Grinning at a Snake
Rhyming32 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed this clever poem. I can see how the picture captured your creative mind. What a predicament they both face. I doubt either of them will win.
Great rhyme and meter throughout.
Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed this clever poem. I can see how the picture captured your creative mind. What a predicament they both face. I doubt either of them will win.
Great rhyme and meter throughout.
Nancy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Nancy! They are both having a rough time of it.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an image! And no wonder you felt compelled to write something such is the dilemma! Is it the snake that traps the crane? This is a charming read, Melissa, that makes me smile, even though I remain a little anxious for both. Thank you so much for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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What an image! And no wonder you felt compelled to write something such is the dilemma! Is it the snake that traps the crane? This is a charming read, Melissa, that makes me smile, even though I remain a little anxious for both. Thank you so much for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hello Debbie. Thank you. I just had to write about this photograph. So unique and they both seem to be in a conundrum!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Pearl Edwards
What a great photo, and indeed what a dilemma for both of them. I'm not sure that either of them ends up a winner, though perhaps the crane could end up in one of those 'saving animals in need' videos, A great interpretation in your fun poem Melissa.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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What a great photo, and indeed what a dilemma for both of them. I'm not sure that either of them ends up a winner, though perhaps the crane could end up in one of those 'saving animals in need' videos, A great interpretation in your fun poem Melissa.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hello Valda. Thank you. After seeing this photo, I just had to write about it. They both seem to share a conundrum... but, I'm pretty sure the crane started it LOL. :)
Melissa
Comment from royowen
So nicely written Melissa, with that comedic edge for the skilful way of making the the poem's poetic imagery so much better, by giving it an haiku like twist to it, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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So nicely written Melissa, with that comedic edge for the skilful way of making the the poem's poetic imagery so much better, by giving it an haiku like twist to it, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Roy. I always appreciate your comments!!
Melissa
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. And this morning my devotional was on Genesis 3 and the enmity between us and the snake. But who could be angry with a clever snake that wants to reserve his life like that?
The last stanza was a bit ambiguous. Did the snake get away? Who "traps the fiend forevermore"? Did the crane get his supper?
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Lol. And this morning my devotional was on Genesis 3 and the enmity between us and the snake. But who could be angry with a clever snake that wants to reserve his life like that?
The last stanza was a bit ambiguous. Did the snake get away? Who "traps the fiend forevermore"? Did the crane get his supper?
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hello Helen... my closing thoughts were that the snake dies and the crane is stuck like that for eternity (or until a compassionate being comes along to take the dead snake off its beak). Whatever the case, it is a conundrum and I would love to know how it turned out. Thank you for your lovely review, sweet friend.
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha.... poor little snake and crane.... what a way to die!
Excellent rhymed poem that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely. I like the presentation too.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hahaha.... poor little snake and crane.... what a way to die!
Excellent rhymed poem that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely. I like the presentation too.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you Gypsy. I saw this photo and just had to write a poem. The crane's eyes are so angry... and he got himself into this situation. LOL. So appreciate your comments!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I'm sorry. I've run out of sixers. Loved your poem describing the picture! Just look at the eyes of that great white heron. He's madder than a puffed toad! But that grass snake has his beak tied up pretty good. The heron is helpless. But I'm thinking the snake was injured in the early rounds. How long can he last? Right now, he's won the battle. But in the end, I think the heron has his supper.
Terrific poem!
I especially love the first verse,
"I'm grinning at a little snake,
who nearing death decides to take
a twist, a turn, a bend, a tweak
around a long protruding beak."
Thanks for sharing your talent!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hi Melissa,
I'm sorry. I've run out of sixers. Loved your poem describing the picture! Just look at the eyes of that great white heron. He's madder than a puffed toad! But that grass snake has his beak tied up pretty good. The heron is helpless. But I'm thinking the snake was injured in the early rounds. How long can he last? Right now, he's won the battle. But in the end, I think the heron has his supper.
Terrific poem!
I especially love the first verse,
"I'm grinning at a little snake,
who nearing death decides to take
a twist, a turn, a bend, a tweak
around a long protruding beak."
Thanks for sharing your talent!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This one was fun, KB... after seeing the pic, I just had to write a poem about it. Those angry eyes just made me laugh.. the crane got himself into this mess don't you know. Thank you for your wonderful review!!!
Melissa
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Tough little snake. I certainly never thought I'd say this, but I'm kind of rooting for the guy to win! And what a picture someone snapped @ exactly the right moment. Xo
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Tough little snake. I certainly never thought I'd say this, but I'm kind of rooting for the guy to win! And what a picture someone snapped @ exactly the right moment. Xo
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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hey Rachelle, yes, this poem is all about the photograph and the struggle for supremacy. I don't think either of them win, but I can bet that the crane started it :). Thanks.
Melissa
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Haha! I bet you're right!!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
good rhyming poem like these lines
The incensed crane is so confused,
he feels affronted and misused...
then, as the snake goes through death's door,
he traps the fiend forevermore.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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good rhyming poem like these lines
The incensed crane is so confused,
he feels affronted and misused...
then, as the snake goes through death's door,
he traps the fiend forevermore.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Jake.
Melissa
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! What a predicament this bird is in. It reminds me of the bird trying to eat the frog whose arms are wrapped around the birds neck. This is a brilliantly crafted piece.
God bless.
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Wow! What a predicament this bird is in. It reminds me of the bird trying to eat the frog whose arms are wrapped around the birds neck. This is a brilliantly crafted piece.
God bless.
Steve
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Steve.
Melissa
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My pleasure.
