Taking Census
Free Verse: No Punctuation:39 total reviews
Comment from benjan
Wonderful, fluid poem of reflection. I like the way it reads with the triplets in so many places. I also like the break that you provide with 'I lack.' What I really like is the ability to say 'Yes, I agree with you 100 percent.' This poem struck a chord within. I am stingy with my stars, but this is so deserving of a 6.
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Wonderful, fluid poem of reflection. I like the way it reads with the triplets in so many places. I also like the break that you provide with 'I lack.' What I really like is the ability to say 'Yes, I agree with you 100 percent.' This poem struck a chord within. I am stingy with my stars, but this is so deserving of a 6.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Bryana
This was very clever Diane, it made think it's time I do the same, take a Census of my own life and organize it better starting by the very first thought. Yes, I do have more than I need, it's time I give it to someone that need it.
I enjoyed your poem very much. Love, Ana
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This was very clever Diane, it made think it's time I do the same, take a Census of my own life and organize it better starting by the very first thought. Yes, I do have more than I need, it's time I give it to someone that need it.
I enjoyed your poem very much. Love, Ana
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Mrs KT - 'Taking Census' is a very appropriate title. That is a great checklist of the salient issues in your life. Well written and I enjoyed it. Charlie
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Mrs KT - 'Taking Census' is a very appropriate title. That is a great checklist of the salient issues in your life. Well written and I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a lovely piece
of verse -- with a smooth
flow throughout and I love
the presentation - something
a little different.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
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This is a lovely piece
of verse -- with a smooth
flow throughout and I love
the presentation - something
a little different.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from prodigal
I liked this poem. I think you did a great job organizing your thoughts. I liked the transitions in the poem. Because of the transitions, this poem flowed very well. It was easy to follow and well penned. Good job- Sam
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I liked this poem. I think you did a great job organizing your thoughts. I liked the transitions in the poem. Because of the transitions, this poem flowed very well. It was easy to follow and well penned. Good job- Sam
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from bkrighter
This is a wonderful poem, clearly the product of some time spent in a self-assessment. I don't like the word "census" in the title. I know what it means and it is not inappropriate, but it doesn't have quite the right sound to my ear, but I am not sure what I would use to replace it. "Taking Stock" is a little old and tired as an expression. Maybe "Personal Inventory" or "Who I Am"
Anyway, I enjoyed the poem.
Steve
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This is a wonderful poem, clearly the product of some time spent in a self-assessment. I don't like the word "census" in the title. I know what it means and it is not inappropriate, but it doesn't have quite the right sound to my ear, but I am not sure what I would use to replace it. "Taking Stock" is a little old and tired as an expression. Maybe "Personal Inventory" or "Who I Am"
Anyway, I enjoyed the poem.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
"I have no answers for The why of loss The when of pain The how of regret The what if of perhaps" This was a very interesting, contemplative piece. well done
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"I have no answers for The why of loss The when of pain The how of regret The what if of perhaps" This was a very interesting, contemplative piece. well done
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from dportwood
I like your presentation and the structure with the repetitive format. Your inventory of self is well thought out and pleasant to read. Nicely done.
Duane
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I like your presentation and the structure with the repetitive format. Your inventory of self is well thought out and pleasant to read. Nicely done.
Duane
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a wonderful thought-provoking piece of well written poetry Mrs KT. Each and every line is perfect. Thanks for sharing this with us
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Wow what a wonderful thought-provoking piece of well written poetry Mrs KT. Each and every line is perfect. Thanks for sharing this with us
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Aussie
Excellent work; if everyone thought the way you did the world would be a better place. I liked your poem of self-improvement and your expression of the tools that you use on your spiritual journey; well done. To live every day as as a blessing is more than enough. Your treasures are in heaven not on earth and everything you own will be forfeit to the Crown in the last days. Great poem, loved it.
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Excellent work; if everyone thought the way you did the world would be a better place. I liked your poem of self-improvement and your expression of the tools that you use on your spiritual journey; well done. To live every day as as a blessing is more than enough. Your treasures are in heaven not on earth and everything you own will be forfeit to the Crown in the last days. Great poem, loved it.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
