Toxic Transference
A bit of free verse on negativity and wasted time106 total reviews
Comment from Soulester
Your free verse poem sums it up very neatly, Earthwriter, and "Toxic Transference" is the perfect title. Your poem reads well, and reminds us to focus on the good. Excellent! Mary
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Your free verse poem sums it up very neatly, Earthwriter, and "Toxic Transference" is the perfect title. Your poem reads well, and reminds us to focus on the good. Excellent! Mary
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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thank you
Comment from Writeaway...
Excellent poem Earthwriter, you show talent boyond words, I very much enjoyed reading, excellent job, ten out of ten, well done.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Excellent poem Earthwriter, you show talent boyond words, I very much enjoyed reading, excellent job, ten out of ten, well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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thank you so much my friend glad you enjoyed it thank you for the high praise
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A good piece of verse,
Monte - thought-provoking.
I agree, what's the good of complaining -
the fact that we are alive and kicking is
a real blessing, and listening to someone
elses problems can make you realize yours
isn't so bad afterall.
We all need to think of our cup as being
half full and not half empty.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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A good piece of verse,
Monte - thought-provoking.
I agree, what's the good of complaining -
the fact that we are alive and kicking is
a real blessing, and listening to someone
elses problems can make you realize yours
isn't so bad afterall.
We all need to think of our cup as being
half full and not half empty.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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thanks so much Margeret
Comment from Nicky B
Having a good bitch is necessary but toxic once it becomes habitual. Bitching for bitching sake makes one forget to be grateful for what one has. Thanks for reminding me.
Take care.
Nick.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Having a good bitch is necessary but toxic once it becomes habitual. Bitching for bitching sake makes one forget to be grateful for what one has. Thanks for reminding me.
Take care.
Nick.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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not a problem my friend yes i agree letting off steam is good but not making a daily routine of it
Comment from skye
I really like the progression within your lines... negative to positive.
I always like a positive ending, it allows the reader to go forward.
Very well constructed, with creativity and insight.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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I really like the progression within your lines... negative to positive.
I always like a positive ending, it allows the reader to go forward.
Very well constructed, with creativity and insight.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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thanks a lot
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Wow!
I loved your poem.
I can see why it was recognized as an all time best.
Great image, and visual presentation.
Great message.
Wouldn't it be nice if positive words and actions, were the norm instead of negative?
Great, great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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Wow!
I loved your poem.
I can see why it was recognized as an all time best.
Great image, and visual presentation.
Great message.
Wouldn't it be nice if positive words and actions, were the norm instead of negative?
Great, great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009
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thank you so much
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You're welcome.
Kathryn
Comment from Chalice
I love the flow of concepts in this. Free flowing verse is my favorite style, but it's as common as fleas and houseflies, and to make good verse takes a lot of hard work, and a generous helping of talent. Clearly, you have both in place.
This is really good stuff.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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I love the flow of concepts in this. Free flowing verse is my favorite style, but it's as common as fleas and houseflies, and to make good verse takes a lot of hard work, and a generous helping of talent. Clearly, you have both in place.
This is really good stuff.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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I have changed the ending please re-review I value your opinion and thank you very much for the honest review
Monte
Comment from Arkine
Well that's some pretty good advice and I think a lot of problems would be solved if people would just try to solve them rather than cuss and discuss but do nothing. Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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Well that's some pretty good advice and I think a lot of problems would be solved if people would just try to solve them rather than cuss and discuss but do nothing. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend
Comment from barbara.wilkey
As part of our science unit in First grade we do an extensive study of our environment an how important it is to recycle. We try to impress upon the kids that even a 6 year old can improve the environment. I often feel it falls on death ears, because no matter how hard we try we can't ge the parents involved.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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As part of our science unit in First grade we do an extensive study of our environment an how important it is to recycle. We try to impress upon the kids that even a 6 year old can improve the environment. I often feel it falls on death ears, because no matter how hard we try we can't ge the parents involved.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend maybe show them before and after picures of the Thailand tsnami
Comment from Rod55
Excellent work portraying the negatives we are surrounded by everyday, yet offering viable alternatives--"refocus energy, life appreciation, new perspectives". Indeed, we all have choices, including how we choose to perceive circumstances. I like that you did not include a lot of vague, abstract descriptions of the topics--poverty, pain, etc., that no one except the author understands. Writers sometimes try to get too deep conveying their ideas about worldly issues and leave the reader scratching their head saying, "Huh?"
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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Excellent work portraying the negatives we are surrounded by everyday, yet offering viable alternatives--"refocus energy, life appreciation, new perspectives". Indeed, we all have choices, including how we choose to perceive circumstances. I like that you did not include a lot of vague, abstract descriptions of the topics--poverty, pain, etc., that no one except the author understands. Writers sometimes try to get too deep conveying their ideas about worldly issues and leave the reader scratching their head saying, "Huh?"
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks for the review my friend
