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Comment from Wayne Fowler
He got potato mashed? Gross! (smiley face here)
with three last names. - uh, 'first' names?
Nice story, nicely written. Too bad , the measly payoff. (pouty face here)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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He got potato mashed? Gross! (smiley face here)
with three last names. - uh, 'first' names?
Nice story, nicely written. Too bad , the measly payoff. (pouty face here)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Okay Mr. Picky Three first names. Wayne allen James, John Philip Wayne. Aluminum cans. :-)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Wow! Pretty brutal end for Mr. Howard Dean Arthur! It sounds like the whole group was in on this one, but no one will know that from the video:-)
You got to do all your favorite things here, Karen: use lots of creative names, degrade men, and give us a twisty ending. Nice job.
Hope you're getting settled into your new place in between writes.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Wow! Pretty brutal end for Mr. Howard Dean Arthur! It sounds like the whole group was in on this one, but no one will know that from the video:-)
You got to do all your favorite things here, Karen: use lots of creative names, degrade men, and give us a twisty ending. Nice job.
Hope you're getting settled into your new place in between writes.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I do have a thing about names. Usually I get a name in my head, and then i sit down and write.
Sometimes I in awe of the ego of men. The squirrliest looking guy will think we deserves MS. America.AMAZING Karen
Comment from SimianSavant
I read through this twice to make sure I'd read this twice. A talking monkey safety inspector named Howard Dean Arthur? Or is the monkey picture there just to confuse the reader? What in the world am I reading? Well it says "man" in it. So I am guessing the pic is just for fun.
While not super coherent without context (I am more used to seeing something like this as a crazy contest entry, with some notes), this is pretty entertaining with a wild twist of descriptive humor, and some political history awareness. This comes from the pen of a skilled writer who is having a bit of fun with himself and the reader.
Minor edit: He said this with same nice demeanor he had been using all day. <= missing THE
Clever use of implied fate at the end, without literally saying what happened (a cutaway shot). This could be a film scene.
Thanks for the read,
🦍
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I read through this twice to make sure I'd read this twice. A talking monkey safety inspector named Howard Dean Arthur? Or is the monkey picture there just to confuse the reader? What in the world am I reading? Well it says "man" in it. So I am guessing the pic is just for fun.
While not super coherent without context (I am more used to seeing something like this as a crazy contest entry, with some notes), this is pretty entertaining with a wild twist of descriptive humor, and some political history awareness. This comes from the pen of a skilled writer who is having a bit of fun with himself and the reader.
Minor edit: He said this with same nice demeanor he had been using all day. <= missing THE
Clever use of implied fate at the end, without literally saying what happened (a cutaway shot). This could be a film scene.
Thanks for the read,
🦍
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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No one else caught that thank you. I will edit. When I went hunting for picture of guys falling into a crusher I was as shocked as you that I could find none. So I found thsi handsome ape in my photos, and the look on his face could mean anything you want. Works for me! Thanks for the read. I owe you two. Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
Another tale with your ending touch of righteous indignation. Yes, I recognized the names in this one, too. I always want to be on your good side. You are not one to mess with!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Another tale with your ending touch of righteous indignation. Yes, I recognized the names in this one, too. I always want to be on your good side. You are not one to mess with!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Come on, I am as sweet as can be. I do not like people that take advantage of others.It makes me mental. Thanks for the read. karen
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I would never take advantage of you.
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hope you don't mind, I've put the duo story on the back burner. I can't find us a match.
Nathaniel is calling. He isn't as sweet as he appears.:-)
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Whenever you write, I'll be there to read it.
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Two more ready to go. Karen
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I'll be on the lookout for them.
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Is this a series of chapters? Author's name is familiar but if I was A
New Reviewer I'd be lost as this is somewhere further along than an introduction.
And even I was lost with who Alicia and Felicia were.
I follow Jim Wile and he begins numbering each chapter, adds a recap before new thoughts and ends each release with a description of characters
Chk him out
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Is this a series of chapters? Author's name is familiar but if I was A
New Reviewer I'd be lost as this is somewhere further along than an introduction.
And even I was lost with who Alicia and Felicia were.
I follow Jim Wile and he begins numbering each chapter, adds a recap before new thoughts and ends each release with a description of characters
Chk him out
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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This is a single story, and you have read me many times and some quite recently. I don't understand where exactly your confusion is."Howard needed two witnesses for the signed and notarized document, so two of the workers on the floor he was touring Felicia and Alice signed his paper for him. Karen
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It seemed to be a continuation of something written prior which I could not recall. That's all. I understood the story. No ill intent intended.
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Nope, just a quick story. :-)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm happy now because we're back to gory and death! He definitely had it coming and, in a very succinct story, you conveyed that perfectly. I could almost smell his breath too:)) Well done! Debbie
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I'm happy now because we're back to gory and death! He definitely had it coming and, in a very succinct story, you conveyed that perfectly. I could almost smell his breath too:)) Well done! Debbie
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Bloody aren't you? I have many layers. I have been working on trying to write a novel as so many have asked me too. My plan is at the end of each chapter to offer two or three ways to go. Every reviewer can vote If fifteen review the chapter that week two pick he goes back home five pick he dumps candy and goes to dallas and eight pick goingto dallas with candy then i will write about him going to dallas with candy in the next chapter. I'm gonna call it "Write me a story" Whadda think?