Portrait of the Donor
A thrift store portrait reveals its owner's dark fate.22 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think there's a much more interesting story here than has been developed. There's a real skill tom these short pieces but this one feels a little rushed and jerky. Underdeveloped in a way.
All the best
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Hi there,
I think there's a much more interesting story here than has been developed. There's a real skill tom these short pieces but this one feels a little rushed and jerky. Underdeveloped in a way.
All the best
GMG
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Natureschild
The story's economy of language is impressive, creating a vivid and eerie atmosphere. The twist ending is particularly strong, delivering a chilling conclusion that leaves a lasting impact. It demonstrates skill in concise storytelling and leaves a lasting impact. Good luck for the contest. - Terry
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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The story's economy of language is impressive, creating a vivid and eerie atmosphere. The twist ending is particularly strong, delivering a chilling conclusion that leaves a lasting impact. It demonstrates skill in concise storytelling and leaves a lasting impact. Good luck for the contest. - Terry
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This reminds me of an episode from a show from the early 2000's called "The Gost Whisperer." Like you, that woman owned a thrift store of antiques, and there were always weird goings-on with the merchandise. (She had a "gift" of being able to "see" ghosts.)
Anyway, intriguing entry. I hope it does well for you in the polls! xo
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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This reminds me of an episode from a show from the early 2000's called "The Gost Whisperer." Like you, that woman owned a thrift store of antiques, and there were always weird goings-on with the merchandise. (She had a "gift" of being able to "see" ghosts.)
Anyway, intriguing entry. I hope it does well for you in the polls! xo
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this is terrifying and dark and I enjoyed this horror story for the contest, a chilling and inventive post, good luck with it, love Dolly x x x x x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Oh my goodness, this is terrifying and dark and I enjoyed this horror story for the contest, a chilling and inventive post, good luck with it, love Dolly x x x x x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I was going to say I bet the spirit of that picture followed her. My friend Mary who has since passed recently and I were creeped out by a picture in her former partner's living room. We decided to dowseto neutralize the negative energy we were getting from that picture.After that whenever we went in the room we didn't feel anything. It sounds like maybe Lucy was in a past life.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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I was going to say I bet the spirit of that picture followed her. My friend Mary who has since passed recently and I were creeped out by a picture in her former partner's living room. We decided to dowseto neutralize the negative energy we were getting from that picture.After that whenever we went in the room we didn't feel anything. It sounds like maybe Lucy was in a past life.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
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I'm very sensitive to the spirits of pictures.We were going near a yard sale and I couldn't even get out of my car. There was a line of pictures that the energy seemed to be way way too much I said no I'll stay in my car.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a great short story. I always think when I go into thrift stores that certain things could be haunted. This projected some great images when I read it. Thanks for this! ( love scary stuff!)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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This is a great short story. I always think when I go into thrift stores that certain things could be haunted. This projected some great images when I read it. Thanks for this! ( love scary stuff!)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
Comment from nomi338
Be careful of the eyes you look into, those very same eyes may be looking back at you. Pay attention to the unsolicited message that you hear, especially if that voice beckons you near.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Be careful of the eyes you look into, those very same eyes may be looking back at you. Pay attention to the unsolicited message that you hear, especially if that voice beckons you near.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
Comment from LJbutterfly
A successful horror flash fiction is unusual. However, you pulled it off. As your story developed, I did not expect the surprising ending. I'm glad you are back. This short story proves you have lots to offer. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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A successful horror flash fiction is unusual. However, you pulled it off. As your story developed, I did not expect the surprising ending. I'm glad you are back. This short story proves you have lots to offer. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!!
Comment from jessizero
I wish you had listed this as "horror" and not "general," but that's no big deal. Your story was disturbing, which means that you got a strong response from the reader, which is a good thing. You told the story well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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I wish you had listed this as "horror" and not "general," but that's no big deal. Your story was disturbing, which means that you got a strong response from the reader, which is a good thing. You told the story well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I love this creepy little 75 word flash story. It was a full story even in such short form and it gave a twist ending we look for in this format. A very fun read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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I love this creepy little 75 word flash story. It was a full story even in such short form and it gave a twist ending we look for in this format. A very fun read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!!