Hannah
An Acrostic, Club Entry32 total reviews
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is so effectively creepy and an excellent entry for the Halloween poetry contest Jessica. Your poem has flawless rhymes an great meter. I assume hete that Hannah is now a ghost. I hope I guessed right.
Well done!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is so effectively creepy and an excellent entry for the Halloween poetry contest Jessica. Your poem has flawless rhymes an great meter. I assume hete that Hannah is now a ghost. I hope I guessed right.
Well done!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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You are right! :) Thanks so much! Xo
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed your creative acrostic poem Jessica. I love alliteration and you have used that poetic device beautifully.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your creative acrostic poem Jessica. I love alliteration and you have used that poetic device beautifully.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much, Janet! Xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a haunting acrostic for the contest Jessica and I wish you luck, a skilful post that is a touch scary and disturbing here, love Dolly x x x x x
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is a haunting acrostic for the contest Jessica and I wish you luck, a skilful post that is a touch scary and disturbing here, love Dolly x x x x x
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much, Dolly! Xo
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh very nice Acrostic poem for the club prompt! You gave a rhymed acrostic that told the story of the little girl who haunts her former home at night. Smooth flow to the writing and the story line as well. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Oh very nice Acrostic poem for the club prompt! You gave a rhymed acrostic that told the story of the little girl who haunts her former home at night. Smooth flow to the writing and the story line as well. Excellent job.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much, Marilyn! Xo
Comment from Gloria ....
I love what you have done with your acrostic, Jessica. The rhymed couplets advance the scary plot.
Excellent cadence and good story to fit the season.
Much enjoyed. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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I love what you have done with your acrostic, Jessica. The rhymed couplets advance the scary plot.
Excellent cadence and good story to fit the season.
Much enjoyed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Gloria! Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Jessica
I like this poem very much. You've not only met the acrostic style, but you maintained the meter very well throughout the poem. I enjoyed the story and in particular, like the last two lines very much as they resolve the mystery of the story. Very well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hello Jessica
I like this poem very much. You've not only met the acrostic style, but you maintained the meter very well throughout the poem. I enjoyed the story and in particular, like the last two lines very much as they resolve the mystery of the story. Very well done.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Robert, thank you so much for the wonderful review! Xo
Jess
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You're very welcome, Jess.
Robert
Comment from Wendy G
A smooth-flowing and well-rhymed poem to fit your Halloween season and in response to the prompt. It is cleverly done as it is hard to retain smoothness and rhyme within the parameters of an acrostic. Very enjoyable.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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A smooth-flowing and well-rhymed poem to fit your Halloween season and in response to the prompt. It is cleverly done as it is hard to retain smoothness and rhyme within the parameters of an acrostic. Very enjoyable.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much! Xo
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Jess!
Thank you for adding your ample skill to our poetry prompt! This tale of this ghostly little girl is supremely creepy.
Okay, so maybe I'm overthinking it. Forgive me if I am. But is the first stanza describing living people that to Hannah are haunting her? And then, in the last stanza, the flip is revealed? Let me read again ... the ONLY line that makes me doubt my analysis is the 5th line about the fog; everything else seems to fit, though.
NO WAIT! I think I got it. I was assuming that either Hannah OR the "nocturnal guests" had to be ghosts while the other would be living. But no! Why can't they BOTH be ghosts, and Hannah is just a frightened ghost-girl behaving as a living girl would? Hmmmm. Still not absolutely sure ... whatever, it's creepy, anyway.
I wrote a wreathed sonnet a few years ago called "Melanie" that was very similar to this about a preteen girl who haunted her own grave. I hope to post it eventually.
OH, the loveliness of iambic bounce. You write iambic tetrameter flawlessly! I would love a poem written about CABBAGES if it was perfect iambic pentameter, let alone one about Hannah and her creepy Haunted House.
Talk to you again soon! I have you on my list for a Port Raid sometime this upcoming week! I'm really looking forward to reading some of your older poems.
Patrick
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Hello Jess!
Thank you for adding your ample skill to our poetry prompt! This tale of this ghostly little girl is supremely creepy.
Okay, so maybe I'm overthinking it. Forgive me if I am. But is the first stanza describing living people that to Hannah are haunting her? And then, in the last stanza, the flip is revealed? Let me read again ... the ONLY line that makes me doubt my analysis is the 5th line about the fog; everything else seems to fit, though.
NO WAIT! I think I got it. I was assuming that either Hannah OR the "nocturnal guests" had to be ghosts while the other would be living. But no! Why can't they BOTH be ghosts, and Hannah is just a frightened ghost-girl behaving as a living girl would? Hmmmm. Still not absolutely sure ... whatever, it's creepy, anyway.
I wrote a wreathed sonnet a few years ago called "Melanie" that was very similar to this about a preteen girl who haunted her own grave. I hope to post it eventually.
OH, the loveliness of iambic bounce. You write iambic tetrameter flawlessly! I would love a poem written about CABBAGES if it was perfect iambic pentameter, let alone one about Hannah and her creepy Haunted House.
Talk to you again soon! I have you on my list for a Port Raid sometime this upcoming week! I'm really looking forward to reading some of your older poems.
Patrick
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from ESOSTINE
This could be very scary. The dead returns at night, slips into her room to haunt those within. A very beautifully penned Acrostic poem. Well done, dear Jessica and good luck in the contest.
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This could be very scary. The dead returns at night, slips into her room to haunt those within. A very beautifully penned Acrostic poem. Well done, dear Jessica and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love the story told in your acrostic Halloween Poetry contest entry and club event prompt. As whispers weave through Hannah's home and she appears to be stuck outside in fear, I'm surprised in the end, to find that she is the one who haunts. Creative and well done. Best wishes in the contest.
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I love the story told in your acrostic Halloween Poetry contest entry and club event prompt. As whispers weave through Hannah's home and she appears to be stuck outside in fear, I'm surprised in the end, to find that she is the one who haunts. Creative and well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024