sadness, the loss of hope, the loneliness of this young man. No one should feel this way - ever. I hope he found comfort. A very moving free verse.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Ginda for reviewing this poem. He found some comfort, but he still chose to die when no one was there. -Bill
Comment from Neonewman
I have a cousin suffering from paralysis and hourly spasms. He now has stage four cancer in his liver and is ready to go. He's depressed and suffering but always happy to see visitors. Such a sad thing to watch. Thank you for sharing your talent. I feel this accurately describes what he is going through.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I have a cousin suffering from paralysis and hourly spasms. He now has stage four cancer in his liver and is ready to go. He's depressed and suffering but always happy to see visitors. Such a sad thing to watch. Thank you for sharing your talent. I feel this accurately describes what he is going through.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Not quite. He seems to have family and friends who still engage with him. My client didn't even have friends.
Thanks for the review, Steve. -Bill
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So sad.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your author notes about the collaboration with the 16 yearold cancer patient makes this an even sadder read. grasping at life's larger meaning - so unfair when this young one, and so many others, don't have long enough to find the meaning.
A beautiful and very poignant share, William.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Your author notes about the collaboration with the 16 yearold cancer patient makes this an even sadder read. grasping at life's larger meaning - so unfair when this young one, and so many others, don't have long enough to find the meaning.
A beautiful and very poignant share, William.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Pearl, for your wonderful review and I especially thank you for sharing one of your sixes.
Comment from karenina
An unbelievable soul-stirring poem. To read your author's notes is to increase the emotional impact of your supremely well-chosen words. As an RN I've attended to children who were aware of their diagnosis and ready to die. Often, they felt a "tug" from their parents to hold on.
Your final lines:
"O soul,
if I could just learn
to kiss the joy,
as it flies,
as it flies."
Are haunting... And hopeful... And they'll stay with me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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An unbelievable soul-stirring poem. To read your author's notes is to increase the emotional impact of your supremely well-chosen words. As an RN I've attended to children who were aware of their diagnosis and ready to die. Often, they felt a "tug" from their parents to hold on.
Your final lines:
"O soul,
if I could just learn
to kiss the joy,
as it flies,
as it flies."
Are haunting... And hopeful... And they'll stay with me!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Kaenina, for a wonderful review and also thank you for sharing one of your rare sixes. I am also appreciative of the "colleagiality" we share in this poem. -Bill
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My extreme pleasure!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How very sad this poem is William and you were there to help him through this very difficult time and it must have been very emotional and stressful for you. Your poem speaks to us of this poor man's life at the end as he was confined to his bed with no future to look forward to. I am glad he found comfort in the peace of the hospital before his death, a very touching post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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How very sad this poem is William and you were there to help him through this very difficult time and it must have been very emotional and stressful for you. Your poem speaks to us of this poor man's life at the end as he was confined to his bed with no future to look forward to. I am glad he found comfort in the peace of the hospital before his death, a very touching post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Dolly, you are highly respected on FS and thank you for taking the time to read this. I am only a novice to poetry when compared to your work. But this is a special poem because my
client helped me write it. I have a number of them like that because writing together was my way of bonding with them.
Thanks again. -Bill
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Wiliam
This is a very emotional poem that uses repetition well to express deep depression and anxiety over not understanding life.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hi Wiliam
This is a very emotional poem that uses repetition well to express deep depression and anxiety over not understanding life.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week
Joan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Joan, for your review. Unfortunately it didn't make it in the contest because of some administrative error. -Bill
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You're welcome. Sorry to here that, Bill.
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This contest entry is filled with emotion. The words you chose were perfect for showing the emotion of this situation. My heart goes out to this teenager's family. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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This contest entry is filled with emotion. The words you chose were perfect for showing the emotion of this situation. My heart goes out to this teenager's family. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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For some reason it got left out of the contest. Thank, Barbara, for your review. -Bill