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Comment from butterflykiss
Those poor girls. Hope they get found before the wildfire get them. This is a page turner and its flowing very well. The characters are stronger and enjoyable. Looking forward to the next installment. I didn't find any mistakes.
Good luck.
Butterflykiss
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Those poor girls. Hope they get found before the wildfire get them. This is a page turner and its flowing very well. The characters are stronger and enjoyable. Looking forward to the next installment. I didn't find any mistakes.
Good luck.
Butterflykiss
Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hi there!
Yes, they have to get out of there before the fire surrounds them.
So glad you are still with me on this one. Sooo appreciate your wonderful comments and top rating<~>
Gayle
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Hello,
I'm so glad they get out.
Good luck.
Looking forward to the next installment.
Butterflykiss
Comment from Dave M
Gayle,
Yep! There's some smoke. This is a well-written chapter, without any problems that I could find. About not drinking the water: I've heard that giardia is a widespread parasite in Western streams, and it is not safe to drink even a snowmelt stream. Is this it, or are there other concerns?
Dave M
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Gayle,
Yep! There's some smoke. This is a well-written chapter, without any problems that I could find. About not drinking the water: I've heard that giardia is a widespread parasite in Western streams, and it is not safe to drink even a snowmelt stream. Is this it, or are there other concerns?
Dave M
Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hey Dave,
Yes, the word is that there are several unfriendly buggies that can give your innards a run for their money, in a manner of speaking. I don't know if they're fatal, but I've heard admonitions of the strongest to NOT drink the water. 'Course, our Indians drink it with no problem. Just like the Mexicans drink theirs.
All amounts to what the insides consider friendly, I guess. :-)
Thanks, my friend,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Max Edon
I haven't read the previous chapters, but I thought that this was very exciting and well-written. The characters are very interesting.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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I haven't read the previous chapters, but I thought that this was very exciting and well-written. The characters are very interesting.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hey Max,
So nice to see you again. You drop by from time-to-time, and it's always a pleasure, my friend.
Thanks for the grat R&R and don't be a stranger, hear?
Gayle
Comment from Korton
Excellent chapter. Somehow, I just knew there would be a fire in the area. What I don't understand, though, is, they know Sam is dead, they know that the girls have escaped, they know that Cricket is tracking. Why is there not a chopper already in the air over the area? Very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Excellent chapter. Somehow, I just knew there would be a fire in the area. What I don't understand, though, is, they know Sam is dead, they know that the girls have escaped, they know that Cricket is tracking. Why is there not a chopper already in the air over the area? Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hey Frank,
Well you know what they say: It's summer, California must be on fire! In addition, the San'tanas bring out the nutjobs, true story. There's something about the hot winds, just makes ya crazy.
Okay, the chopper. That's gonna happen pretty soon, once Dana, the cop, gets her guys in play. Jim and Lenny are only PI's. Not the most popular folks with the cops.
Now, we're going to visit some of the supporting cast in a moment, here, and you'll see what I mean. Plus, you don't want this to end, do you? Not really!
Hugs,
Gayle
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Yeah, I remember years ago, every time Dr. George showed up on TV and announced the santanas, every fire bug in LA and Orange counties headed for the hills.
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Oh, man, you are soooo right. It used to make me so crazy. I used to..still do, actually, talk back to the newscasters.
"Like, why are you egging these guys on, you idiot?"
It's a psychosis and about a combustible as eight inches of compost or the floor of a forest that hasn't seen fire in thirty years. Inferno! Hold onto your hat!
G
Comment from Stuart
Hi there and thanks, I'm new to this site and this is my first review. Leaping into Madhouse at chapter 15 is rash but I'm glad that I did. Your descriptions of the scenes and the speed of the dialogue drove my curiosity and pulled me right in there.
I won't make any comment on the whole piece as I think it only proper that I should read all the previous chapters.
I'm looking forward to finding out what has happened previously to bring this chapter more understanding.
Cheers, Stuart.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hi there and thanks, I'm new to this site and this is my first review. Leaping into Madhouse at chapter 15 is rash but I'm glad that I did. Your descriptions of the scenes and the speed of the dialogue drove my curiosity and pulled me right in there.
I won't make any comment on the whole piece as I think it only proper that I should read all the previous chapters.
I'm looking forward to finding out what has happened previously to bring this chapter more understanding.
Cheers, Stuart.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Well, Stuart, so nice to meet you. This is the best site, you're gonna love it. I've been here four years and the stuff I've learaned...whew!
Thank you so much, hope you get to come back for another visit. I'll be looking for your stuff!
Gayle
Comment from c_lucas
Terrific work! The opening paragraph is an attention getter. Introducing the forest fire at the end reminded me of the old serials in my youth where the hero/heroine was in a very dangerous situations. We kids didn't mind that the next segment had little to do with the previous danger. I like the way that you are showing that the girls know something about survival techniques. You keep the suspense at a high level I found no SPAGs. Keep up the good work.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Terrific work! The opening paragraph is an attention getter. Introducing the forest fire at the end reminded me of the old serials in my youth where the hero/heroine was in a very dangerous situations. We kids didn't mind that the next segment had little to do with the previous danger. I like the way that you are showing that the girls know something about survival techniques. You keep the suspense at a high level I found no SPAGs. Keep up the good work.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hi Lucas,
Well, what wonderful comments. I can't thank you enough for the R&R. I hope to see you again soon. Have a great weekend,
Gayle
Comment from Johnny Carwash
Yet another super-strong chapter, Gayle. You know how to keep your audience on this fast-paced roller coaster. Keep up the excellent work.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Yet another super-strong chapter, Gayle. You know how to keep your audience on this fast-paced roller coaster. Keep up the excellent work.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hi Johnny,
Thanks so much for your continuing support and great R&R. It is so appreciated!
Have a wonderful weekend,
Gayle