Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

Sandi's passing is a tragedy. But when Lee read the letter he realized he had taken a wrong path in life. Sandi's letter made him realize that he needed to make admends with his wife.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Readywriter Thanks for understanding the emotions and character flaws in Part 2. I appreciate your review. Carol

Comment from dmjones

Excellent

Hi Carol, This is a good installment. I can't wait for the next one.

This one sentence I had trouble with it doesn't seem complete.
"She just hated being alone and their facade of a marriage."
Two ways to fix it-- alone with their-- or-- and hated their

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

dmjones You are so right. I guess when I reread it I must have said it in my head. I just hate that when my head is smarter than my fingers...lol And when my fingers get carried away and just type any old thing. Thanks for the review. I hope to get the final part posted today. Carol

Comment from Phil Kitom

Excellent

A chapter that includes much violence
between husband and wife that could
easily have escalated to murder.
This letter from the past may be his
salvation or could it be his death
sentence, his wife may be waiting to
complete the job... Who knows, but
you have left me curious... Well done...

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Phil

Thanks so much for the kind review. I am glad that I peaked your curiosity. I hope to post part 3 today. Thanks again
Carol

Comment from patwannabe

Excellent

Carol, this is still high interest. I'm praying that Rebecca doesn't do what he told her to do, that is, "take a handful of those pills". Could we please have a happy ending? No more drinking, gambling and maybe even a job? That would be wonderful :-) Hey, I could write it for you. Take care, and hurry up, pat

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Pat...God has a way of taking care of things sometimes...in the least unexpected ways. Rebecca and Lee had strayed far from the expected path. Thanks for the review and for continuing to enjoy the story. Thanks again Carol

Comment from Janilou

Excellent

I really love your story. What a powerful message. Can't wait to read part three! I didn't find anything that needed correcting in this chapter. Well done!

Jani

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Jani

Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I shall try and have Part 3 tomorrow. I appreciate your comments. Carol

Comment from Jnetgame

Excellent

Great second part. You did a great job describing the scene with Rebecca and Lee.


I learned about God and I learned about loving yourself(myself might be better here). I learned about caring for the people around you(me) and giving of yourself(myself).

Thoughts of Rebecca lying on the floor flash(flashed)through his head.
Keep up the great writing.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Jnetgame I changed those things once but I guess I must have goofed up on saving them. Feeble old m ind of mine! Thanks for telling me again. Appreciate the review. Carol

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

I am by now afraid Lee cannot make it to make amends with Rebecca, bearing in mind the title of your story. But it's up to you to finish it, Carol, I'm not going to influence you. The suspense is on the rise in this chapter!

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Belinda It has a very twisted ending I think. Now I just have to get enough coins to post it tomorrow. The evil of money... Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from L.lora

Excellent

A very intense writing filled with many different emotions. Most enjoyable, easy flowing and consistant. My only small nit is the use of the cliche', "If looks could kill, he knew he'd be dead right now." Perhaps you might be able to revamp the expression so it isn't a cliche' but something of your own making, probably just me and is just my opinion. Thanks for a solid good read, looking forward to part 3. Lora

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Lora...Thanks for reading and enjoying the story. I will certainly take another look at that line and see if I can find something as suitable. I appreciate the review. Carol

Comment from wierdgrace

Excellent

Great story, the characters, the story line, wow, I can not wait to read your next chapter, I see no errors, and no revisions, the excited parts makes me what to read on, smooth reading all through it chapter.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Wierdgrace

Thanks for the wonderful review. I am glad that you enjoyed the story so far. The ending is a kicker, I think. Thanks again. Carol

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with a strong emotional impact. We can destroy our lives with our actions, but some are given a second chance. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009

Charlie

Thanks for the review. Some people do get a second chance after they screw up and others...well, things happen. Thanks again. Carol

reply by c_lucas on 14-Aug-2009

You're welcome, Carol. Charlie