Murder At The Berkshire
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "New Arrival"Things aren't as they seem at the elderly home.
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Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is a very good start to a story. Good luck with writing it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!!!! Best wishes to you. Thanks for including the character glossary as well.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This is a very good start to a story. Good luck with writing it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!!!! Best wishes to you. Thanks for including the character glossary as well.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you! We shall see how it goes.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I found this to be well-written save for the beginning of paragraph five as I first thought the people spoken of were the employees, but with time saw they were the other residents. Good luck with your new genre, By the way, what genre is this?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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I found this to be well-written save for the beginning of paragraph five as I first thought the people spoken of were the employees, but with time saw they were the other residents. Good luck with your new genre, By the way, what genre is this?
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Mystery? Guess we shall learn together.
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ce bien
Comment from BethShelby
I like the start of this. So far is seems you're doing job with it. You say it is out of your comfort zone but so far it feels more in my comfort zone. We need try things out of comfort zone.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I like the start of this. So far is seems you're doing job with it. You say it is out of your comfort zone but so far it feels more in my comfort zone. We need try things out of comfort zone.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Agreed. Let's see what happens!
Comment from Wendy G
I don't remember seeing any previous chapters to this one, which promises to be interesting despite the personalities of these wary and dour inhabitants of this home for the elderly.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I don't remember seeing any previous chapters to this one, which promises to be interesting despite the personalities of these wary and dour inhabitants of this home for the elderly.
Wendy
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the fix! This, is the very first chapter. Hope you follow along.
Comment from Colorado Owl
Even though I've only read this one chapter, I'm already engaged with the characters. I feel sorry for Hattie, but I have a feeling that her life is about to get interesting! Thank you for your story - well done.
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Even though I've only read this one chapter, I'm already engaged with the characters. I feel sorry for Hattie, but I have a feeling that her life is about to get interesting! Thank you for your story - well done.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thanks! This is the first chapter.
