Immigration
A poem18 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
I enjoyed reading every line of this masterly crafted poem. The last four lines were most striking for me,
'Some men may think that they hold sway
to guide a sinking raft.
Without the Lord who knows the end
that route's a hellish path.'
That goes to buttress the fact that the wisdom of man is like foolishness before God. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, dear Roy.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I enjoyed reading every line of this masterly crafted poem. The last four lines were most striking for me,
'Some men may think that they hold sway
to guide a sinking raft.
Without the Lord who knows the end
that route's a hellish path.'
That goes to buttress the fact that the wisdom of man is like foolishness before God. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, dear Roy.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks for these wise comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Your poem is excellent to read on a Sunday. Its sentiments on God includes the idea that 'Our time is just a moment's pause' to point out that mortality is brief in the eternal scheme of things. That was my favorite line.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Your poem is excellent to read on a Sunday. Its sentiments on God includes the idea that 'Our time is just a moment's pause' to point out that mortality is brief in the eternal scheme of things. That was my favorite line.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks Crystie, for these very kind comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Roy,
This is an awesome poem. It rhymes nicely and tells the story to completion.
You are correct in the fact that if we don't let God rule are path we are going to end up somewhere hellish. It's sad to see so many young people to make their way. All they have to do is turn to God and he will give them everything they will ever need.
Another stellar poem as usual.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Roy,
This is an awesome poem. It rhymes nicely and tells the story to completion.
You are correct in the fact that if we don't let God rule are path we are going to end up somewhere hellish. It's sad to see so many young people to make their way. All they have to do is turn to God and he will give them everything they will ever need.
Another stellar poem as usual.
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks Cecilia, for these very kind comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from RJ Heritage
I think that the church desperately needs to put the teachings of God first, and not be distracted and become arrogant to the point of self leadership. Collective speaking, this very thing is already happening. I take comfort in the knowledge that Christ, and he alone is one who determines who is his church. Left up to us, this would be a disaster. While the church should show and have love, it is charged with showing that love in a manner that is pleasing to God. Christ says that His cleansing would firstly start within the body.
RJ
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I think that the church desperately needs to put the teachings of God first, and not be distracted and become arrogant to the point of self leadership. Collective speaking, this very thing is already happening. I take comfort in the knowledge that Christ, and he alone is one who determines who is his church. Left up to us, this would be a disaster. While the church should show and have love, it is charged with showing that love in a manner that is pleasing to God. Christ says that His cleansing would firstly start within the body.
RJ
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks RJ, for these fantastic comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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My pleasure
RJ
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Roy
This is very interesting and informative. I'm glad I decided to review this one.
I never feel wise, but I do feel like I was put on this earth to help others. I didn't know it before, but now I know that the wisdom to help them came from God not from me. I am just a child in service to God.
Here it sounds a little off.
"Without the Lord who knows the end
that route's a hellish path."
May I suggest
"Without the Lord who knows the end's
a route with hellish path."
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Hi Roy
This is very interesting and informative. I'm glad I decided to review this one.
I never feel wise, but I do feel like I was put on this earth to help others. I didn't know it before, but now I know that the wisdom to help them came from God not from me. I am just a child in service to God.
Here it sounds a little off.
"Without the Lord who knows the end
that route's a hellish path."
May I suggest
"Without the Lord who knows the end's
a route with hellish path."
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your help, but it doesn't sound a whiff off dear Pam, but thank you, you are indeed helpful, I wrote this in church yesterday it's the same meter as amazing grace, blessing Roy
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem carries such a powerful sense of urgency. The rhythm and flow is excellent. This feels like a call to action. It's a thought provoking poem that makes you think about what God wants for us. I'm moved by the intensity in your poem.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Your poem carries such a powerful sense of urgency. The rhythm and flow is excellent. This feels like a call to action. It's a thought provoking poem that makes you think about what God wants for us. I'm moved by the intensity in your poem.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks Michael, for these very kind comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Begin Again
I've seen people shift away from God's teachings, and it terrifies me. The simplest things regarding kindness, truth, and humility are disappearing--even here. I pray that somehow, the Lord's word can bring us back together and into his light.
Hugs, Carol
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I've seen people shift away from God's teachings, and it terrifies me. The simplest things regarding kindness, truth, and humility are disappearing--even here. I pray that somehow, the Lord's word can bring us back together and into his light.
Hugs, Carol
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks Carol, for these very kind comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Immigration, gets a power from the influx of humanity from wherever they were to wherever they are now. The key is to aim them towards God and the way will be made clear.
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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This poem, Immigration, gets a power from the influx of humanity from wherever they were to wherever they are now. The key is to aim them towards God and the way will be made clear.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks Bill, for these very kind comments and a great review, blessings Roy
