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The problem of creating a non-addictive painkiller

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Brian really lucked out in his roommate situation. Julia did not but the neighbors sound like fun. They both seem to enjoy school and aren't yearning for home. They also know how to be creative on the phone.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
    I think that last comment helps for sure to keep them together through four years!
Comment from jmdg1954
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Oh those young college kids with an insatiable appetite for sexual activities. A rather simplistic chapter which I'm guessing will begin to set the stage for things to come.
Excellent work...
John

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    Thanks, John. Yep. I wanted to introduce Daniel because he's going to provide some entertainment shortly. Had to lay the groundwork for that.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Contrary to what TV or movies tell us, women these days go to college to study. I am feeling dismal today because dump the trump is running for president and he has filed and been granted bankruptcy six times. A business man who is so lame at business he has to screw his workers to make a profit. This thing is supposed to ruin, I mean rule, our country. I despair. Karen

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    I would hesitate to call someone who is a billionaire lame at business. I think when you make as many deals as him, some of them are going to fail. But that's the key to entrepreneurship. You have to take risks, and some pay off big, and some don't. But when you start with a million and turn it into several billion, on balance he's been a good businessman. I'm not so sure about his personality, but his business acumen: pretty good.
Comment from Ulla
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Ah, so they are finding time on Skype. I wonder if what they're doing there would be allowed in real life. But, of course, I don't have a clue. Jim, please don't take offence, but I think you have to work on your dialogue. It comes across slightly stilted. All best, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    No offense taken. It's always a work in progress. Some examples of what you felt to be stilted would be helpful to me.

    I researched this first and Skype sex is not illegal as long as it isn't for money, it's between consenting adults, and doesn't involve minors.

reply by Ulla on 05-Aug-2024
    I will give you some examples. Bear with me. I'm glad you're not taking offence, because none intended.lol
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Wow, more naughtiness! They're insatiable! This is going to be interesting. I wonder if they might get into trouble for this (me again-I know, always on the look out for a fall). You've really injected a lot of youthful excitement into this pair making all us old fogies feel young again:)) Excellent dialogue as ever, diversifying with Daniel. We're all set up for the next chapter in your ever intriguing story. Well done, Jim! Debbie

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    I did check to see if this would get them in trouble (not by personally checking it out, but by research!) and I found out that if it's by consenting adults (18 or over), and not for paid sex, it isn't illegal. Perhaps not the wisest thing to do, as hackers might get ahold of it, but not illegal. So glad you're feeling young again. This has been rather refreshing for me to write too. I may not have been quite as naughty as these two, but I do have some fond memories of a few exciting trysts in my youth.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I'm pretty sure what Julia and Brian are talking about isn't allowed on Skype, but I could be wrong, or maybe they won't get caught, but then that messes with the story. HMMM. I am really liking this story.

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    I researched this first and as long as it is between consenting adults (over 18), it is not illegal. Glad you are enjoying it, Barbara, despite the prurient parts.
Comment from BethShelby
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So far it seems they are working things out with Skype sessions. The roommake seems nice. It seem prettty typical for college. It seems Brian is finding it more challenging thatn highschool.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    Next best thing, I guess, though I've never tried it!

    I think college is a rude awakening for many who are not used to studying very much. But Brian is a bright fellow, and he adjusts. Besides, his girlfriend isn't there, and he's really not interested in pursuing other girls.
Comment from Neonewman
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I was wondering when and how they would find time to Skype, and it took the whole damn chapter to get there, lol. Well, That's your draw for the next chapter. Jim, your ability to tell a story is exceptional, my friend.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    Yeah, gotta keep you interested in reading the next chapter! Thanks for your kind remark, Steve. We've got a little humor coming up soon.
reply by Neonewman on 05-Aug-2024
    I love humor! Always a pleasure, my friend.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Hum Drum chapter until the end when my mind wanders thinking salacious thoughts. Prove me right or prove me wrong. I await the next chapter's release.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    Hey, why do you think I put that at the end? Gotta keep you coming back. I'll be taking advantage of Daniel's naivete in the coming chapters, which I think may interest you more. Had to take some time to set this up properly.
reply by Tom Horonzy on 05-Aug-2024
    Gotcha
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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This felt natural and authentic, which is important since there is so much dialogue. You definitely nailed that Botswana syntax. Do you know someone from there, yourself?

Sooo...more sex, um, coming up, I see. Purely for medicinal purposes for our protagonist, of course..

xoxox

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    Yes, absolutely. He needs to understand those endorphins so he will know what to do about them in his eventual cure for pain. :)

    Have you ever read any of the books in the No. 1 Ladies Detective Agency series by Alexander McCall Smith? That takes place in Botswana and uses authentic language for the characters. Those books are very funny and endearing.
reply by Rachelle Allen on 05-Aug-2024
    No, but I bet I would love them. I'll put one in my queue! Thanks for the recommendation! xo
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    May as well read the first in the series. It's called The No. 1 Ladies' Detective Agency. They are slow moving but very funny and a real delight. Lots of humorous digressions. Wonderful characters.
reply by Rachelle Allen on 05-Aug-2024
    Okay! Thanks for the advice!