Spirited Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "When Trouble Knocks Chap 2"Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks
22 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Things are really heating up! I guess there are problems for Naomi. I was sure that one of the ghosts like Danny or Eleanor was trailing her. But you didn't mention the signature clue of a chill in the air. Glad that Danny forced Matthew to explain the backstory with Naomi!
Once or twice a week is what most of the other novelists I follow do for posting frequency. I hope you don't get complaints wanting greater frequency! Summer and with the Olympics is a time with less reviewers online, too.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Things are really heating up! I guess there are problems for Naomi. I was sure that one of the ghosts like Danny or Eleanor was trailing her. But you didn't mention the signature clue of a chill in the air. Glad that Danny forced Matthew to explain the backstory with Naomi!
Once or twice a week is what most of the other novelists I follow do for posting frequency. I hope you don't get complaints wanting greater frequency! Summer and with the Olympics is a time with less reviewers online, too.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Danni was busy with Donatelli so Naomi lucked out for now, but I am sure her time will come. I'm glad that you recognize the clue of a chill in the air. It's suble but always explains when the spirit is there.
As for posting, I got it from both sides. This is a complicated story so I probably will get slowed down a bit... at least for now. My mind is spinning in a hundred directions...And yes, I enjoy watching the Olympics too!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting developments in this chapter and if will lead to further complications, I foresee. No one is without things to hide which opens up possibilities for blackmail etc.
I also was finding it a bit difficult to keep up with your impressive output (and of course it's less time consuming to read than to write, so u you oh must be going at a mad crazy pace!!!) Very well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Interesting developments in this chapter and if will lead to further complications, I foresee. No one is without things to hide which opens up possibilities for blackmail etc.
I also was finding it a bit difficult to keep up with your impressive output (and of course it's less time consuming to read than to write, so u you oh must be going at a mad crazy pace!!!) Very well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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WRiting keeps me sane and focused on something worthwhile (at least I hope) so maybe I write and write but save it to post as a slower pace. Though I have some who aren't happy with that plan either. We will see! I want everyone to enjoy what I do.
And this story is a bit out of my league with pageants and more difficult to write so it might slow me down too.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
As usual you start running and tell a great story with lots of action and questions. Donatelli was great in the last book, and he is a little less tightly wound in this one. The lady lawyer is interesting, but I don't think she will get along with Danny.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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As usual you start running and tell a great story with lots of action and questions. Donatelli was great in the last book, and he is a little less tightly wound in this one. The lady lawyer is interesting, but I don't think she will get along with Danny.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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You are right! Naomi got caught up in things she never intended and the more she tries to push it away, she's trapped. Danni will see through her in a flash.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I think this visitor to Naomi seems to be someone she's afraid of , but is a material witness to this investigation that Donatello and Danny are investigating, a ghost investigator would be handy, because the ghost can go unseen. There are a few things you might have to explain about ghosts,like appearing in different places at will, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I think this visitor to Naomi seems to be someone she's afraid of , but is a material witness to this investigation that Donatello and Danny are investigating, a ghost investigator would be handy, because the ghost can go unseen. There are a few things you might have to explain about ghosts,like appearing in different places at will, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank so much Roy....I seen several stories on Lifetime and netflix that have ghosts appearing so that's what I based it on...if big tv can do it, little ole me can too. Maybe they aren't really ghosts but angels walking amongst us. Wouldn't that be nice?
Smiles, Carol
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Well angels are angels,
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Jus my imagination running wild!
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Of course
Comment from BethShelby
I always enjoy your stories. A detective with a ghost that can appear and disappear seems to give him an unfair advantage. I guess we could all use one those in our lives. It seems this ghost is enjoying being dead and would rather hang around that move on.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I always enjoy your stories. A detective with a ghost that can appear and disappear seems to give him an unfair advantage. I guess we could all use one those in our lives. It seems this ghost is enjoying being dead and would rather hang around that move on.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I sense you might not be too fond of my ghosts and the fact that they are still playing at life. Maybe we could think of them as worker bees or angels? I just hope they add enough enjoyment and humor to the story to make it interesting and fun.
Smiles, Carol
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No, Carol, I don't have a problem with your ghosts. If I sounded like I was tired of ghosts, please forgive me. I was exhaused yesterday and falling half asleap. I love your writing.
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No problem...I was reading early or I should say in the middle of the night too! We both need sleep! I am having fun with the ghosts so I do hope you are enjoying it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering about the visitor to Naomi. It definitely makes things complicated. That's a good thing. I am wondering why Matthew spends his nights drinking. What is on his mind? I like this story. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I'm wondering about the visitor to Naomi. It definitely makes things complicated. That's a good thing. I am wondering why Matthew spends his nights drinking. What is on his mind? I like this story. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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He seemed like a creepy character who knew too much and wasn't afraid to use it to get what he wanted. And Matthew...he's feeling sorry for himself in many ways. One he lost a case for doing something stupid and two he thought he might have something going with Naomi..but found out he was wrong. Men! Now Danny is here to set him straight again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Very enjoyable and moving at a good pace for me. Believeable dialogue and interesting interactions between characters. I like the idea of Wednesday and Sunday postings. I get a little overwhelmed with all the reviewing I do as well as trying to write. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Very enjoyable and moving at a good pace for me. Believeable dialogue and interesting interactions between characters. I like the idea of Wednesday and Sunday postings. I get a little overwhelmed with all the reviewing I do as well as trying to write. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I'm going to try and slow down but I can't promise anything. LOL I know it's tough to read and get $50.00 to post so maybe it will be a little easier if I have more days. But I just love to write! Thanks so much for reviewing, Marilyn.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, as for me, I can never get enough of your stories, but for your benefit, I'm sure that cutting back to two posts a week will definitely get you more readers who can take time to enjoy your fine writing even more. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Well, as for me, I can never get enough of your stories, but for your benefit, I'm sure that cutting back to two posts a week will definitely get you more readers who can take time to enjoy your fine writing even more. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I can't imagine not writing a story or two every day, but some think I should slow down while others say write write write. I guess I'll give it a shot but I can't promise anything. LOL thanks for stopping by as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Well, it seems Donatelli has a sliding scale on integrity... Not to mention a backpack full of indiscretions.
Danny is not bound by "mortal" search and seizure rules however...
She's sharp! Her character is A bit snarky which will be an interesting juxtaposition from Eleanor's ways.
Who was that man threatening Naomi I wonder?
She would have recognized herbed lover!
Okay then!
I'm hooked again!
I'm not sure why anyone would critique how often you post!
It's simple enough to read any chapter at our own pace!
I recall catching up on your last book by reading three or four chapters in a single night!
It was even more satisfying to be able to follow the chapters in "clusters"--
Just my opinion.
Nice opening chapters!
Your fan,
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Well, it seems Donatelli has a sliding scale on integrity... Not to mention a backpack full of indiscretions.
Danny is not bound by "mortal" search and seizure rules however...
She's sharp! Her character is A bit snarky which will be an interesting juxtaposition from Eleanor's ways.
Who was that man threatening Naomi I wonder?
She would have recognized herbed lover!
Okay then!
I'm hooked again!
I'm not sure why anyone would critique how often you post!
It's simple enough to read any chapter at our own pace!
I recall catching up on your last book by reading three or four chapters in a single night!
It was even more satisfying to be able to follow the chapters in "clusters"--
Just my opinion.
Nice opening chapters!
Your fan,
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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I remember waking up in the middle of the night to discover you'd binged on the chapters. What a rush that was for me! I'm not sure I can slow down to twice a week because a you see I have already written three and it's WEdmesday. LOL But this is a complicated story so we will see. thanks for enjoying the beginning! I think Danny will add spice and Eleanor the soft appeal... out of respect Danny might have to curtail herself when Eleanor is around...if she can!
Naomi never intended to get pulled into all the dark sided stuff but she never can figure how to get out of it. Matthew is quite lucky to not be dating her but he doesn't realize that. He's disgruntled because he lost the case but for some reason he's still intrigued with her and wants to pursue it forther...Silly man!
Let's see what happens!
Smiles and hugs, C
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LOL. The detective is a man, man don't like to lose, she's attractive... I'm not a detective but I've met egos, er men like that!
I think Danny will likely need some "advisory meetings" with Eleanor and I was pretty sure somehow you'd be weaving that together.
I don't go beyond that because you ALWAYS come up with the cleverest twists and turns to your plots...
I allow myself some little guesses and then enjoy you blowing me away...
(Post as often as you like!-- If I can review you in six chapter bunches for two cents, anybody else who is truly invested in your book will also find the time somehow...
Karenina
Comment from Sally Law
Great second chapter and addition to your new book, my friend! I love your sassy ghost, Danny. The detective will be helped--if he'd just listen to her! She doesn't need a search warrant either. Just saying!
Naomi's right. It was an illegal search whether she was drunk or not. Besides, it's unethical, and the detective should have known it would've been inadmissible in court. Having Danny around will help him think more clearly, and it doesn't hurt she can walk through walls. A timely partnership from the get-go. I look forward to more.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xos
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Great second chapter and addition to your new book, my friend! I love your sassy ghost, Danny. The detective will be helped--if he'd just listen to her! She doesn't need a search warrant either. Just saying!
Naomi's right. It was an illegal search whether she was drunk or not. Besides, it's unethical, and the detective should have known it would've been inadmissible in court. Having Danny around will help him think more clearly, and it doesn't hurt she can walk through walls. A timely partnership from the get-go. I look forward to more.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xos
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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You are right...He might not have intended to be searching for something other than a razor, but he knew when he found it he couldn't use it. That's why he's sour with an attitude because he's mad at himself more than anyone else. thanks for reading Sally. I greatly appreciate it. Your input rates high with me because yu are so good at the detective stories.
Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
