Doggy gets a bite
My doggy sees a snake17 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This limerick was fun and funny! You got the suggested syllable counts right, and "reptile dysfunction" was hilarious. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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This limerick was fun and funny! You got the suggested syllable counts right, and "reptile dysfunction" was hilarious. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much for your supportive and positive comments. I am glad you think it is funny.
Comment from lancellot
Walking my dog by the junction
Having a canine malfunction
He jumped on a snake
A bite he did take
Now he has reptile dysfunction
Very nice limerick. The form and syllable counts are fine. I would suggest, only because some voters are strict, adding end punctuation to your lines. Why? Because this entry is posted as prose. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Walking my dog by the junction
Having a canine malfunction
He jumped on a snake
A bite he did take
Now he has reptile dysfunction
Very nice limerick. The form and syllable counts are fine. I would suggest, only because some voters are strict, adding end punctuation to your lines. Why? Because this entry is posted as prose. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you for reading and the positive review. I considered your comment about punctuation.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This humorous limerick will surely attract attention with the contest voting committee. You tell a brief story about your doggie with an unexpected twist in the end. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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This humorous limerick will surely attract attention with the contest voting committee. You tell a brief story about your doggie with an unexpected twist in the end. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you LJ.
Thank you for this great review I hope the judges all laugh when they read it. Silly and funny are the greatest tools of Limericks. I am grateful for your positive words and good wishes.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved your Limerick here, but your metre is slightly off.
I suggest this:
(When) walking my dog by the junction
He (suffered) a canine malfunction
He jumped on a snake
A bite he did take
(This doggy has) reptile dysfunction.
Good luck with the contest!
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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I loved your Limerick here, but your metre is slightly off.
I suggest this:
(When) walking my dog by the junction
He (suffered) a canine malfunction
He jumped on a snake
A bite he did take
(This doggy has) reptile dysfunction.
Good luck with the contest!
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Hi Dolly. Thank you for your suggestions. This was written with a 99559 meter because it was perfect with the polysyllabic words. However, the stated rules call for an 88558 meter. I had to modify the Limerick to get it to fit the rules.
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I didn't realise there was a syllable restriction, but you could achieve it and still keep a good metre, good luck x x x
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Thank you.
Comment from Nicki.B
Oops lol! Poor old doggo he didn't expect that!
I love the humour on your limerick, I got a good chuckle out of it!
Well done and good luck with the contest!
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Oops lol! Poor old doggo he didn't expect that!
I love the humour on your limerick, I got a good chuckle out of it!
Well done and good luck with the contest!
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Nicki. I am so grateful for your wonderful review and response. I'm glad you got a laugh from it.
Comment from Michele Harber
I love this. You actually made me laugh out loud (although I doubt your dog with "reptile dysfunction" is enjoying it as much). Excellent use of that pun to both rhyme and provide a nice dash of humor.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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I love this. You actually made me laugh out loud (although I doubt your dog with "reptile dysfunction" is enjoying it as much). Excellent use of that pun to both rhyme and provide a nice dash of humor.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Hi Michelle. Doggy will be OK. Thank you so much for your enjoyable and positive review. I am truly grateful.
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Most limericks manage to screw up the syllables or the iambics, and most puns get groans and not laughs. You hit it out of the park on all counts.
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You are right about iambs and syllables. Most of the Limericks on FS do not meet the standards. Thank you again.
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You're welcome. Sadly, I've been guilty of messing up iambs myself, which is the main reason I didn't enter the contest.
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Limericks are not easy to writer per the "rules." It requires careful word usage.
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And the ability to count (syllables) and pronounce (iambs). It's so easy to hear our work as we want it to read, and not as it actually reads to anyone who didn't just write it.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Write a Limerick writing prompt. This was creative and humorous with a great final line. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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An excellent entry for the Write a Limerick writing prompt. This was creative and humorous with a great final line. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and your positive words.