Fashion Wasn't My Thing
My mom, my teacher and me.16 total reviews
Comment from Gayla putnam
The first part of the story flows nicely with your conflict with your mom over fashion. I smiled and nodded throughout. Then it sort of switches out of clothes and fashion, like you are writing about a totally different subject. Would it be better to have two separate stories? There are some spelling errors, Dolly Parton, private lessons (plural), and a few others you can clean up with proofreading. It's an interesting memoir, and if you tweak it a bit, it's a winner. gayla
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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The first part of the story flows nicely with your conflict with your mom over fashion. I smiled and nodded throughout. Then it sort of switches out of clothes and fashion, like you are writing about a totally different subject. Would it be better to have two separate stories? There are some spelling errors, Dolly Parton, private lessons (plural), and a few others you can clean up with proofreading. It's an interesting memoir, and if you tweak it a bit, it's a winner. gayla
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Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Gayla. I always have more than one incident taking place within the same time frame. This time there was only two. Regular readers of the book expect this to be the case. I think I've corrected most or the errors,
Comment from royowen
A marvellous post, I feel for you Beth, to have a hero let one down, particularly when young is heartbreaking, But, as they say, it's all part of that rich tapestry of life, I enjoyed this and read it out loud to my appreciative wife, who had been a beacon to her students over the years, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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A marvellous post, I feel for you Beth, to have a hero let one down, particularly when young is heartbreaking, But, as they say, it's all part of that rich tapestry of life, I enjoyed this and read it out loud to my appreciative wife, who had been a beacon to her students over the years, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : their (summons) summoned? 2 had other(s) students. 3: From Swe()den speak.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I really appreciate the six stars. I've corrected most of the errors. But I will reread it. I appreciate you pointing them out. I had cat walking in front of monitor distracting me.
Beth
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You dud a great job, there was another one I missed, but you'll find it.
Comment from mermaids
My mother dressed me until I was an adult, She was into clothes and fashion big time. I found clothes shopping boring. Your story is so enjoyable to read, I am sure many can relate. At least you managed to recite a story and won third place. I think many of us have had someone we looked up to disappoint us. Excellent writing here.
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My mother dressed me until I was an adult, She was into clothes and fashion big time. I found clothes shopping boring. Your story is so enjoyable to read, I am sure many can relate. At least you managed to recite a story and won third place. I think many of us have had someone we looked up to disappoint us. Excellent writing here.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
As ever, I enjoyed this story about your growing up but, sadly, Beth, I was distracted by the fact it clearly needed a proof-read before posting. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
clothes (weren't) a big priority...
Their mother summon(ed)
Dolly Part(o)n
Once when I happen(ed)...
(now that she's grown up) she does most of her shopping..
This is about a (a) teacher
I'd taken private lesson(s)
from her (to) do well
Sw(e)den
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As ever, I enjoyed this story about your growing up but, sadly, Beth, I was distracted by the fact it clearly needed a proof-read before posting. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
clothes (weren't) a big priority...
Their mother summon(ed)
Dolly Part(o)n
Once when I happen(ed)...
(now that she's grown up) she does most of her shopping..
This is about a (a) teacher
I'd taken private lesson(s)
from her (to) do well
Sw(e)den
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You were very considerate to your Mom and her opinions about your dress. My kids soon had their own style and I had no control over what they wore. I enjoy thrift stores and you can buy some real bargains in them. We have 8 charity shops in my town and their business is thriving. I also give lots of my clothes to charity shops. I love recycling old clothing and often the material is better quality than new stuff. It is a pity that the teacher you admired so much had let you down like this, she was the loser here as your enthusiasm was to be commended.
I enjoyed your honest story here Beth, this is a good read.
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Love Dolly x x x
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You were very considerate to your Mom and her opinions about your dress. My kids soon had their own style and I had no control over what they wore. I enjoy thrift stores and you can buy some real bargains in them. We have 8 charity shops in my town and their business is thriving. I also give lots of my clothes to charity shops. I love recycling old clothing and often the material is better quality than new stuff. It is a pity that the teacher you admired so much had let you down like this, she was the loser here as your enthusiasm was to be commended.
I enjoyed your honest story here Beth, this is a good read.
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(This is about (a) a teacher)
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from Begin Again
What a shame that a teacher would put herself in the position of hurting a student just because she wasn't working with her. That doesn't say anything good. You did your best, and she didn't come through. As for the clothes, I can relate to them. I always thought we were dirt poor because of the clothes I had to wear. When I learned my father could buy cars and pay cash, and take trips to Florida, I realized his priorities weren't how I dressed. Good one, Beth!
Smiles, Carol
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What a shame that a teacher would put herself in the position of hurting a student just because she wasn't working with her. That doesn't say anything good. You did your best, and she didn't come through. As for the clothes, I can relate to them. I always thought we were dirt poor because of the clothes I had to wear. When I learned my father could buy cars and pay cash, and take trips to Florida, I realized his priorities weren't how I dressed. Good one, Beth!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 01-Nov-2024