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Comment from Jim Wile
Well done, Wendy. Such an interesting and amusing posting in so many respects. I'm one of those, like you, who doesn't do particularly well in crowds and prefer one-on-ones with people. I write much better than I actually speak and am not particularly quick-witted. But that's the wonderful thing about writing--you have the time to come up with the great line, the humorous plot, and the perfect words. And then you can take even more time to edit it, throw it all out, and start over if it isn't quite to your liking. You can't do that when talking.
I loved hearing about all your fears in anticipation of the event. I loved your little bit about Sunny not being able to eat without your presence and how you solved that. I loved your reference to the "teacher voice" who my wife often talks about, and how effective it can be. So many great parts to this posting.
I think all of us who have been reading, reviewing, and participating in the writing of this story have just had a blast with it. What a great group we have here at FanStory!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Well done, Wendy. Such an interesting and amusing posting in so many respects. I'm one of those, like you, who doesn't do particularly well in crowds and prefer one-on-ones with people. I write much better than I actually speak and am not particularly quick-witted. But that's the wonderful thing about writing--you have the time to come up with the great line, the humorous plot, and the perfect words. And then you can take even more time to edit it, throw it all out, and start over if it isn't quite to your liking. You can't do that when talking.
I loved hearing about all your fears in anticipation of the event. I loved your little bit about Sunny not being able to eat without your presence and how you solved that. I loved your reference to the "teacher voice" who my wife often talks about, and how effective it can be. So many great parts to this posting.
I think all of us who have been reading, reviewing, and participating in the writing of this story have just had a blast with it. What a great group we have here at FanStory!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Yes, it has been a huge amount of fun, as was the whole book. I never raised my voice as a teacher - there's no need, and it is an ineffective form of discipline. They generally responded to the "look" without even the need for a word to be said.
This has been the most memorable book on FS for me. I am glad too that you related well with my chapter - thank you so much for the wonderful review and six stars! I greatly value both.
Wendy
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhh, Wendy!!! You have outdone yourself!! From the quiet, anxious pre-meeting-everyone jitters to the Teacher who remands Jane Babies back into the service lift from when she came, you have written a masterpiece here. I could not love it more!!
Thank you for this perfect contribution to our tale. It was exactly what the story needed!!
xoxoxo
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Ohhh, Wendy!!! You have outdone yourself!! From the quiet, anxious pre-meeting-everyone jitters to the Teacher who remands Jane Babies back into the service lift from when she came, you have written a masterpiece here. I could not love it more!!
Thank you for this perfect contribution to our tale. It was exactly what the story needed!!
xoxoxo
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I am so glad you enjoyed it. The first diary entry was what I had already written, so I had to add another after the event. I couldn't quite discard the first because the second was a response to those feelings - and then of course I had to speak about the chaotic procedings! However, since you read it, I have tried to shorten mine a bit. Thank you so much for all the fun and laughter you have provided us with. Amazing! Whenever I see a new version by someone I already smile in anticipation!
Wendy
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Same!
It was so funny to watch the transformation of you. That original post had me ROARING (that was Gretchen's response, too) as you went through the list of every possible thing that could go wrong. Then - what a TURNAROUND when the actual party began, and you became the hero of the day by impressively putting Jane in her place!!! It was epically hilarious. Seriously. Just writing gold! xoxox
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Wendy!
What a delightful narrative to greet me this morning!
You certainly loved writing your chapter, and I enjoyed every morsel.
Such details! Wow!
And just when I thought I had reached the end, you shared an absolutely hilarious summary of the "Pre-Party!" Goodness!
And I have to point out this passage = really made me smile!
"Tom was so thankful we all still chose to attend that he freely offered ten sets of six stars per week to be offered for outstanding writing. He also said that he would get a different AI detector, and that he would reconsider the ratings system. He received loud cheers."
Thank you for your "viv..." rendition! :) :
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Good morning, Wendy!
What a delightful narrative to greet me this morning!
You certainly loved writing your chapter, and I enjoyed every morsel.
Such details! Wow!
And just when I thought I had reached the end, you shared an absolutely hilarious summary of the "Pre-Party!" Goodness!
And I have to point out this passage = really made me smile!
"Tom was so thankful we all still chose to attend that he freely offered ten sets of six stars per week to be offered for outstanding writing. He also said that he would get a different AI detector, and that he would reconsider the ratings system. He received loud cheers."
Thank you for your "viv..." rendition! :) :
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Yes, I loved writing it! I'm wondering if people should actually message Tom and ask when we will get our ten lots of six stars. Lol. (He did promise, did he not?!!) I couldn't resist a bit of humour at his expense.
Thanks so much for a wonderful review, and for the gift of one set of these valued six stars! I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh boy, this was fabulous! You had me dying with your personal angst and anxiety plus the teacher voice. Wasn't a teacher but it still haunts me to this day. This has been a fun journey but it's getting better with these added chapters. Thanks so much for joining in the fun. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Oh boy, this was fabulous! You had me dying with your personal angst and anxiety plus the teacher voice. Wasn't a teacher but it still haunts me to this day. This has been a fun journey but it's getting better with these added chapters. Thanks so much for joining in the fun. Gretchen
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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It's been a wonderful journey, full of fun and creativity and I congratulate you both! This "add a chapter" was a piece of extra brilliance, and it's super to see all the chapters by everyone, all so different. Thank you so much for a wonderful review, and for the reading pleasure you have provided the whole way through.
Wendy
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I see Rachael has drawn you in. I thought of it but wasn't mentioned thus I felt the guards at the door would have stopped me. j.k.
"I hope they don't all talk in limericks or haikus." Limericks I could deal with; haikus I usually leave be as writing 150 characters is thrice as long as the authoring author expends.
Some may say as you have "it is better to be thought a fool than to open one's mouth and prove one is, but I have a mouthful of foot when I speak verbally.
You surely took the challenge to task. The only 'Thought I Thought" (a release forthcoming today re; redundacy) I came up with was where was "The End" ending.
Do you think Dolly would speak sonnetly?
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I see Rachael has drawn you in. I thought of it but wasn't mentioned thus I felt the guards at the door would have stopped me. j.k.
"I hope they don't all talk in limericks or haikus." Limericks I could deal with; haikus I usually leave be as writing 150 characters is thrice as long as the authoring author expends.
Some may say as you have "it is better to be thought a fool than to open one's mouth and prove one is, but I have a mouthful of foot when I speak verbally.
You surely took the challenge to task. The only 'Thought I Thought" (a release forthcoming today re; redundacy) I came up with was where was "The End" ending.
Do you think Dolly would speak sonnetly?
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Lol. This was such a fun review, Tom. I am sure you would have been welcomed with open arms! Yes, my piece was a bit long ... a never-ending story. I have since then reduced it a bit. Many thanks.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
Firstly you did a first class job of writing this, and of course, it's a darn good entry in this great contest that Rachelle and Gretchen have arranged, it's a very tiring flight from Sydney or Melbourne to the US, a great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Firstly you did a first class job of writing this, and of course, it's a darn good entry in this great contest that Rachelle and Gretchen have arranged, it's a very tiring flight from Sydney or Melbourne to the US, a great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you Roy, for this super review. Yes, it is a long and tiring trip from Australia! It's been a fun book. Will you be adding a chapter?
Wendy
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I'm not sure Wendy.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I promise, Wendy, I will never ever use the word 'vivid' again! It's just that I try not to overuse 'evocative.' Your story, although lengthy, nevertheless kept me hooked all the way through with hilarious, often self-deprecating, humorous detail. It truly felt as though you were actually in New York and I had to double-check why I hadn't been invited:)) But I'm happy to be an onlooker because things clearly got out of hand, albeit resolving themselves into peaceful harmony. Well done, Wendy! Take care on your way back from the party:) Debbie x
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I promise, Wendy, I will never ever use the word 'vivid' again! It's just that I try not to overuse 'evocative.' Your story, although lengthy, nevertheless kept me hooked all the way through with hilarious, often self-deprecating, humorous detail. It truly felt as though you were actually in New York and I had to double-check why I hadn't been invited:)) But I'm happy to be an onlooker because things clearly got out of hand, albeit resolving themselves into peaceful harmony. Well done, Wendy! Take care on your way back from the party:) Debbie x
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Lol. It's crazy when writers can't use "vivid"!!!
I have since then reduced the length of mine. The funny thing is I'd already written the first diary entry before I even knew there would be a request for a chapter! I wrote to R asking if she would mind if I posted a story about my thoughts of going to this grand event. She messaged back to say "Don't post yet! I can't say anything more!" So mine ended up longer than it should have been because the second diary entry addressed some of my concerns about what I'd already written, but also needed to include the fiasco!! Thank you so much for the six stars. Now I am wondering if we should all message Tom asking when we'll start getting ten sets of six stars, as he promised!
Lol. Thanks again.
Wendy
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Oh I thought 'vivid' was a personal dislike of yours. I've used it countless time with no problem but I'll be wary now I'm being scrutinised by Big Brother:))
Comment from Begin Again
Wonderful, Wendy! I know you were spot-on when you talked about leaving Sunny behind. When I leave home, I always worry about the pups--they are my kids. Writing your memories in a diary was perfect. It was time to remember a wonderful moment with all our dear FanStorian friends. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Wonderful, Wendy! I know you were spot-on when you talked about leaving Sunny behind. When I leave home, I always worry about the pups--they are my kids. Writing your memories in a diary was perfect. It was time to remember a wonderful moment with all our dear FanStorian friends. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Yes, dogs don't understand and may feel they are being abandoned, and as he is a rehomed dog, he has a fear of being left behind. I'm glad you understand and feel the same. Thanks so much for your super review.
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So, YOU are the one who brought normalcy back to the event - I didn't realize that. Thank you, Wendy. And thank you for the extra six-pack we will get from Tom now. When does that kick in, by the way?
You did a great job with this; it was fun, and fit right into the narrative.
Thanks for taking part and sharing your perspective, which is quite different from Rachelle's and Gretchen's. They have some 'splaining to do!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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So, YOU are the one who brought normalcy back to the event - I didn't realize that. Thank you, Wendy. And thank you for the extra six-pack we will get from Tom now. When does that kick in, by the way?
You did a great job with this; it was fun, and fit right into the narrative.
Thanks for taking part and sharing your perspective, which is quite different from Rachelle's and Gretchen's. They have some 'splaining to do!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Lol. Wait till Tom starts getting lots of messages asking about when the ten sets of six stars begins. He won't understand that I just made it up on his behalf! Thanks so much for a super review. Yes, this has been a great deal of fun for all of us!
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
You believe that you have exactly captured the event. Wait, it was not real. But wait, you wrote it as if it was - and I believed it. But wait...
We derogatorily called one another shrimp a lot in our adolescence.
witty conversation without any editing. - Excellent point!
Thank Tom for me for the improvements he promised to FanStory.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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You believe that you have exactly captured the event. Wait, it was not real. But wait, you wrote it as if it was - and I believed it. But wait...
We derogatorily called one another shrimp a lot in our adolescence.
witty conversation without any editing. - Excellent point!
Thank Tom for me for the improvements he promised to FanStory.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Lol. I convinced you it was real? That's good! Thank you so much, and for the six beautiful stars! Very appreciative. Have to say I am still smiling at your entry, it was so very clever! Thanks again!
Wendy