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Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Karen, if I had a six star, you would have it for this sweet story. It was very imaginative, I found the font and the color of it cheerful, the picture adorable and Allison to be completely charming. I loved her innocence and yet she seemed to have more on the ball than what she was given credit for. The only thing I did not like about it was that there was a dentist involved. Just kidding but I hate going to the dentist. LOL.. Anyway, it was fun to listen to as I tried to follow along with my one good eye. You did a great job on this. And I found it to be a very clever read, my friend. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Karen, if I had a six star, you would have it for this sweet story. It was very imaginative, I found the font and the color of it cheerful, the picture adorable and Allison to be completely charming. I loved her innocence and yet she seemed to have more on the ball than what she was given credit for. The only thing I did not like about it was that there was a dentist involved. Just kidding but I hate going to the dentist. LOL.. Anyway, it was fun to listen to as I tried to follow along with my one good eye. You did a great job on this. And I found it to be a very clever read, my friend. Love, Debi
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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I hate that you are having more troubles. Can you use an audio program to help you? Thanks for the read and I am praying for you. Karen
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Yes, I listened to it and followed along a little but the longer ones are hard. Now they are planning a corneal stem cell transplant on me. It was from a complication of covid but I see the eye specialist every day during the week, but it completely blinded me but only one eye, but they are watching the other eye big time. And I know you know enough about the lupus so yes it most likely made it worse. However, so thankful to still see with one eye. Thanks for asking, hon!
It is good to be in touch again.
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I hope this works. My back looks like a texas road map that didn't get folded right. And ten years ago. I woke up and had gained 30 pounds of fat and bloating around my middle and my boobs are from 115 to 145 enormous. Golden years? I was waqlking to the kitchen the other day and I kept hearing this strange sound like something scratching bone. It was me. Ain't life a hoot? And, I lost two inches. That last back operation where they took out my disc's. I was 5'5" now, I'm 5'3". Was a size 6 now a 16. Yep, we are living the high life. One good thing, I get to wear cartoon pajamas all day long.! :-) Karen
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We are quite the pair. I have had two major spline surgeries too and I used to be 5'7" and now I am 5'4" and then what the lupus didn't kill, especially with almost on dialysis with kidneys, menopause did. Like you said, big boobs, and I never had a belly until then. So I know what you mean. I am not actually heavy but feel so out of proportion. I was just complaining to Sally how folding laundry was so hard on the back. But thankfully we are both still here. I hate complaining but you are right that age is a factor. I am turning 70 this year.
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I just turned sixty nine. At times Age doesn't exist. And it comes as a shock when I see a mirror. We are strong And we do not go quietly into that good night. I love you sweetie and we will keep fighting for our health yes? Have a good week. Karen
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Hey, good to know that we are so close in age. One more thing in common, with most importantly trying to get through life without too many more complications, and try hard not to dwell on the ones that are out there. I love it!!
Take care, dear FRIEND!!
Love, Debi
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I love this site because there are some people that are pretty much like me. I don't have to explain myself. When is your birthday? Do you read audible books? My sister wants to keep giving me a kindle. But I love paperbacks. I pray you get all fixed up. Love you, Karen
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I have been doing audible for years and now I use a special audible for my reading on the iPad and computer. I am only allowed so much screen time so I use it when I can. Thanks for all your kind words, hon. And right back atcha! Love and hugs. Debi
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
you are a woman of details and descriptions. Very cute story. I liked the character of Allison. You should attempt a murder mystery series alphabetically.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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you are a woman of details and descriptions. Very cute story. I liked the character of Allison. You should attempt a murder mystery series alphabetically.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Now that, is a good idea. " Murder by the Alphabet. " I will think on that.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is an adorable story, and I enjoyed reading. Just keep an eye on your editing.
She might sit down on a stool and look at a magazine (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
. I am thirty-six years old , Six foot four inches tall 190 (six, doesn't need a capital 's')
He hiked, he swam, He was active. (he was active.)
" No honey he had one hit, and he never felt anything else." ( "No honey, he)
Is he in heaven now, do you think? She asked. (think?" she asked.)
"Allison you were the first one here, when you looked around, and now what do you think happened?" ( "Allison, you were the first one here. When you look around, what do you think happened?")
"Well Allison when did this happen?" (Allison,)
"What was that sweetheart?" (that,)
" I might could," She said. ("I might could," she said.)
Jameison about my dog Trixie's (dog,)
I asked her If she was up to going one (if)
" Well I am out of ideas for tonite ; We will let the cleanup people do their job, ("Well I am out of ideas for tonight; we will let the cleanup people do their job,)
"Good grief Herbert! I had not asked her a very ordinary important question had I? Well. what did you touch or clean Allison? " ("Good grief, Herbert! I had not asked her a very ordinary important question, had I? Well, what did you touch or clean Allison?")
But he didn't," She said. (she)
" Yes sir Mr . Sheriff," She said. Yes, & she)
"Well what do you mean little darling?" He said. "Well, & he said. or he asked.)
the can see the crime on tape," She said. (she)
"What camera?" He asked. (he)
So it is okay right?" She asked. (So, & she)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This is an adorable story, and I enjoyed reading. Just keep an eye on your editing.
She might sit down on a stool and look at a magazine (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
. I am thirty-six years old , Six foot four inches tall 190 (six, doesn't need a capital 's')
He hiked, he swam, He was active. (he was active.)
" No honey he had one hit, and he never felt anything else." ( "No honey, he)
Is he in heaven now, do you think? She asked. (think?" she asked.)
"Allison you were the first one here, when you looked around, and now what do you think happened?" ( "Allison, you were the first one here. When you look around, what do you think happened?")
"Well Allison when did this happen?" (Allison,)
"What was that sweetheart?" (that,)
" I might could," She said. ("I might could," she said.)
Jameison about my dog Trixie's (dog,)
I asked her If she was up to going one (if)
" Well I am out of ideas for tonite ; We will let the cleanup people do their job, ("Well I am out of ideas for tonight; we will let the cleanup people do their job,)
"Good grief Herbert! I had not asked her a very ordinary important question had I? Well. what did you touch or clean Allison? " ("Good grief, Herbert! I had not asked her a very ordinary important question, had I? Well, what did you touch or clean Allison?")
But he didn't," She said. (she)
" Yes sir Mr . Sheriff," She said. Yes, & she)
"Well what do you mean little darling?" He said. "Well, & he said. or he asked.)
the can see the crime on tape," She said. (she)
"What camera?" He asked. (he)
So it is okay right?" She asked. (So, & she)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Good gravy you worked hard on this. I am trying to get the quote tags screwed into my brain. I agree on everything except the stool. I wanted her to sit down on the stool as opposed to a chair, milk crate, or a pile of books. Otherwise I bless you from the bottom of my heart for the hard word you do on my behalf. I go io edit. Karen
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You can say 'sit on a stool', that would imply down. It's up to you.
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Thanks for the editing again. I did the changes. Karen
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I like the stool bit left in. But I did everything else. Thanks again. Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
I recognized some of the name-homages. This was an unusual entry-a murder mystery without a murder. I never suspected Allison of anything untoward, nd I'm glad to see she came out well in the end.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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I recognized some of the name-homages. This was an unusual entry-a murder mystery without a murder. I never suspected Allison of anything untoward, nd I'm glad to see she came out well in the end.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Well folks have been nagging me to get back to writing my short stories. They want bodies. Ha! I gave them a body. but it wasn't murder, and I was nowhere near at the time. Thanks for the read. I am cooking up a good one. Karen
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Leave it to you to reinvent the murder mystery.
Comment from BethShelby
Allison was the key to solving the murder because she had it all storie in her head. The sheriff just had to asked the right questions. THis was story of a simple little girl helping solve a mystery. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Allison was the key to solving the murder because she had it all storie in her head. The sheriff just had to asked the right questions. THis was story of a simple little girl helping solve a mystery. Nicely written.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Yes, I was no where near where he died. I have proof. People kept wanting me to quit doing so much poetry, and go kill someone. Well , someone died, but there was no murder! Haha Have a good week. Karen
Comment from jessizero
This was a very interesting and entertaining story! I enjoyed reading it very much. This reminds me that I need to make an appointment with the dentist. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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This was a very interesting and entertaining story! I enjoyed reading it very much. This reminds me that I need to make an appointment with the dentist. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the six. They are so shiny and pretty. I am a big ol' hog about em'. I had fun writing, where someone died And I had proof I was no where near them at the time. :-)
Karen
Comment from Begin Again
What? Am I to believe that George's demise was of his own clumsy makings and you had nothing to do with it whatsoever? Hmmm... well, I won't be too hard on you, because going to the dentist is the worst... chihlls and shivers for sure.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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What? Am I to believe that George's demise was of his own clumsy makings and you had nothing to do with it whatsoever? Hmmm... well, I won't be too hard on you, because going to the dentist is the worst... chihlls and shivers for sure.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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I have spent enough through the years to buy a couple really nice cars. I am going to get dentures, and that's that. Nothing works for very long in my mouth. Thank you for the read. This was fun. Ans I have witnesses I was not involved. :-) Karen