When Love Lies
Frank Sinatra style song17 total reviews
Comment from DeboraDyess
Very nicely done. I could hear ol' Frank crooning this one. Great job, like the verses and chorus, could feel the flow of music. Best of luck in the contes,t Deb
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Very nicely done. I could hear ol' Frank crooning this one. Great job, like the verses and chorus, could feel the flow of music. Best of luck in the contes,t Deb
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Hi Deb, Glad you enjoyed my song. If you could hear Frank singing it then I know I did something right. Appreciate your kind words very much! Thank you Helvi :o)
Comment from darkgreennights
Now that was one sad love song. I LOVE sad love songs! This was a very fine entry and a beautiful redo of a classic piece of music, I'm clapping but you cant hear me!
Kathleen
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Now that was one sad love song. I LOVE sad love songs! This was a very fine entry and a beautiful redo of a classic piece of music, I'm clapping but you cant hear me!
Kathleen
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
Comment from grassroots08
That's when your heart starts tearing
Into a million (tears.)??
Did you mean to change the spelling in this last treatment? In a song, unless someone is looking closely at the words they are singing, the word change has no meaning as it sounds the same as it is being sung. The audience will not know which word (tiers) or (tears) you are singing.
P.S. This was a great song and it was easy to follow. Best to you in the contest, my friend. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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That's when your heart starts tearing
Into a million (tears.)??
Did you mean to change the spelling in this last treatment? In a song, unless someone is looking closely at the words they are singing, the word change has no meaning as it sounds the same as it is being sung. The audience will not know which word (tiers) or (tears) you are singing.
P.S. This was a great song and it was easy to follow. Best to you in the contest, my friend. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Hi Don, I realized I might be causing a problem but it makes sense which ever way you read it. "Tearing" is tair- ing and not tear-ing as in tears. What I was saying was your heart is tair-ing in to a million tiers as in levels or pieces. I could be wrong but it seems to work well with "tearing meant as tears welling up and with tiers as tears as in teardrops. Hope that doesn't sound to confusing. I'm glad you enjoyed my song. Thanks for the wonderful review my friend and contest wishes, Helvi :o)
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There may or may not be a problem here, but the fact that it threw up a flag(albiet a small one) is cause to question its use. I loved the piece anyway - you know that. Cheers, Don
Comment from mycrob2
I really enjoyed this piece. Very moving. I like the lied/died endings throughout- cements the poem together very nicely. The rhyming and tempo are outstanding. A great intertwining of new work with an old classic!
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I really enjoyed this piece. Very moving. I like the lied/died endings throughout- cements the poem together very nicely. The rhyming and tempo are outstanding. A great intertwining of new work with an old classic!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
Comment from Kingsland
I just loved how you spelled the word tiers in two different ways to add meaning to this piece of poetic song fare. This was just a well written piece of poetic verve that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
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I just loved how you spelled the word tiers in two different ways to add meaning to this piece of poetic song fare. This was just a well written piece of poetic verve that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
Comment from Ms. Gray
This is really good. I love Frank Sinatra songs and you really have gotten into his spirit. I like the stanza No hope in pretending the best. Good luck in the contest.
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This is really good. I love Frank Sinatra songs and you really have gotten into his spirit. I like the stanza No hope in pretending the best. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
Comment from missy98writer
Awesome poem I give you 5 stars. I loved that it sounded exactly like a song in my head. I loved the art work or photo you used for this short 3/5/3 Haiku Poem.
Peace out. . . Nichole McKnight AKA Melissa
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Awesome poem I give you 5 stars. I loved that it sounded exactly like a song in my head. I loved the art work or photo you used for this short 3/5/3 Haiku Poem.
Peace out. . . Nichole McKnight AKA Melissa
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2009