Return To Concorde Valley
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Finale Part 2"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Beautifully done, Rhonda, as expected. Love the humour (Echo's tease about kissing Hades), the fun (the food fights) and this exquisite day of, not just one wedding, but two. You deserve to be very proud of this imaginative creation that has entwined classical characters with mortals in a triumph of good over evil, all within a vividly described setting of nature's wonderland. It's a story that can also be shared with children as well as adults. And the delightful visuals are the icing on the wedding cake:)) Well done! Debbie xo
then (s)queezed her arm
It had been a week since the war's end and his parents(') return to Concorde Valley
On the top (were) two rearing horses
Echo reached out and touc(h)ed the one that represented Nifty
He threw a coc(k)tail weenie at his little sister
The gesture was accompan(ied) by
Mary stared straight (ahead) afraid...
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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Beautifully done, Rhonda, as expected. Love the humour (Echo's tease about kissing Hades), the fun (the food fights) and this exquisite day of, not just one wedding, but two. You deserve to be very proud of this imaginative creation that has entwined classical characters with mortals in a triumph of good over evil, all within a vividly described setting of nature's wonderland. It's a story that can also be shared with children as well as adults. And the delightful visuals are the icing on the wedding cake:)) Well done! Debbie xo
then (s)queezed her arm
It had been a week since the war's end and his parents(') return to Concorde Valley
On the top (were) two rearing horses
Echo reached out and touc(h)ed the one that represented Nifty
He threw a coc(k)tail weenie at his little sister
The gesture was accompan(ied) by
Mary stared straight (ahead) afraid...
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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Debbie, my friend, I thank you for the stars, and for following so patiently along. It's been over a year since I started this project, and there were times I wondered if it would ever end, but here it is, and here you still are.
Thank you for your support and eye for details,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from nomi338
What an epic adventure story. One of powerful forces facing trial that were not easily overcome just because they were powerful beings some blessed with immortality. Love proved to be the secret and most powerful secret weapon that eventually overcame all obstacles. Awesome read, awesome write.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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What an epic adventure story. One of powerful forces facing trial that were not easily overcome just because they were powerful beings some blessed with immortality. Love proved to be the secret and most powerful secret weapon that eventually overcame all obstacles. Awesome read, awesome write.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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Thank you so very much, Nolan. You're presence and support of this project has been so encouraging. From your frequent six stars, this time included, to your praise, you've been an integral part of the journey.
Hugs,
Rhonda
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You told a wonderfully exciting and thrilling epic story that I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Now I want more.
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I'm going to start on a prequel this next week. I had written the prologue for it in 2019, but got no further. I'll pick it back up now. Thanks for being a friend!
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I will be on the lookout for it.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Ok, I will be honest that I did not follow real well all of this as I didn't read it because of my eye. Not sure if you do a real long one next time if I can read it but will try today with the audio and it was pretty awesome, the best that I could follow. . And I loved all the pictures along the way. That was really cool.
Awesome job on this whole story. Great job!! Next time I will know what is going on. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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Ok, I will be honest that I did not follow real well all of this as I didn't read it because of my eye. Not sure if you do a real long one next time if I can read it but will try today with the audio and it was pretty awesome, the best that I could follow. . And I loved all the pictures along the way. That was really cool.
Awesome job on this whole story. Great job!! Next time I will know what is going on. Love, Debi
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
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Dear, dear, Debi,
I thank you so much for all the support you've always given me, on and off the site. You're my hero, my friend, and I appreciate the six stars. I'll start the new book soon and will let you know.
Big hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Jacob1395
I could really feel the love Hermes had for Mary in your writing, and their joy when they were finally able to be together after he made her young again. It will definitely be a hard choice for her to make one of her children immortal, I'm sure many people could never imagine that choice. Another excellent, engaging piece Rhonda. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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I could really feel the love Hermes had for Mary in your writing, and their joy when they were finally able to be together after he made her young again. It will definitely be a hard choice for her to make one of her children immortal, I'm sure many people could never imagine that choice. Another excellent, engaging piece Rhonda. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Jacob, thank you so much for your six star rating and for the review that helps me focus in on what worked in the chapter. I appreciate you dropping in here at the end. I will start the prequel soon. I really hope you read it was well.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Rhonda, this wonderful story has finally come to an end and a very happy end at that. I have so enjoyed this great adventure. And that was me saying I don't do fantasy stories. Now, fancy that! I loved every single step of the way.
Echo stolled = strolled
A big hug to you, my friend. What an achievement! Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Oh, Rhonda, this wonderful story has finally come to an end and a very happy end at that. I have so enjoyed this great adventure. And that was me saying I don't do fantasy stories. Now, fancy that! I loved every single step of the way.
Echo stolled = strolled
A big hug to you, my friend. What an achievement! Ulla xxx
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Ulla, thank you so very much for all your months of support on this book. I appreciate you stepping out of your comfort zone to embrace something new. Unfortunately, my next book will be fantasy as well, lol. Big hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda------all is well that ends well------wouldn't it be nice if a kiss could make us younger? It didn't quite work that way with me. I kissed the girl of my dreams and aged 28 years, into this knrled, bitter dude I see in the mirror every morning!
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda------all is well that ends well------wouldn't it be nice if a kiss could make us younger? It didn't quite work that way with me. I kissed the girl of my dreams and aged 28 years, into this knrled, bitter dude I see in the mirror every morning!
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Hehe, yeah, some kisses will get you into trouble. That's what I keep trying to tell my sons, but they believe this version of love, hehe. I wonder who's fault that is?
Thanks so much for staying with me on this journey!! You've been a fun and honest reviewer!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
You outdid yourself with this one, Rhonda. It is perfect in every way. It flows well as the ceremonies take place, as well as a few surprises along the way, and a lot of love. Your voice comes through this because, like those from Concorde Valley, you are someone who respects others, loves her family, and is also a good friend. All of this comes through in this chapter and the whole story.
It is hard to pinpoint a favorite line or image, but the word I would choose to describe it is beautiful. A beautiful ending and beautiful people who care about each other and their world, who will do their utmost to fight for dignity and fairness.
I loved the pictures and the joy that is expressed in this finale. People here deserve to be happy. They even had a food fight. I would say the tenderest moments were between Hermes and Mary as he showed her how he has always loved her more than anything. She is hesitant but can't resist him. The best part of their marriage is those they chose to be immortal, especially the choice that Mary made for Hank and Rebecca.
You should be very proud of what you have accomplished with this book, my friend. I look forward to seeing it in print.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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You outdid yourself with this one, Rhonda. It is perfect in every way. It flows well as the ceremonies take place, as well as a few surprises along the way, and a lot of love. Your voice comes through this because, like those from Concorde Valley, you are someone who respects others, loves her family, and is also a good friend. All of this comes through in this chapter and the whole story.
It is hard to pinpoint a favorite line or image, but the word I would choose to describe it is beautiful. A beautiful ending and beautiful people who care about each other and their world, who will do their utmost to fight for dignity and fairness.
I loved the pictures and the joy that is expressed in this finale. People here deserve to be happy. They even had a food fight. I would say the tenderest moments were between Hermes and Mary as he showed her how he has always loved her more than anything. She is hesitant but can't resist him. The best part of their marriage is those they chose to be immortal, especially the choice that Mary made for Hank and Rebecca.
You should be very proud of what you have accomplished with this book, my friend. I look forward to seeing it in print.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Pam, thank you from the bottom of my heart. I appreciate the stars and, most importantly, the ongoing support throughout the whole process. You've shaped me as a writer and I think I'm better for it. I could always count on your honest response and your careful eye for grammar.
Thank you for your comments on my character being reflected in the writing. It's funny, but we do tend to knit ourselves into the characters we create. I do hope to go back to print with this book. It's been a while since I've gone down that road, but maybe would be a good way to get me back into retirement again.
Once more, thank you and Robert for months, even years, of support.
Take care,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, review, and support throughout our time on FanStory, Rhonda. I appreciate your reply very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I hate for this story to end. I really enjoyed reading and the characters are like friends. I am wondering if there could possibly be a sequel with their children.
She finally managed to choke out words inbetween kisses. (in between)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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I hate for this story to end. I really enjoyed reading and the characters are like friends. I am wondering if there could possibly be a sequel with their children.
She finally managed to choke out words inbetween kisses. (in between)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Hi Barbara,
Thank you for the six beautiful stars. They are so welcomed!!
Actually, I'm going to write a prequel. I'll tell the story of Phoebus and Diantha. I'm not sure when I'll start it, but soon.
Thanks again,
Hugs,
Rhonda
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can't wait
Comment from Sally Law
Yaay!!!! Congratulations on this fantastic chapter, my friend. What a sense of accomplishment you must feel. It has been a pleasure to read and I will be anxiously awaiting an autographed copy.
Brava! Brava! Superb in every way, beautifully crafted and illustrated.
Love & Blessings across the bridge, Rhonda dear.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Yaay!!!! Congratulations on this fantastic chapter, my friend. What a sense of accomplishment you must feel. It has been a pleasure to read and I will be anxiously awaiting an autographed copy.
Brava! Brava! Superb in every way, beautifully crafted and illustrated.
Love & Blessings across the bridge, Rhonda dear.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Hi Sally,
Thank you so much for the brilliant six stars, my friend!! How special you are and make me feel. It has been quite the journey, and is enhanced by your presence in it. Love you much,
Rhonda
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You're most welcome, precious Friend. I wouldn't have missed it for the world. Love ya!
Sal XOs
Comment from Begin Again
What a marvelous ending to the story! I am so happy that I made the choice to follow your posts and fell in love with your characters, whom you so expertly brought to life. I love how you posted pictures throughout the story, too! It added a special touch to the celebration. Awesome job!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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What a marvelous ending to the story! I am so happy that I made the choice to follow your posts and fell in love with your characters, whom you so expertly brought to life. I love how you posted pictures throughout the story, too! It added a special touch to the celebration. Awesome job!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 25-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Hi Carol,
Thank you so very much for the six stars and for the following across the months. It has meant a lot to me.
Big hugs,
Rhonda
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It was a beautiful story and you are so deserving of the stars.
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I am dismally behind on your new book. Do you have another starting soon?
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No, this one has a ways to go... I can always give you a short summary if you want. Thanks for asking.
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Yeah, if you could do that, it would be helpful, thanks!!