My Aunt Margaret
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait to hear how this man gets what he deserves. I know it will be a great post to read. I am enjoying this series. You're doing a good job writing it. Thank you for sharing your creative side with us.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I can't wait to hear how this man gets what he deserves. I know it will be a great post to read. I am enjoying this series. You're doing a good job writing it. Thank you for sharing your creative side with us.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I thank you for the read. I just dropped #4 and am working on #5 Karen
Comment from royowen
I just cam from reading a big case of an unreality work of someone who lost it, and her journey in literal terms was an out of body, but in body at the same time, now this one, heh heh, I think I'm going cuckoo, heh heh, I love this, I think, an excellent journey with Aunt Margaret, beautifully written Karen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I just cam from reading a big case of an unreality work of someone who lost it, and her journey in literal terms was an out of body, but in body at the same time, now this one, heh heh, I think I'm going cuckoo, heh heh, I love this, I think, an excellent journey with Aunt Margaret, beautifully written Karen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I thank you for the read. I just dropped #4 and am working on #5 Karen
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Well done
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Thank you
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, ma'am, aunt Margaret was a looker, and it sure appears you and her were from the same mold of get that sucker when you get the chance.
Good writing, as always! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Yes, ma'am, aunt Margaret was a looker, and it sure appears you and her were from the same mold of get that sucker when you get the chance.
Good writing, as always! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I thank you for the read. I love those shiny sixes. Does that make me vain? I just dropped #4 and am working on #5 Karen
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
ewwwww the chemical stew reminds me of the scene in Breaking Bad where they put the mixture in a bathtub to dissolve a body and it dissolves clear through the tub and floor, landing the whole mess in the living room below. lol You've got a very interesting character here and it was smart making her a private detective so that she had a cover for her other activities. cool story. enjoying it.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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ewwwww the chemical stew reminds me of the scene in Breaking Bad where they put the mixture in a bathtub to dissolve a body and it dissolves clear through the tub and floor, landing the whole mess in the living room below. lol You've got a very interesting character here and it was smart making her a private detective so that she had a cover for her other activities. cool story. enjoying it.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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The chemical stew came from "Blacklist"that stuff will eat through most anything. Glad you like it. I am reviewing now to get points to promote#4 Karen
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very fascinating story about your aunt Margaret and I am very much enjoyed listening to it. May you have a wonderful week and may you have a very good Thanksgiving? God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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This is a very fascinating story about your aunt Margaret and I am very much enjoyed listening to it. May you have a wonderful week and may you have a very good Thanksgiving? God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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The chemical stew came from "Blacklist"that stuff will eat through most anything. Glad you like it. I am reviewing now to get points to promote#4 Karen
Comment from Begin Again
Now you have the reader wondering if Aunt Margaret might have left you a bit too much information about disposing bodies or is it just your keen mind that wants to learn more and maybe dive into the life style too? Regardless the story is very entertaining. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Now you have the reader wondering if Aunt Margaret might have left you a bit too much information about disposing bodies or is it just your keen mind that wants to learn more and maybe dive into the life style too? Regardless the story is very entertaining. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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The chemical stew came from "Blacklist"that stuff will eat through most anything. Glad you like it. I am reviewing now to get points to promote#4 Karen
Comment from Tom Horonzy
a butt load of money??? I always thought that to be a boatload of money.
I got loss with your use of desiccator. The definition didn't clear the air but I suspect I got your drift that bodies disappear when covered in lime.
You paint a good picture with this chapter
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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a butt load of money??? I always thought that to be a boatload of money.
I got loss with your use of desiccator. The definition didn't clear the air but I suspect I got your drift that bodies disappear when covered in lime.
You paint a good picture with this chapter
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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A dessicator is a substance that sucks all the moisture out of something. Salt is one. Rice is sometimes used.
Thanks for the read. Happy turkey day. karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
But the ooze still contains DNA?
without seemingly a care in the world = This would read better with 'seemingly' and 'without' reversed.
...We became bored with board games - Maybe --- board games became tiresome???
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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But the ooze still contains DNA?
without seemingly a care in the world = This would read better with 'seemingly' and 'without' reversed.
...We became bored with board games - Maybe --- board games became tiresome???
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I already sent this once. I did edit. But only one of them. :-)
Comment from Tim Margetts
OK girl, so you know multiple ways to get rid of a body - permanently.
Is there something you want to tell me?
LOL I love how this is coming along.
Next please :)
Tim x
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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OK girl, so you know multiple ways to get rid of a body - permanently.
Is there something you want to tell me?
LOL I love how this is coming along.
Next please :)
Tim x
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I am reviewing to get promotion points to post. #4 is written. Thanks for the read. Karen
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I can't wait. Though I have to admit, most of my chapters and poems are posted without certificates.
Those who follow me read them and that is what is important to me, others pick up the odd chapter or poem and then may join my followers or not.
Such is life :)
Tim x
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Me too, but this is a serial and I want to build up interest. Lots of them will not have points. Karen
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Did you guess... I want the next bit
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Hi Karen,
You've introduced an interesting character, well, two really, and I think I can see the niece (unnamed so far) taking over where Aunt Margaret left off. You've talked a lot about all the houses and how they are furnished - in great detail! But that leaves us wondering about Margaret - you could tell us more about her and the niece's relationship with her. We get a sense that they are close, but I think their characters could be developed more. I think your readers would be way more interested in them than the furniture in their homes.
I look forward to reading your next chapter.
add shaped pine cones - change to odd-shaped pine cones
nineteen ninety three can be written 1993
aunt Margaret should be Aunt Margaret since "aunt" is part of her name here
Most of your narrative is in first person, but lines like "she loved her aunt but she had no idea," puts it in third person.
At the end of this chapter, you write "get their just rewards) but then you tell us it's one guy. "gets his just rewards"
xo
Pam
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Hi Karen,
You've introduced an interesting character, well, two really, and I think I can see the niece (unnamed so far) taking over where Aunt Margaret left off. You've talked a lot about all the houses and how they are furnished - in great detail! But that leaves us wondering about Margaret - you could tell us more about her and the niece's relationship with her. We get a sense that they are close, but I think their characters could be developed more. I think your readers would be way more interested in them than the furniture in their homes.
I look forward to reading your next chapter.
add shaped pine cones - change to odd-shaped pine cones
nineteen ninety three can be written 1993
aunt Margaret should be Aunt Margaret since "aunt" is part of her name here
Most of your narrative is in first person, but lines like "she loved her aunt but she had no idea," puts it in third person.
At the end of this chapter, you write "get their just rewards) but then you tell us it's one guy. "gets his just rewards"
xo
Pam
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the read, I am going to go edit. He has many names, I listed some of them, and all of the named people will get what's coming to them. Karen