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A poem about betrayal29 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A very thoughtful and insightful poem reflecting on the pain to another of one's own betrayal, and the burden of grief that brings. Your powerful poem with its strong, original, and imaginative imagery should do very well in the contest, and I send you my very best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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A very thoughtful and insightful poem reflecting on the pain to another of one's own betrayal, and the burden of grief that brings. Your powerful poem with its strong, original, and imaginative imagery should do very well in the contest, and I send you my very best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Wendy, that means so much. Thank you! Xoxo
Comment from forestport12
I loved all the verses. Starting with each one, it only pulled me further into this broken and beating heart. I thankful, I was given a second chance to return to the true love of my life. To this day, I can not expunge the painful letter she sent me, saying I broke her heart into pieces and scattered it to the wind. This poem of love lost and betrayal strikes a chord I'm sure, not with me only. The flow and the weaving like a string of pearls. Memorable verse about not being able to fix his path of cracks on concrete. What a visual. Exceptional work even if you offered 2 cents.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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I loved all the verses. Starting with each one, it only pulled me further into this broken and beating heart. I thankful, I was given a second chance to return to the true love of my life. To this day, I can not expunge the painful letter she sent me, saying I broke her heart into pieces and scattered it to the wind. This poem of love lost and betrayal strikes a chord I'm sure, not with me only. The flow and the weaving like a string of pearls. Memorable verse about not being able to fix his path of cracks on concrete. What a visual. Exceptional work even if you offered 2 cents.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much; that means a great deal to me. Xo
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Beautifully written poem must be very difficult to write and share. You did a wonderful job and expressed it so well. Your choice of words is phenomenal . Well written.
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This is a Beautifully written poem must be very difficult to write and share. You did a wonderful job and expressed it so well. Your choice of words is phenomenal . Well written.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, that means the world! Xo
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, sad, honest and painful. I found the
poem to be filled with strong emotions, are descriptive, and creative. Thank you for the author's notes. I pondered on the words of this poem and thought about how all of us at times make poor choices. May the remorse expressed so well throughout these words bring healing.
Hi Jessica, this is an excellent poem! Maria
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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The author's words are heartfelt, sad, honest and painful. I found the
poem to be filled with strong emotions, are descriptive, and creative. Thank you for the author's notes. I pondered on the words of this poem and thought about how all of us at times make poor choices. May the remorse expressed so well throughout these words bring healing.
Hi Jessica, this is an excellent poem! Maria
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Maria. That means the world! Xo
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This poem flows well with its rhymes at the end of each pair of tercets.
It fits the subject well. It shows how you broke a relationship that would have been good for you by picking at the relationship until it fell apart. How sad. It seems this is a long apology of a kind.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Hi Jessica,
This poem flows well with its rhymes at the end of each pair of tercets.
It fits the subject well. It shows how you broke a relationship that would have been good for you by picking at the relationship until it fell apart. How sad. It seems this is a long apology of a kind.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, Joan!
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from gramalot8
I can definitely feel the pain and remorse in your expressive words.
Hopefully you can forgive yourself and receive forgiveness as well. Thanks for sharing your heartfelt story with us.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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I can definitely feel the pain and remorse in your expressive words.
Hopefully you can forgive yourself and receive forgiveness as well. Thanks for sharing your heartfelt story with us.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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I truly appreciate it. Xoxo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you, Jess, for sharing your deeply moving and pleasingly fluent verse in stanzas of 6-7-10. The end rhymes on the last line of each pair of stanzas also enhance fluidity. The story conveys your guilt at betraying someone who loved you, the burden you still carry and your concluding hope that he'll be finally released from the hurt caused to him. The verse is mesmerisingly beautiful. You have such a gift for engaging the reader fully in the complexities of emotion. My favourite stanza is #4. Well worthy of a six which sadly I don't have, this is a strong contender. And I wish you luck in the contest! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Jess, for sharing your deeply moving and pleasingly fluent verse in stanzas of 6-7-10. The end rhymes on the last line of each pair of stanzas also enhance fluidity. The story conveys your guilt at betraying someone who loved you, the burden you still carry and your concluding hope that he'll be finally released from the hurt caused to him. The verse is mesmerisingly beautiful. You have such a gift for engaging the reader fully in the complexities of emotion. My favourite stanza is #4. Well worthy of a six which sadly I don't have, this is a strong contender. And I wish you luck in the contest! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, my dear friend. Your encouraging words and generosity mean the world to me! Xo
Comment from Harry Craft
A great poem for betrayal. I truly enjoyed reading this on such a real subject that many or all of us might experience at some time in our lives. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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A great poem for betrayal. I truly enjoyed reading this on such a real subject that many or all of us might experience at some time in our lives. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Harry! Xo
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Roger that!
Comment from June Sargent
No, the pages can't be torn. Perhaps they shouldn't be. After all, who you are today is the sum total of all you have experienced. The good, the bad and the ugly. Thank you for your honesty. It's as refreshing as fields of clover.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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No, the pages can't be torn. Perhaps they shouldn't be. After all, who you are today is the sum total of all you have experienced. The good, the bad and the ugly. Thank you for your honesty. It's as refreshing as fields of clover.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, June. Your review is a poem in itself and very much appreciated! Xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We may break someone's heart without realising it or intending to harm, but we bear the weight of their grief sometimes. A deeply moving poem Jessica, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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We may break someone's heart without realising it or intending to harm, but we bear the weight of their grief sometimes. A deeply moving poem Jessica, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, dear Dolly.
