Devil or Angel
Tempting Vision23 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
I sure do hope it was white and not red. Because if it was red, you might soon be dead. An arrow not aimed at your heart but aimed instead at your head. Such is the nature of halos not white but red.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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I sure do hope it was white and not red. Because if it was red, you might soon be dead. An arrow not aimed at your heart but aimed instead at your head. Such is the nature of halos not white but red.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from tfawcus
It can be hard to tell from that distance. But still, nothing ventured, nothing gained. Some devils can be most appealing! I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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It can be hard to tell from that distance. But still, nothing ventured, nothing gained. Some devils can be most appealing! I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wait just a dang minute here! I feel like I'm getting mixed messages here: You SAY halo...and you SHOW a girl with a halo in your picture...but then she's got those red eyes and that mouth that makes me think there's fangs in there. Is his pitter-patter drowing out the sound of Common Sense, I wonder???
Nicely done, Mystery Poet!! xo
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Wait just a dang minute here! I feel like I'm getting mixed messages here: You SAY halo...and you SHOW a girl with a halo in your picture...but then she's got those red eyes and that mouth that makes me think there's fangs in there. Is his pitter-patter drowing out the sound of Common Sense, I wonder???
Nicely done, Mystery Poet!! xo
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
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My pleasure!
Comment from jessizero
I think you did a great job sharing this poem of just fifteen words. I liked your sentiments, and I liked the picture you supplied to accompany the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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I think you did a great job sharing this poem of just fifteen words. I liked your sentiments, and I liked the picture you supplied to accompany the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A most interesting short piece, which only disappointed for not having additional words to tell us more. Good luck with your entry. Who gets the credit for the picture?
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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A most interesting short piece, which only disappointed for not having additional words to tell us more. Good luck with your entry. Who gets the credit for the picture?
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Comment from Thesis
This is an intriguing entry. How could anyone know what lies beneath the halo? I'm sure as this is a love poem, one would hope she is an angel, however, it all depends on your expectations. It's a good entry to the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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This is an intriguing entry. How could anyone know what lies beneath the halo? I'm sure as this is a love poem, one would hope she is an angel, however, it all depends on your expectations. It's a good entry to the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Remarkable what can be captured in 15 words! But I think you got your message over well. I mean, you'd have to react to that vision in blue, either in fear or adoration:) Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Remarkable what can be captured in 15 words! But I think you got your message over well. I mean, you'd have to react to that vision in blue, either in fear or adoration:) Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Begin Again
Everything dressed in white isn't always pure, they say. By the looks of her eyes, she got that halo at a bargain store. lol But do you care? No, not at the moment as your heart goes pitter patter. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Everything dressed in white isn't always pure, they say. By the looks of her eyes, she got that halo at a bargain store. lol But do you care? No, not at the moment as your heart goes pitter patter. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you!!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well, you have certainly written a love poem in those few words. The picture you found, did that come first, or did you find it after you'd written the poem? Either way, it was a very well done. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Well, you have certainly written a love poem in those few words. The picture you found, did that come first, or did you find it after you'd written the poem? Either way, it was a very well done. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Found the picture first. Devil or maybe an Angel. Thank you.
Comment from CornishChick
I give you credit for writing so much with so little! However, the last line should show more of the dilemma of the title for the poem to make more sense. It did grab my attention. I read it numerous times! Kudos on your bravery!
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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I give you credit for writing so much with so little! However, the last line should show more of the dilemma of the title for the poem to make more sense. It did grab my attention. I read it numerous times! Kudos on your bravery!
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Want the reader to decide Devil or Angel. Was there a dilemma?