haiku (jauntily flaunting)
Nature's wardrobe26 total reviews
Comment from Faith Williams
Great visual in your haiku, Wendy. I like how your theme in the second line regarding the dress code flows into your third line. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Great visual in your haiku, Wendy. I like how your theme in the second line regarding the dress code flows into your third line. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you Faith for this lovely review. I appreciate your words and your good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from GWHARGIS
What a fun and flirtatious poem you have here, Wendy. I'm wondering if she will be Lady Godiva when winter hits. I loved the unique take on autumn as the trees disrobe. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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What a fun and flirtatious poem you have here, Wendy. I'm wondering if she will be Lady Godiva when winter hits. I loved the unique take on autumn as the trees disrobe. Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Definitely she will be. I need to expand this one to include a haiku for each season. In winter she is wantonly bare, and sometimes not in a hurry to dress again! lol. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
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Yes, definitely. She is wantonly bare during winter, and sometimes takes her time to dress again for Spring! Thanks so much for a fun review.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
I like your personification of the seasons and how Spring brings her own change of clothes! Quite timely as you are headed to spring while we are entering into fall. Best wishes in the contest!
Is the "dress code" part of the title? I was told that typically the first line is the title for a haiku.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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I like your personification of the seasons and how Spring brings her own change of clothes! Quite timely as you are headed to spring while we are entering into fall. Best wishes in the contest!
Is the "dress code" part of the title? I was told that typically the first line is the title for a haiku.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you for this fine review. I didn't realise that was a requirement, but it probably is, so I have changed it.
Wendy
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It used to be explained to me that way. It's not a requirement for sure. But you have the key elements of the haiku with two seasonal references and a satori of "dressing".
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Given thought I can see how what you have written might be from gold And reds to greens of every shade
Well
Done
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Given thought I can see how what you have written might be from gold And reds to greens of every shade
Well
Done
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Tom. Always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love the idea of an autumn and spring dress code. I am pretty sure winter and summer also have a dress code. I enjoyed reading this entry and want to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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I love the idea of an autumn and spring dress code. I am pretty sure winter and summer also have a dress code. I enjoyed reading this entry and want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Yes, they do. I was thinking that winter is bare, completely undressed, while she changes clothes, but that would need a much longer poem. Thanks so much for your lovely review.
Wendy
Comment from GoWiSt
"Nature's wardrobe
haiku (dress code)" Good metaphoric imagery.
"seductive colours of fall -
spring brings change of clothes" Are you conflating two seasons here--fall and spring? There's a whole other season--winter--between the two.
Interesting haiku. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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"Nature's wardrobe
haiku (dress code)" Good metaphoric imagery.
"seductive colours of fall -
spring brings change of clothes" Are you conflating two seasons here--fall and spring? There's a whole other season--winter--between the two.
Interesting haiku. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much. Yes, in winter she is quite bare, and I wanted to say that she was undressing and choosing a new spring garment, but .... I needed a longer poem. I appreciate your words.
Wendy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Excellent! Love the 'jauntily flaunting,' rolling off the tongue nicely. Your 5-7-5 fulfils the brief, introducing pleasing personification of those captivating trees:)) Good luck, Wendy! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Excellent! Love the 'jauntily flaunting,' rolling off the tongue nicely. Your 5-7-5 fulfils the brief, introducing pleasing personification of those captivating trees:)) Good luck, Wendy! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Debbie, for the nice review and for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very clever, Wendy. That is a really brightly colored tree in your picture. We are just entering the fall season here in Maine. We will start to see color in about a month.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Very clever, Wendy. That is a really brightly colored tree in your picture. We are just entering the fall season here in Maine. We will start to see color in about a month.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Paul. We have moved quite quickly into very warm weather through the day (evenings still cool).
Wendy
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I read through this poem probably six times just because it was fun to read. I adore the first line and the personified version of spring rummaging through her closet to change outfits. Very nicely done
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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I read through this poem probably six times just because it was fun to read. I adore the first line and the personified version of spring rummaging through her closet to change outfits. Very nicely done
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one.
Wendy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Wendy.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-Good descriptive words describe the
colors of fall and how they are enticing.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Wendy.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-Good descriptive words describe the
colors of fall and how they are enticing.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much Pam. I always appreciate the thought you put into your reviews.
Wendy
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You are very welcome, Wendy.
