Take a pill
Check your pockets28 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now this is about as cute as they get. I've come to the play in time where I don't pay a whole lot of attention to anyone these days, but I must say that, that little cutie even make this old have naughty thoughts. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Now this is about as cute as they get. I've come to the play in time where I don't pay a whole lot of attention to anyone these days, but I must say that, that little cutie even make this old have naughty thoughts. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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You just say that cause that used to be me. You are so sweet. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from royowen
I think Harold is about to find out about Phillappa's problem, he's about to find out why it might not be be what he really wants, poor boy, but alt least he did have exclusively to himself, and that's important, beautifully written Karen, well dine, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I think Harold is about to find out about Phillappa's problem, he's about to find out why it might not be be what he really wants, poor boy, but alt least he did have exclusively to himself, and that's important, beautifully written Karen, well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Two kleptomaniacs are suprememly suited to watch out for each other I would think. Thanks for the read.
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Absolutely
Comment from jim vecchio
Well, this one didn't end up so violently. You can write n almost normal but not quite romance when you want to. I'm glad Harold got to enjoy an almost-normal date, though he reminded me of WoodyAllen.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Well, this one didn't end up so violently. You can write n almost normal but not quite romance when you want to. I'm glad Harold got to enjoy an almost-normal date, though he reminded me of WoodyAllen.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Almost normal? I try to never be that way. And he does seem a ,little like a young Woody Allen. Thanks for the read. Karen
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Loved it!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Cute story. So Harold got the girl who has the same problem as he has. LOL
Along comes Angus saying, " Here is your fresh dill darlin'." (dill,)
He turned to Phillippa and asked, "Am I still picking you up at seven,dear? (space after the comma)
A lemon roasted chicken with wild rice, a spring salad, Iced mint tea, and Sugar cookies for dessert. (iced & sugar)
"Are we dating?" He asked. She nodded yes. (he asked.)
"Harold , take a pill, (comma needs to be closer to 'Harold,')
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Cute story. So Harold got the girl who has the same problem as he has. LOL
Along comes Angus saying, " Here is your fresh dill darlin'." (dill,)
He turned to Phillippa and asked, "Am I still picking you up at seven,dear? (space after the comma)
A lemon roasted chicken with wild rice, a spring salad, Iced mint tea, and Sugar cookies for dessert. (iced & sugar)
"Are we dating?" He asked. She nodded yes. (he asked.)
"Harold , take a pill, (comma needs to be closer to 'Harold,')
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the read and edit. I have made a list and will go back. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is great, Karen! Your two main characters are beautifully described and the story swings along at a good pace with no hint of how it's going to end. In fact, I thought it might be one of your 'to be continued.' Excellent humour, particularly in the contrast between the two suitors. In short, a joy to read. Below some suggestions. Take care Debbie
In the para starting: But he wasn't the only one noticing.... I think I'd keep descriptions of the two men in the present tense (actions in the past)
Para starting: There was a dance at the Grand Hall.... Phillipp(a)
para starting: Harold was invited to her house.... no need for capitals in (i)ced and (s)ugar
The big night (was) here and he (was) nervous
Her dress (displayed?) more colours - rather than 'brought forth'?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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This is great, Karen! Your two main characters are beautifully described and the story swings along at a good pace with no hint of how it's going to end. In fact, I thought it might be one of your 'to be continued.' Excellent humour, particularly in the contrast between the two suitors. In short, a joy to read. Below some suggestions. Take care Debbie
In the para starting: But he wasn't the only one noticing.... I think I'd keep descriptions of the two men in the present tense (actions in the past)
Para starting: There was a dance at the Grand Hall.... Phillipp(a)
para starting: Harold was invited to her house.... no need for capitals in (i)ced and (s)ugar
The big night (was) here and he (was) nervous
Her dress (displayed?) more colours - rather than 'brought forth'?
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I am making a list of everyone's edits and will go back later. I edit many times, I have a spelling and grammer program. And it is pathetic. Thank you. Karen
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
oh stop it! LOL You got me completely with that one. Great ending. Totally unexpected. I see a few issues with their relationship lol Good job. ..
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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oh stop it! LOL You got me completely with that one. Great ending. Totally unexpected. I see a few issues with their relationship lol Good job. ..
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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well, they can watch out for each other. I had fun. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a charming story of trying to get the dainty darling while also being a kleptomaniac seems to lead to what seems like the prompting for the famous marriage proposal: "You're having a what?!".
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This is a charming story of trying to get the dainty darling while also being a kleptomaniac seems to lead to what seems like the prompting for the famous marriage proposal: "You're having a what?!".
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Nope! She handed him his bottle. And they had not had sex yet. Do the math. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from BethShelby
This is cute story. This klepto apparently wasn't aware he was taking things until he got home and checked his pockets. It sounds like he and have something in common. They can go to therapy sessions together.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This is cute story. This klepto apparently wasn't aware he was taking things until he got home and checked his pockets. It sounds like he and have something in common. They can go to therapy sessions together.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Not everyone here is as smart as you. Suprisingly, most folks thought she just reached into his pocket because she noticed his distress and wanted to get him his pill. You got it in one. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Haha poor guy sp much stress ...and she had the same klepto problem. What a nicev and unexpected twist.Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Haha poor guy sp much stress ...and she had the same klepto problem. What a nicev and unexpected twist.Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I am behind in my reviews, I owe you two. I keep a list. Karen
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Don't worry I am even behind my reviews and not enough excuses to write more mindful things. But if you want to check my blog here you go
https://wordpress.com/view/izabellab2000.wordpress.com
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you are so welcome
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you are so welcome, and don't worry I still have like 2861 reviews to see
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Yes, I have a lot to review myself. I have been on a writing binge lately. Karen
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written story about love and how begins and how it progresses through the months and years.
I enjoyed it very much listening to it and your writing is very well done. Patricia.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This is a beautifully written story about love and how begins and how it progresses through the months and years.
I enjoyed it very much listening to it and your writing is very well done. Patricia.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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The monster? What do you mean? Thanks for the read. Karen