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Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man

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A modern twist on Greek Mythology.

17 total reviews 
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is a terrific start to the prequel! I love it and the story of Phoebus' younger life. Endora! She's not worthy of him and a mere child. Impatient, spoiled and self serving. I'm thinking he will be like Theo and find a mortal he loves while at the races and plant a kiss on her. How romantic! I'm fully invested in this book and all in for the fall and winter!! Beautifully crafted and presented, my talented friend.
Love & Blessings across the bridge,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
    Hehe, yes, you're ever the romantic, but I don't think he'll make it to the races, lol.
    Thank you so much for the six stars and lovely review. I'm glad you're on board again...which reminds me, I'm suddenly hungry for chocolate...

    Much love,
    Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Phoebus has his hands full with Eudora. It will be interesting to see how all of this plays out. I can tell already this is going to be a good story. I can't wait to read more.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Barbara, thank you so much for reading the first chapter!! It will pick up the pace in a bit. This is really part of the prologue, but I didn't want to keep calling in prologue parts 1, 2, 3, etc, but I did think about it.
    Thanks again
    Rhonda
Comment from Begin Again
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this was much easier to read and understand than the prologue and I enjoyed it... Surprise! You actually might have turned me into an avid reader of the Gods... or at least an inquisitive one. Phoebus is far better off with his horses instead of Eudora, the spoiled brat. I fear she will make trouble though.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Hi Carol,
    I apologize if you get a response twice. I already sent to response to both of your reviews and then they showed back up.

    I do appreciate you coming onboard at the beginning of the journey. Phoebus is in over his head with this one!!

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Jacob1395
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I loved the dialogue between Phoebus and Eudora so I'm interested to see how their relationship develops. I could just imagine Phoebus's reaction when Eudora first mentions marriage. I can imagine he'll always be off to the human world to race horses, which definitely seems to be his passion. An excellent piece, I really enjoyed reading it Rhonda, and I can't wait to find out what happens next.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much for the review, Jacob! I so love to get feedback. Eudora thinks a little too highly of herself. It might just get her into trouble!
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Exceptional
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What a spoilt brat Eudora is, I wouldn't want to go to her pary, either, if I was Phoebus, but I can see Eudora is going to be trouble for him. He really does need to tread carefully. And, that was a blatent threat she slung to
Phoebus on her way out. I can see she is the character we are going to love to hate! Great start, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Hi Sandra,
    Thank you so much for the six stars, my friend!!
    Eudora is a brat, and she will cause problems for the father of Theo, lol, even if he doesn't mean any harm.
    This is actually an extended prologue, but there wasn't an option for that, lol.
    Love and hugs back,
    Rhonda
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Exceptional
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Oh Rhonda, this is so great that I got in on the very start of this one. It is a wonderful beginning, but I can see trouble brewing as that spoiled rotten brat stirs the pot just to get her way.

I wasn't going to try to read the whole thing tonight, after a long day on my eyes, but I couldn't help myself as it was so good. Phoebus is such a sweet guy, he is way too good for her.
But not trying to tell you how to write your book, just an observation. LOL..

Now I am already looking forward to next week's chapter. This was awesome, dear friend. If you would like some new horse or any other pictures, I would be happy to look for you.

Anyway, thanks for the great and entertaining start. I absolutely loved it!!!!
Love, Debi

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Hi Debi,
    Thank you so much for the six star review, and for coming onboard. It would have been too hard to catch up on the last book and I tend to have a ton of characters...
    I've already answered this review once, so I don't want to keep adding to your reading if the first one went through. This has happened to me before where the review seems not to send.
    Much love,
    Rhonda
reply by Debi Pick Marquette on 02-Sep-2024
    Thanks sweetie. This was the only thank you I got. But I do know how that is when they seem to disappear.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    One time, I had to send a reply 4 times before it went through. Only two this time!! But I'm glad it only went through once.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Excellent
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This chapter sounds like it is based on sound research with a couple of newer character names added. I thought Phoebus was being really patient with Eudora. It sounds like she is still learning the meaning of service and support.
Little fixes:
I'm throwing a party tonight with all the gods and godesses our age,
change 'godesses' to 'goddesses'

Olive skin accented well sculpted muscles, and sea green eyes, a gift from his father, drew a person in, even when he was exhausted.
I might punctuate this more like the following:
Olive skin accented well-sculpted muscles, and sea-green eyes, a gift from his father, drew a person in, even when he was exhausted.

If daddy knows we'll be getting married
Capitalize Daddy since it is a proper title.


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 Comment Written 02-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
    Crystie,
    Thank you so much for the lovely review! You got it, I use a mixture of research and creative license with the gods! Thank you, so much, for finding the flaws. I gave up editing late last night, lol.

    Hugs,
    Rhonda